A Breeze Swept Through
A Quatern126 total reviews
Comment from Pyrrho
I enjoyed the hint of an important message in this breezy poem which brings such pleasure to your readers. I can almost feel the slight movement of my arm-hairs as the breeze sweeps through.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed the hint of an important message in this breezy poem which brings such pleasure to your readers. I can almost feel the slight movement of my arm-hairs as the breeze sweeps through.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Pyrrho, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - This is a lovely quatern in good rhyming couplets. Lovely words and the perfect picture enhances your work. A very nice read - Kind regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke - This is a lovely quatern in good rhyming couplets. Lovely words and the perfect picture enhances your work. A very nice read - Kind regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dean Kuch
I can't recall what this style of poetry is called, what the name of the format you've written it in is. But, I've always enjoyed those carefully placed, repetitive lines. That much, I do recall.
With that being said, this was beautifully written, Brooke. So expressive, one can almost feel the soothing, subtle kiss of the breezes as it caresses and embraces our tingling skin.
The alluring, yet captivating staunchness of the withered old oak's resistance to be swayed while everything else around it was stirred gently by the blowing breezes was a profound poetic statement to stand firm, steadfast, even though all around you seems to be swayed.
I need not go into detail about how well it rhymed, nor delve into specifics about how technically perfect this was. That's always a given when coming from you.
Wonderfully done, so sorry, no sixes. Well, it is Saturday, after all...:]~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I can't recall what this style of poetry is called, what the name of the format you've written it in is. But, I've always enjoyed those carefully placed, repetitive lines. That much, I do recall.
With that being said, this was beautifully written, Brooke. So expressive, one can almost feel the soothing, subtle kiss of the breezes as it caresses and embraces our tingling skin.
The alluring, yet captivating staunchness of the withered old oak's resistance to be swayed while everything else around it was stirred gently by the blowing breezes was a profound poetic statement to stand firm, steadfast, even though all around you seems to be swayed.
I need not go into detail about how well it rhymed, nor delve into specifics about how technically perfect this was. That's always a given when coming from you.
Wonderfully done, so sorry, no sixes. Well, it is Saturday, after all...:]~Dean
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I mention the style in my description line - it's a quatern
I appreciate your thoughtful wish for a sixth star, my friend - I never have any left by Saturday either :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke, and thanks. Shows how often I read those descriptions, huh? LOL... :O
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You are not the only one who doesn't read them and author notes. I get asked questions I've already answered almost every day of the week. LOL
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Yeah, me too!
Comment from Domino 2
I love the poetic and sensual word, 'brushed', Brooke, and I've used it a couple of times lately.
Top and imaginative alliteration in 'languid leaf'.
'against a breeze that lacked wind's will' - very clever line.
Powerful repeating lines.
Top enjambment and sweet personification in this excellent read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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I love the poetic and sensual word, 'brushed', Brooke, and I've used it a couple of times lately.
Top and imaginative alliteration in 'languid leaf'.
'against a breeze that lacked wind's will' - very clever line.
Powerful repeating lines.
Top enjambment and sweet personification in this excellent read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Ray. I've always known from your Ollie Owl stories that you're a sensitive soul. ;-) Brooke
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hahaha! xx
Comment from Ekim777
Don't think I'm plaguing you but your unusual verse form is prompting me to try my luck with my favorite verse form, the kingly pontoum. I love it when the repeated line falls into place and makes perfect sense. I always admire your mathematical skill with the handling of the language. Best wishes;-Ekim
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Don't think I'm plaguing you but your unusual verse form is prompting me to try my luck with my favorite verse form, the kingly pontoum. I love it when the repeated line falls into place and makes perfect sense. I always admire your mathematical skill with the handling of the language. Best wishes;-Ekim
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
Comment from lauriesummer
This is very well done. You did an excellent job conveying meaning and images, even within the constraint of the poetic structure. I thought the first two verses were completely solid. I am not sure about the "not all is war designed to win" line. Other than that, I liked it very much.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This is very well done. You did an excellent job conveying meaning and images, even within the constraint of the poetic structure. I thought the first two verses were completely solid. I am not sure about the "not all is war designed to win" line. Other than that, I liked it very much.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Laurie, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. Brooke
Comment from Goodauthor
This is a lovely, smooth flowing poem. It love it when a poet uses proper grammar. It makes the poem so much easier to read and understand. In enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This is a lovely, smooth flowing poem. It love it when a poet uses proper grammar. It makes the poem so much easier to read and understand. In enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Goodauthor, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome.
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: as I read slowly, word by word, I kept feeling the breeze if I closed my eyes. Your rhythm and rhyme continue to be perfect and appealing, as are your words. Linda
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Brooke: as I read slowly, word by word, I kept feeling the breeze if I closed my eyes. Your rhythm and rhyme continue to be perfect and appealing, as are your words. Linda
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mikemagine
Beautiful and lively poem, showing us Nature's gentler side, that it is not always out in force. Sometimes it tests and sifts; others, it comforts, consoles.
Mike
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Beautiful and lively poem, showing us Nature's gentler side, that it is not always out in force. Sometimes it tests and sifts; others, it comforts, consoles.
Mike
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Mike, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Sure thing!!
Comment from Linda England Bonam
It seems like whenever I read your poems, Brooke, the review is always the same. Because you never have a bad one, so I keep saying, it's beautiful, in every single review! LOL
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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It seems like whenever I read your poems, Brooke, the review is always the same. Because you never have a bad one, so I keep saying, it's beautiful, in every single review! LOL
Comment Written 23-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Linda :-) I truly do appreciate your kind comments :-) Brooke
