Hey Mom! About Your Jacket.
She Passed away four years ago.19 total reviews
Comment from Bill Pinder
I liked this tribute to your mom written in a loving, creative way. I'm glad you have good memories of her and look forward to seeing her in heaven. Keep writing and stay safe. Bill
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
I liked this tribute to your mom written in a loving, creative way. I'm glad you have good memories of her and look forward to seeing her in heaven. Keep writing and stay safe. Bill
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thanks Bill, God Bless you, I keep looking up!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I really liked this in general and can't think of any improvements. It was a story and also had a lot of emotion as well. Great job. It was very poignant I thought.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
I really liked this in general and can't think of any improvements. It was a story and also had a lot of emotion as well. Great job. It was very poignant I thought.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thanks for your kind words, I hope you are keeping well, God Bless you, Laura
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Laura,
I surely can empathize with the keen emotions that you share in your poem = from the need to have something that belonged to my mother, to the feelings that I still have for my sisters although we no longer speak...
If I were to offer any suggestions, it would be to delete "I cried my eyes out" = cliche, and the reader truly knows you are sorrowful from all of the other visual and emotive imagery you share.
Hoping I have helped.
thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
Hello Laura,
I surely can empathize with the keen emotions that you share in your poem = from the need to have something that belonged to my mother, to the feelings that I still have for my sisters although we no longer speak...
If I were to offer any suggestions, it would be to delete "I cried my eyes out" = cliche, and the reader truly knows you are sorrowful from all of the other visual and emotive imagery you share.
Hoping I have helped.
thank you!
diane
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thanks Dianne, I appreciate your review and kind words. I hope you are keeping healthy and safe.
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Hello Laura!
Yes! I am well and safe. Just feeling a bit feisty...:)
Thank you!
diane
Take Care!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A lovely tribute to your mother. She will never leave you. She's in your heart. Our mothers (I would say 99%) are amazing and deserve all the accolades we can give them. They carried us pre-birth and after birth, they were always there when needed.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
A lovely tribute to your mother. She will never leave you. She's in your heart. Our mothers (I would say 99%) are amazing and deserve all the accolades we can give them. They carried us pre-birth and after birth, they were always there when needed.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2020
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Thank you for you review and comments, you always give it a lot of thought. xo
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your poem is very touching; I am very sorry for your loss, which is heartbreaking. Your Mom's green jacket is so full of memories, reflected in your beautiful poem. She would love that you're now sharing it with your sister; maybe it will be a step in growing closer (all moms want that for their children).
Your Mom looks sweet and adorable in her green jacket -- what a great picture! It's a lovely free verse poem, expressing a lot of love.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
Your poem is very touching; I am very sorry for your loss, which is heartbreaking. Your Mom's green jacket is so full of memories, reflected in your beautiful poem. She would love that you're now sharing it with your sister; maybe it will be a step in growing closer (all moms want that for their children).
Your Mom looks sweet and adorable in her green jacket -- what a great picture! It's a lovely free verse poem, expressing a lot of love.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks very much, your kind understanding words and review mean a lot to me.
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You're very welcome, Laura. I didn't realize it was you (and your Mom). Hugs, Mary Kay
Comment from dmt1967
I am so sad at your loss. Sister's are funny, well, mine are. This is a good poem, written from the heart. I felt the writers sorrow as she wrote each word. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
I am so sad at your loss. Sister's are funny, well, mine are. This is a good poem, written from the heart. I felt the writers sorrow as she wrote each word. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your thoughtful comments and taking the time to review this.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
A jacket that keeps so fresh the memory of your mum, it's so precious just as I kept my bracelets that my dad was wearing when he was getting his cancer treatments.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
A jacket that keeps so fresh the memory of your mum, it's so precious just as I kept my bracelets that my dad was wearing when he was getting his cancer treatments.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2020
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So sorry about your Dad, your words and review mean a lot to me.
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You are welcome
Comment from RShipp
It is amazing the things that hold the dearest memories of loved ones that have passed.
I am glad that you have held, and hugged, and cried, and released. Blessings.
Best of luck with the Free Verse Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
It is amazing the things that hold the dearest memories of loved ones that have passed.
I am glad that you have held, and hugged, and cried, and released. Blessings.
Best of luck with the Free Verse Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thanks very much I appreciate you thoughtful comments.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the picture of you mom in her green jacket
You captured my attention from the start the way you spoke about your mother the love for her will never died
giving your sister your mother jacket brought you and your sister closer together
which is a good thing.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
I love the picture of you mom in her green jacket
You captured my attention from the start the way you spoke about your mother the love for her will never died
giving your sister your mother jacket brought you and your sister closer together
which is a good thing.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thanks very much, Cookie
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Your very welcome, have a nice day
cookie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, lauralumummu,
.....Hey Mom! About Your Jacket......a fine free verse contest entry. Very nice presentation with your mom's picture.
I remember holding on to my mother's shirts after she died because they still smelled like her.
Good job
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
Hello, lauralumummu,
.....Hey Mom! About Your Jacket......a fine free verse contest entry. Very nice presentation with your mom's picture.
I remember holding on to my mother's shirts after she died because they still smelled like her.
Good job
Comment Written 06-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2020
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Thanks Gypsy, much appreciated.