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Autum

A poem of change

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Comment from l.raven
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HI Missy, it's true...some will like for greener grass on the other side of the fence...and find they made a mistake...but true love will stay till the end...withstand all...I love your poem sweet girl...and love your stunning picture....so very well written...love to ya...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
    Thank you hon, I am alone so much of the time that I feel as if the love has gone :(

    Hugs
    Missy
reply by l.raven on 13-Jan-2018
    I am so sorry....if you every want to talk ...let me know...please smile...big hugs to you...always your friend...love Linda xxoo
Comment from scongrove
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Welcome back! So glad you shared more of your beautiful words with us here on FanStory. Love the photo you placed with this. It's just fitting for your breathtaking poetry. Your words definitely give the change of seasons a wonderful imagery as it compares to the love as it changes with time. Beautiful!
Shana :)

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
    Shana, I just love your reviews!! I want to apologize for the length of time it has been to respond to your review. Life has been, well a bit depressing of late.

    Hugs
    Missy
reply by scongrove on 15-Jan-2018
    Oh don't worry about that, Missy. I'm sorry your world hasn't been all that good. I was so glad to see you back on FanStory. I pray for happiness to come your way.
    Shana :)
Comment from Liberty Justice
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OMG. That's what some lovers do. They promise you forever, then, when you turn older, they move on. So sad and sorrowful. Wish you well with love. truly, liberty justice

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
    Exactly!! Thank you for the lovely R&R Liberty.

    Hugs
    Missy
reply by Liberty Justice on 14-Jan-2018
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Comment from Pantygynt
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This sounds like the seven year itch to me. Well maybe seven years are too few, but you know what I mean.

Joking apart this is a piece of free verse that do with a touch of experimentation. The idea is great but maybe the is room for a few imrpvements in the way that idea is expressed. Because it is free verse you are unrestricted by line lengths and rhyming requirements.

You refer to, '...the springtime of our lives' and later to '...the Autumn of our lives'. Both of these as stated are cliches and why does Autumn rate a capital but not springtime? 'In our lives' sweet spring we met' would say the same thing without the cliche and '...now we find ourselves in fall' implies the idea without falling into the cliche trap.

Also I am sure you have missed an opportunity to equate the changing colour of your hair to the changing colour of the autumn leaves. I always spend far longer creating free verse stuff as I grope for the right words to express the meaning. Leave it a while. Come back to it in a month or two, and I bet you will see ways of turning this from a pleasant piece of free verse into a real stunner. At the moment it is full of untapped potential.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
    Thank you sir.

    Missy
Comment from TAB_that's me
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It has been a long time since I've seen you on site. Welcome back:)

This started out as a sweet love/romance poem but it ended up sad. I hope that love has not gone away.

teresa

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Hi T, it?s great to be back!
    I?m glad you chose to spend a little of your precious time reading and reviewing this for me!

    Thank you

    Justafan of yours
    Missy
Comment from fastdigits
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A beautifully choreographed song of love when one dances to the melodies of the heart and as the song drifts into the aging air the tune gets fainter and only at times dreams of yesterday are heard in the midnight mist.
Well done

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Ahhh the man himself:)
    I?m honored to see your name here in a R&R

    I?m smiling
    Missy
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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The picture that you have posted here truly lovely.
The poem is a beautiful story as well.
Good rhyming and rhythm.
Well done.
Sharon

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Thank you so very much for a lovely R&R!

    Justafan
    Missy
Comment from dragonpoet
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This is a romantic poem about love and possibly losing that long love. It shows how aging sometimes makes you feel insecure about still being alluring to your husband.
It also alludes to maybe a little mistrust and though of an affair starting.

The pictures shows love and it almost seems like they are doing a romantic dance.

Keep writing

Happy Holidays.

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Hello DP, thank you for leaving me this beautiful R&R for me!

    Missy
reply by dragonpoet on 03-Dec-2017
    No problem, Missy.

    Joan
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Missie, how good to see you back. I hope you're here for a while. I've missed your lovely poems, and this is another one. Not knowing what is going on in a relationship is the worst. Autum in your title has to be Autumn. A hug, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Ulla, been quite awhile but yes I?m back:)
    Thank you so very much for leaving me a splendid review!

    Missy
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Hey, Missy!
It's great to see you're back and posting again.
It's never a good feeling when you find yourself thinking that your significant other might be foolin' around on the side. I think the worst part about it is the not knowing. Because at least if you know for sure, you can deal with it and come to grips with the situation.
Until then...it's hell!
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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Oh and there he is, always one of my first reviews!!
    Thank you, sugga!

    Missy
reply by Dean Kuch on 02-Dec-2017
    You know you're always welcome, Missy.
    Glad to see you back.