Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Brooke now I know what an Bumbershoot means

What a fun and clever poem to read
Your daughter takes the most interesting pictures so her Mom can write poetry

Smiles
Gert

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Thanks so very much, Gert :-) Brooke

Comment from angelface2

Excellent

Another good poem, Brooke. Lovely rhymes and rhythm is great. Didn't know what a bumbershoot was. thanks for that info. Nice. Miss Sally

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Thank you so much, Miss Sally :-) Brooke

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

When they fail, I believe you'll be getting wet. Unless you get under cover. I found this poem to be a very delightful poetic tale. It was well written and just a joy to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, John :-) Brooke

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Just lovely. Really like the rhyming and this flowed beautifully. Loved seeing bumper shoots again - years since I've heard that.

Very visual as you viewed all the possibilities through the wide eyes of two small wonders.

Good job. AT=/

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

AT, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

from the beautiful picture dressed for splashing so rain has soaked me to the skin, I'll find a puddle where I'll sail beautifully drawn picture excellent piece

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Darkhorse, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is an excellent poem for children,you take the reader to another place. The word bumbershoot is a new word for me and it adds to the fantasy element of the poem,being lost in a puddle and going to another world.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Elaine, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I've never heard of bumbershoots before - a cute creation.

Once more you take us into the mind of an imaginative child with this lovely wet-weather tale.

I liked the last verse with the neat 'plumpened' worm.

Steve

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Thanks so much, Steve. It's an old-fashioned Americanism. Watch Chitty Chitty Bang Bang - Dick Van Dike has a song using it :-) Brooke

Comment from the blue pixel

Excellent

One of my favourite French repeating forms and I thought your title was Sawyer referring to cars bumper aand stickers(though I didn't what 'shoot's would be in this context) lol I was wrong and you have taught me something new again. Kids universally love puddles and why jump over one when you can have more fun and jump right in? "As seas replace the solid ground" can only be written by an advanced poetic mind. Me thinks, (not that you needed any help) but Sawyer is helping you as all children do, see the world through their eyes. I remember my 3 year daughter going to see the ocean for the first and her first question was "Mummy, where's the deep end?. I never looked at the sea in the same light again. Lovely Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Carol, what a great memory to share. Thank you so much for that and for your review :-) Brooke

Comment from trimple

Exceptional

I am giving you six stars for the concept alone.

for there's adventure to be found
when bumbershoots and slickers fail --
as seas replace the solid ground,
who knows? I may just spy a whale.

Great imagery Brooke.

bouncy rhythm reminding us the the fish fish tales

pleasure to read and review
kind regards

tracey trimple :)

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Tracey, thank you so much for your lovely comments and generous rating :-) Brooke

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! Love the line "When bumbershoots and slickers fail".. where did that word come from anyway? British for umbrella, or what? Anyway, I love how Sawyer doesn't mind getting all wet, for to a little boy, he becomes a sea captain just by jumping in a puddle. Aw, to be that imaginative again! Come to think of it, looks like his grandma never lost HER great imagination! :)

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

Nope, it's an American expression dating back to at least 1896. Its most famous appearance comes in a song sung by Dick Van Dike in Chitty Chitty Bang Bang :-) Thanks so much, Phyllis. Brooke

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 01-Mar-2014

Wow! How do you know so much about the origin of "bumbershoot"? Thx for sharing the info. :)

reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

I've known the word since I was a kid - I had relatives who used lots of old-fashioned words, so when I decided to use it in this poem, I looked up the history of the word. Just curiosity :-)

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 01-Mar-2014

Cool. It's good to be curious about words... and everything. Sawyer must take after you! :)

reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

I think he does. The kid is just about to turn 22 months old and he's close to knowing a thousand words. Now he's forming whole sentences. Yesterday he told me "Mama turned the light on."

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 01-Mar-2014

Wow... past tense and full sentences! He's going to be a writer like his grandma. :)

I didn't speak at all till I was three. My first words were, "I want a glass of milk." And I was angry that my mom forced to me ask (doctor's idea). I didn't want them to know I could talk. Why? Because for over a year they'd made such a fuss about it, that it embarrassed me. I can recall going to the doctor and listening to Mom's worries about my brain development because I wasn't saying any words at, but rather pointed and grunted like a cave girl. LOL! So I actually remember my first words vividly. My mom hugged me and called my dad and made such a fuss, I almost shut up again. But I went on from that day talking like any normal kid.

Funny thing... my own daughter did say a few words, like Mommy, Daddy, and her favorite, NO, but not much else till she was nearly three. Remembering my own experience, I wasn't at all worried, though my neighbors all suggested there was a problem in development. You know how people are. Anyway, one day I decided to do the same thing my mom had done, and I pretended not to know what she wanted, saying she would have to tell me. She got this mean, frustrated look on her face and finally yelled, "Sit down!" So I sat on the floor with her and said, "I knew you could talk. I was just like you when I was a little girl." And we proceeded to have our first conversation.

What wonderful memories come to mind when I read these poems by everyone. Just goes to show you that we are all bound by common threads. :)

reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014

My son, Eric, the one with the law degree, didn't talk. He didn't do anything anywhere near when the books said he should, so I hauled him off to the famous Yale Child Development Center. Bad idea. They tested him and told me he had an IQ of 70. Did I mention the law degree? LOL