God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from royowen
Actually I think you could probably have presented this as being a deep, meaningful poem, and perhaps received many plaudits from people who thought there was something profound contained in its depths, but perhaps silly was a better word, well done Al, blessings, Roy
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Actually I think you could probably have presented this as being a deep, meaningful poem, and perhaps received many plaudits from people who thought there was something profound contained in its depths, but perhaps silly was a better word, well done Al, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from victor 66
It would be very difficult not to want to "live there". I think you've covered all the bases of what I would describe as being heaven. You'd think with all our knowledge, technology and the increase of the human brain pan, we'd be able to achieve most of what's in your poem. Alas, I could be wrong about the "increase of human brain pan". There in lies "the rub".
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It would be very difficult not to want to "live there". I think you've covered all the bases of what I would describe as being heaven. You'd think with all our knowledge, technology and the increase of the human brain pan, we'd be able to achieve most of what's in your poem. Alas, I could be wrong about the "increase of human brain pan". There in lies "the rub".
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from His Grayness
I gladly offer my stars to this very unusual, unique, and rare work of abstract creativity! The picture is very effective and although very strange and uncommon, this writing does achieve good reader grip and the overall packaging of this work is excellent so I have no suggestions to improve it in any way and thank this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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I gladly offer my stars to this very unusual, unique, and rare work of abstract creativity! The picture is very effective and although very strange and uncommon, this writing does achieve good reader grip and the overall packaging of this work is excellent so I have no suggestions to improve it in any way and thank this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Raul1
Yeah, ha ha. The poem is so funny that it made me read the book Alice in Wonderland. A little humor there. You did a very good silly poem. Good for you! I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest!
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Yeah, ha ha. The poem is so funny that it made me read the book Alice in Wonderland. A little humor there. You did a very good silly poem. Good for you! I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from SLMorrical
Loved this. It flowed very well and was well written. I could see a vast wilderness of nature with peace and love and no violence. I want to move there. Well done. Keep writing.
I liked this very much. It is cute and had me wondering where was there? I would love to move and be free. Wonderful job. It flows well. It was an easy to follow read.
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Loved this. It flowed very well and was well written. I could see a vast wilderness of nature with peace and love and no violence. I want to move there. Well done. Keep writing.
I liked this very much. It is cute and had me wondering where was there? I would love to move and be free. Wonderful job. It flows well. It was an easy to follow read.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Ogden
Alcreator Litt Dear,
I find your poem well-written, impressively interesting (earning FIVE stars, not SIX) while entertaining many questionable ideas and principles. With all due respect, I must say I never would want even to visit your 'there.' (Who decides who is unwise, or what constitutes allowable fair expression?) With only one religion, everything owned by the state, and no unwise men, it, in my opinion, is quite the opposite of paradise.
Don
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Alcreator Litt Dear,
I find your poem well-written, impressively interesting (earning FIVE stars, not SIX) while entertaining many questionable ideas and principles. With all due respect, I must say I never would want even to visit your 'there.' (Who decides who is unwise, or what constitutes allowable fair expression?) With only one religion, everything owned by the state, and no unwise men, it, in my opinion, is quite the opposite of paradise.
Don
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I really like that you just expressed yourself in the way that you wanted to without any limitations or restrictions of any kind. It's original and interesting, and light hearted which is what humorous poetry should be. Nice job.
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I really like that you just expressed yourself in the way that you wanted to without any limitations or restrictions of any kind. It's original and interesting, and light hearted which is what humorous poetry should be. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'd like to move there! It sounds like paradise, perhaps it is. In which case, hopefully we'll all move there. Or not. It might be a 'silly' poem, but it did make sense. Just read it as it is and I enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
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I'd like to move there! It sounds like paradise, perhaps it is. In which case, hopefully we'll all move there. Or not. It might be a 'silly' poem, but it did make sense. Just read it as it is and I enjoyed it. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from robyn corum
hahahahaha!
It almost sounded like heaven until you added the working part. *smile* When I was reading about having no capital punishment or people going to jail for life, you had me wondering, until I understood that those folks weren't invited. Nice! I think I would enjoy living in your new place. Where do you sign up??
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hahahahaha!
It almost sounded like heaven until you added the working part. *smile* When I was reading about having no capital punishment or people going to jail for life, you had me wondering, until I understood that those folks weren't invited. Nice! I think I would enjoy living in your new place. Where do you sign up??
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from hari anand
Dear sir I like your poem which you referred to as silly but it is like a dream place built in the poets mind which is free from any vice just like the picture above..Perfect.
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Dear sir I like your poem which you referred to as silly but it is like a dream place built in the poets mind which is free from any vice just like the picture above..Perfect.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
