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The Lost Trumpet

From Jericho to now - a trumpet's saga

3 total reviews 
Comment from nor84
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I wanted to give you a heads-up review. This is set up like a poem. Usually, a story is written in full sentences and in paragraphs, so I don't know whether or not this will pass screening by the committee that evaluates entries.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    I'm not big on structure of writing. Seems there is a need to confine things within defined boxes, a most uncreative way to convey thoughts. But your feedback does point out reality - a very important player in a writing.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 50 word flash fiction contest.
Well written, well said in so few words.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    You are kind - I'm fairly new to writing and hearing positive feedback is nice.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

This is a tough one to review. it comes across much more like a free verse poem than a story which is what the contest calls for.

There's also no punctuation at all, not really a beginning, middle or end.

Obviously it's up to you how display your work but I think this needs a little bit of work as an actual story.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
    In hope to craft writing to fit the situation - that may not fall within set rules. But if winning I seek, rules I must adhere. but what fun is that.I very much appreciate your feedback.