Childhood
Amphion poetry21 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful amphion, Melissa -- almost brings a tear to a mother's eye!! :) ;) I love the way you've used it to create not only an image even without your pic, but to create feelings by depicting both his actions and motivations! ;) ;) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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What a wonderful amphion, Melissa -- almost brings a tear to a mother's eye!! :) ;) I love the way you've used it to create not only an image even without your pic, but to create feelings by depicting both his actions and motivations! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Yvette. I was reminiscing about when our sons were small and they always were pretending and flying about!! I appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
This form is good for this story. It has the fast pace of a child at play.
This poem shows the strong imagination of a child and the effects
of being outside in the sun. The freckles.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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This form is good for this story. It has the fast pace of a child at play.
This poem shows the strong imagination of a child and the effects
of being outside in the sun. The freckles.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Joan. I really appreciate your thoughts and comments.
Melissa
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You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Aussie
Kids will be kids. Wish we could turn back the hands of time. I was a cowgirl with loads of money (cut-up newspapers neatly stacked in bills so real) never take away a childhood, so precious.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Kids will be kids. Wish we could turn back the hands of time. I was a cowgirl with loads of money (cut-up newspapers neatly stacked in bills so real) never take away a childhood, so precious.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Awww... I loved your story about newspaper money. We had both of our sons here for Easter, and I was reminiscing about their childhood... thanks so much, Aussie!
Melissa
Comment from Irish Rain
Oh I like this!!
I love the whimsical poem,
love the 'jet airplane glide',
love the form.
All-around-wonderful!!!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Oh I like this!!
I love the whimsical poem,
love the 'jet airplane glide',
love the form.
All-around-wonderful!!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Judy. I was reminiscing about our boys... they grow up so fast!
Melissa
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Yes, they do!
Comment from BeasPeas
What a nice Amphion poem. It has an interesting line length and lends itself to this type of descriptive storytelling. Love the image and the word choices. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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What a nice Amphion poem. It has an interesting line length and lends itself to this type of descriptive storytelling. Love the image and the word choices. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Marilyn. We had both of our sons home for Easter and I began to reminisce. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
What a most interesting form this is. And you've perfectly captured a young lad and his private club.
Great job with this, Melissa and good to read another of your fine poems.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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What a most interesting form this is. And you've perfectly captured a young lad and his private club.
Great job with this, Melissa and good to read another of your fine poems.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you very much, Gloria... I was reminiscing about our two sons when they were small. They were both here for Easter this year... I hope you had a wonderful Sunday celebration!
Melissa
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for selected the Amphion form, which I was not very familiar with and describing its requirements. You incorporated them well in your poem, and I enjoyed your rhymes and vivid descriptions. The "Ahab" reference was quite clever. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thank you for selected the Amphion form, which I was not very familiar with and describing its requirements. You incorporated them well in your poem, and I enjoyed your rhymes and vivid descriptions. The "Ahab" reference was quite clever. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Joan. I enjoy writing in the Amphion form because it has a lilting type of cadence. I am grateful for the lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from zanya
Such a heart-warming poetic reminder of what precious childhood should be imagination flowing freely with 'muddy knees' and 'freckles on his nose'- lovely pic
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Such a heart-warming poetic reminder of what precious childhood should be imagination flowing freely with 'muddy knees' and 'freckles on his nose'- lovely pic
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Zanya. I am delighted that you enjoyed this verse.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
This is so clever. Tree houses sound great for kids. They can let their imaginations go wild when they can imagine king's castles and being Ahab in search of a whale. Lots of childhood memories. My brothers and I used to play we were Roy Rogers and Dale Evans. Great job with your Amphion form. judi
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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This is so clever. Tree houses sound great for kids. They can let their imaginations go wild when they can imagine king's castles and being Ahab in search of a whale. Lots of childhood memories. My brothers and I used to play we were Roy Rogers and Dale Evans. Great job with your Amphion form. judi
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Judi!!! I enjoy writing this type of form because it is lilting and fun to work with. :)
Melissa
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You're welcome. You made me think of how fun a tree house would be. judi
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a boy that plays like all boys should. Get dirty and play until the day comes to an end. Tired he will eat, bath, and go to sleep all his adventures of the day complete.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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A very well-written poem about a boy that plays like all boys should. Get dirty and play until the day comes to an end. Tired he will eat, bath, and go to sleep all his adventures of the day complete.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2019
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Thanks so much, Sandra, for the great review!
Melissa