Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Brooke, this is a lot darker than your usual verse, with a suggestion of wickedness in the siren song that draws you inexorably closer.

This is accentuated by clever word choice - dark, roiling, crash, seductress etc.

Rhyme and rhythmical pattern spot on as always and the ending remains a mystery....

Steve

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Steve, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

Very nice, Brooke. The song of the siren! The poem reads very smoothly and I like the rhymes. YOu put the mix of meter together very well. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Miss Sally, thanks so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Aussie

Excellent

Crikey! What a splendid presentation for your rhyming quatrains - the story reminds me of Jason and the Argonauts who were wooed by the women on the Isle of Lesbos. Your story/poem is hauntingly beautiful and I wish I had six stars for you. Well done Mrs Pearl.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

thanks so much, Kay - in my story poem class I recommended your poem about the woman who rescued the babies in Warsaw as a good example of story poems inspired by inspirational historical figures :-)
Brooke

reply by Aussie on 05-Apr-2014

Wow! You are so kind, I try to get my stories perfect. Sandra sent me an email about the Lady and I was so touched that I had to write a poem about her - even though she was a Catholic, she put her life on the line for 2,500 souls and she live to age 98! Thanks so much Brooke - I am honoured. :-)

reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

It doesn't matter the religion - I'm positive there are saints among us who have been of every world religion not to mention the atheists - people who have done extraordinary things in the service of others :-)

reply by Aussie on 06-Apr-2014

I don't like labels, she was a social worker, beautiful woman - took her life and worked with the shit in a ghetto. Now, that is sacrifice. She could have been shot. Miranda is an atheist and look at all the love within! :-)

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

As I read out loud I can hear the daDUMs in sink with each other very well written and the meter is fine
Thank You for sharing and letting me read your rhyme.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Auroraboreal800

Excellent

What a beautiful poem. Wonderful descriptive scheme, good rhyme and rhythm, easy to read and so enjoyable. Love the art work.
Keep up the good work Ade!
:)

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Aurora, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from ennahanid

Excellent

That is a super piece of artwork that graces your fantastic (as always) poem. Then I am in a state of confuddling confusion reading your notes...I never do understand forms and the daDums and whatever...I believe there is little to no hope for me at all LOL.

Thanks for another great read - above the note line - Dinah

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Thank you so much, Dinah :-) Brooke

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Brooke,

"In the Glow of the Midnight Moon" is is a lovely poem with a beautiful picture to go with it. It is a very enjoyable read. I even liked your author notes explaining the pattern of it.

Kat

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Kat, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from JB Lynn

Excellent

Another terrific piece. I can relate to the idea of being enthralled by the sea. The following line "I go to her as in a trance" stuck a little bit for me, both in reading and rhythm, but otherwise, it flowed flawlessly.
Thanks for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

JB, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

what a beautiful poem my friend stunning artwork and the words you write fill my mind with wonder thank you loved it xxgazzaxx

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

gazza, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

I loved the anapestics in particular here Brookers as the glow of the midnight moon, seduced you along with the enchanting call of the ocean.
Such a gravitational pull the moon and tides have, not only on each other, but on us. A lot more I'm sure than people care to realise.
Beautifully written and this rolled along in perfect unison with the subject matter. Well done, girl.
Not sure you need to spell out meter in the notes, but I'm sure some would be asking for clarification.
Not this little black duck...I found your words, punctuation and line endings did this read perfect justice.
Hugs Phillippa
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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014

Thanks, Phillippa :-) For some I don't need to spell it out, but whenever I use mixed meter, I end up with a handful or more of readers who try to overlay iambic meter on it as they read and get thrown off and then ask for an explanation, so I just head them off at the pass :-) Brooke

reply by closetpoetjester on 05-Apr-2014

Yeah, don't I know it. LOL
As soon as you DON'T explain, you have the apparent meter police telling you they are being thrown off the iambic ride.
Some have seriously NOT heard of anapestic, trochaic and the like.
I guess it all comes with experience.
I didn't even know WHAT meter was until I came here and was delighted to find I was partaking in it unknowingly.
FS is SUCH a plethera of learning...not to mention LOVELY people such as yourself.
Hugs P
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