Ten Dandelions
a counting poem for children126 total reviews
Comment from marion
Hi there
Another outstanding children's poem.
A comment on this one, seeing I write children's (and talking about that, just had a children's story 8-12 year old accepted in a NZ anthology coming out on bookshelves christmas!)is that i feel a couple of the words a little old - imbibed and homage. I say that because I would have been pulled up!
Never-the-less, I love-it!
Marion.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi there
Another outstanding children's poem.
A comment on this one, seeing I write children's (and talking about that, just had a children's story 8-12 year old accepted in a NZ anthology coming out on bookshelves christmas!)is that i feel a couple of the words a little old - imbibed and homage. I say that because I would have been pulled up!
Never-the-less, I love-it!
Marion.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Marion, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your feedback. Brooke
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Brooke,
gotta say... I love the progressive nature of this cleverly constructed poem... and I see you have it titled as a children's counting poem... what a fun way to enjoy your counting experience. Loved the story that revolved around your principle star... or should I say the most famous weed of all... and probably the prettiest... the dandelion... I love my dandelion coffee's and it's a great liver tonic as well... so who said these wonderful medicinal flowers are a weed? "Who me?, No I would never say that" smile)))))))) loved the poem Brooke... you are a shining star!
With our thoughts we create,
a perfect learning tool,
James xx
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Hi Brooke,
gotta say... I love the progressive nature of this cleverly constructed poem... and I see you have it titled as a children's counting poem... what a fun way to enjoy your counting experience. Loved the story that revolved around your principle star... or should I say the most famous weed of all... and probably the prettiest... the dandelion... I love my dandelion coffee's and it's a great liver tonic as well... so who said these wonderful medicinal flowers are a weed? "Who me?, No I would never say that" smile)))))))) loved the poem Brooke... you are a shining star!
With our thoughts we create,
a perfect learning tool,
James xx
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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James, thank you so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from Eric1
Love this poem with it's hints of 'Ten green bottles standing on a wall', you have once more accomplished perfection in your poetry Brooke, Brilliant!
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Love this poem with it's hints of 'Ten green bottles standing on a wall', you have once more accomplished perfection in your poetry Brooke, Brilliant!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
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You are so very welcome Brooke.
Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this was delightful. It "rolls right off the tongue" as all your poems do, and I think children would love having it read to them. My only suggestion would be that I wonder whether some of the words might not be familiar to children (i.e., homage, voracious, imbibed.) With this caveat, I think this is a lovely counting poem for children.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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I thought this was delightful. It "rolls right off the tongue" as all your poems do, and I think children would love having it read to them. My only suggestion would be that I wonder whether some of the words might not be familiar to children (i.e., homage, voracious, imbibed.) With this caveat, I think this is a lovely counting poem for children.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your thoughtful feedback, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
My wife said that that this was sweet, you are good at these, I have seen this style of poem through the eyes of my grandchildren, I loved it, they lend themselves to composing simple melodies to! Nice abcb rhyming, even meter, well done, Brooke, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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My wife said that that this was sweet, you are good at these, I have seen this style of poem through the eyes of my grandchildren, I loved it, they lend themselves to composing simple melodies to! Nice abcb rhyming, even meter, well done, Brooke, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Roy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
I just love the counting poems you write. What a great rhyme. The imagery was soft and sweet and left me smiling from ear to ear. You always manage to take the mundane and simple and make it a joy to think about. God has given you an exquisite gift, thank you for sharing it. Gretchen
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I just love the counting poems you write. What a great rhyme. The imagery was soft and sweet and left me smiling from ear to ear. You always manage to take the mundane and simple and make it a joy to think about. God has given you an exquisite gift, thank you for sharing it. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Gretchen, thanks so much, my generous and gracious friend :-) Brooke
Comment from jb wade
Great and enjnoyable piece of work. Makes me wonder where your inspiration came from for this one. What a perfect color combination. Stanzas four and seven are my favorites. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Great and enjnoyable piece of work. Makes me wonder where your inspiration came from for this one. What a perfect color combination. Stanzas four and seven are my favorites. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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jb wade, thanks so very much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from livelylinda
Brooke: you have done it again. A fabulous child's poem with rhyme and rhythm, counting backwards, pretty colors, all to entice young minds and open new doors of knowledge to them. Well done. Linda
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Brooke: you have done it again. A fabulous child's poem with rhyme and rhythm, counting backwards, pretty colors, all to entice young minds and open new doors of knowledge to them. Well done. Linda
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Linda, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Trybuck
And by tomorrow about this time
There'll be a hundred ninety-nine
Just waiting to come alive
knowing they'll surely thrive
Quick, hurry get the 2-4-D
No more dandelions for me
Blastem till they're gone
Then I'll sing a happy song
OK, I'm through now. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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And by tomorrow about this time
There'll be a hundred ninety-nine
Just waiting to come alive
knowing they'll surely thrive
Quick, hurry get the 2-4-D
No more dandelions for me
Blastem till they're gone
Then I'll sing a happy song
OK, I'm through now. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Thanks for the smile and the review, Buck - I appreciate the witty poem and sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from words
An ode to one of my favorite flowers. How could I not love it.
Not any dandelions in evidence around here. The do not seem to thrive in these over-manicured yards. Maybe it is the soil or the dry heat. Whatever it is, those most cheerful of flowers do not seem to thrive here. Have not seen any since Georgia.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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An ode to one of my favorite flowers. How could I not love it.
Not any dandelions in evidence around here. The do not seem to thrive in these over-manicured yards. Maybe it is the soil or the dry heat. Whatever it is, those most cheerful of flowers do not seem to thrive here. Have not seen any since Georgia.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 30-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2014
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Diane, thank you so very much :-) Yeah, I know Miranda has a nice landscape man, Homero, visit her home regularly and she also has a nice bug guy who makes monthly visits, so that keeps the dandelions away. All the pics I have of Sawyer with one are from his walks, where I suppose some neighbor doesn't sink as much into "manicuring" as Miranda and Andy do. LOL :-) Brooke
