The Kyrielle
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Comment from perunest
Another form you have mastered! Your
kyrielle is lovely in word and message.
I felt a dance in your "melody" and a
sweet lively spirit. So nicely done!
Good luck in the contest with yet another
winner! Carolyn
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Another form you have mastered! Your
kyrielle is lovely in word and message.
I felt a dance in your "melody" and a
sweet lively spirit. So nicely done!
Good luck in the contest with yet another
winner! Carolyn
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Well, it's the first one I've ever written, so I'm thrilled you think I've mastered it!!! Thanks, Carolyn. Brooke :-)
Comment from dtimes3
You made this poem sing. Good luck in the contest.
++ like drumbeats born upon the sea
++ till joy takes hold and love is sparked,
++ creation sings the melody.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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You made this poem sing. Good luck in the contest.
++ like drumbeats born upon the sea
++ till joy takes hold and love is sparked,
++ creation sings the melody.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you - the kyrielle form is so lyrical - I appreciate your giving me some of the credit for this :-) Brooke
Comment from Charles Keith
Hi Brooke,
I think you should have written this in French nez pas?
I jest.
This is seriously classical stuff, reminds me of a Bruegal painting, although there was a deeper political meaning behind most of them. Charming little piece. Good Luck, Bon Chance, Viel Glukk dan les competition.
Keith
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Hi Brooke,
I think you should have written this in French nez pas?
I jest.
This is seriously classical stuff, reminds me of a Bruegal painting, although there was a deeper political meaning behind most of them. Charming little piece. Good Luck, Bon Chance, Viel Glukk dan les competition.
Keith
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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I can speak, not write, about five phrases in French. LOL Thank you, Keith - your On the Road story is a classic, too, though of a far different sort! LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from TheBritsWife
Hi Brooke! This is so beautiful and captures so much within this poetry form. I've learned a new word this morning - "sonorous"! I think it was a perfect choice for your first line, and it just rolls off the lips, just like the "pulsating waves" you depict so well! I find this poetry form "Kyrielle" to be an excellent vehicle for your beautiful theme of celebrating nature. As always, gorgeous and excellent with the added bonus of viewing a new poetry form. (At least new to me)! Thanks Brooke!
Karen :-)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Hi Brooke! This is so beautiful and captures so much within this poetry form. I've learned a new word this morning - "sonorous"! I think it was a perfect choice for your first line, and it just rolls off the lips, just like the "pulsating waves" you depict so well! I find this poetry form "Kyrielle" to be an excellent vehicle for your beautiful theme of celebrating nature. As always, gorgeous and excellent with the added bonus of viewing a new poetry form. (At least new to me)! Thanks Brooke!
Karen :-)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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It is my first ever kyrielle, Karen, so I'm doubly pleased you like it this much :-) I've read them for years but never tried - I like repeating forms :-) Thank you!!! Brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
Well, I'm slack-jawed! How can you be raising the bar indefinitely like that? Fantastic images, and a deep, thunderous message. What a great rhythm this one has! I don't know what else to say, Brooke. This is just beautiful! You should be the poet laureate of your state. I'm sure there's no one better!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Well, I'm slack-jawed! How can you be raising the bar indefinitely like that? Fantastic images, and a deep, thunderous message. What a great rhythm this one has! I don't know what else to say, Brooke. This is just beautiful! You should be the poet laureate of your state. I'm sure there's no one better!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Thank you, Adrienne - I've never tried the kyrielle form before and right away fell in love with it. I'm so appreciative of your generous and encouraging comments :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
You have outdone yourself with this poem. It is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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You have outdone yourself with this poem. It is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Charlie, thank you. It is my first kyrielle, so I'm pleased you like it :-) Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Domino
I've just taken some aspirin and my head-ache is subsiding after reading the rules, which I couldn't be arsed to check, LOL!
I seee you've rebelled from the 'usual 3 stanzas' to a show-offey 4. Dammit, I said I wasn't gonna check! ;-)
Love the way even the 'leaves' find their 'rest below'.
Excellent and smooth read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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I've just taken some aspirin and my head-ache is subsiding after reading the rules, which I couldn't be arsed to check, LOL!
I seee you've rebelled from the 'usual 3 stanzas' to a show-offey 4. Dammit, I said I wasn't gonna check! ;-)
Love the way even the 'leaves' find their 'rest below'.
Excellent and smooth read.
Best wishes, Ray xx
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2009
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Ray, it said 3 was the minimum, not that they usually HAVE 3.
You are a riot. Thank you, dear friend :-) Brooke
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I just checked, Brookers, and I suspect you've changed the notes to humiliate me. LMAO! xoxo
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That's it, Ray, I've PM'd the contest sponsor and gotten her to change the notes just so I could laugh at you! LOL Speaking of laughing - read Keith's newest story - you will LOVE it!!!!
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OL, Brooke. Thanks for the recommendation. Just read and reviewed - what a scream! haha! Ray xx
