Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Rest In Peace"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from Jack Moore
I really appreciate the story that goes along with the photo it really goes well together, thank you very much, I just came back to FAR and now that I am glad I did. JackJr.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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I really appreciate the story that goes along with the photo it really goes well together, thank you very much, I just came back to FAR and now that I am glad I did. JackJr.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
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I struggle with my write, doing endless revision, happy this write captured some interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Tom_Roach
This is not a poem. It is not even a prose poem. That is because it does not have rhythm. Rhythm is what differentiates prose from poetry. The author needs to decide what it is that is being written. If it is a prose poem, it does not have the structure of a poem, BUT it does have a rhythm that carries the reader through the piece of work.
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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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This is not a poem. It is not even a prose poem. That is because it does not have rhythm. Rhythm is what differentiates prose from poetry. The author needs to decide what it is that is being written. If it is a prose poem, it does not have the structure of a poem, BUT it does have a rhythm that carries the reader through the piece of work.
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2016
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I often wondered about my written statements, whether they were poetic, I will consider your views. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging comment.
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TPAC To make it a poem, you need a rhythm that repeats itself in each verse. Generally, line breaks occur where you would put a comma. For ease of the reader, each verse should contain one thought, as if it were a prose sentence. In a prose poem, forget the verse format and have a light rhythm that carries the reader along with what you are saying. Here is part of one of my efforts:
A lonely moon shone full and bright upon the night. On a whimsy I stepped in to its silver light, but it was blurred and, round the globe, a halo shone. A diaphanous curtain hung before my eyes. The tall grey trees beside me loomed as ghosts. My feet felt for a path I could not see.
Comment from winnona
A well-written piece, your words flow well together line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for your reader. Your artwork completes the poem well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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A well-written piece, your words flow well together line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for your reader. Your artwork completes the poem well.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Revisions cut the story big time, way shorter then the original. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging comment.
Comment from Badger_29
Excellent, I really enjoyed this free from piece, AND the commentary at the end-who really wins? I guess it would be a matter of perception . . .
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Excellent, I really enjoyed this free from piece, AND the commentary at the end-who really wins? I guess it would be a matter of perception . . .
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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I had to cut the fight scene which I loved: yet feel the thought carried even cut. Thanking you for generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Phoenix Rysing
Once again, this is very well written piece *(and no comment on the photo, great choice) I don't see any room for suggestions. Very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Once again, this is very well written piece *(and no comment on the photo, great choice) I don't see any room for suggestions. Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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My works hold many pits, my attempted revisions do make them more pleasing. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from foxangie123
This was hard for me to keep track of. It has some wording that needs edited for a smoother read. The content is great topic matter.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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This was hard for me to keep track of. It has some wording that needs edited for a smoother read. The content is great topic matter.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Again truth, nice subject yet a yawn to get through. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
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Xo hugs
Comment from DonandVicki
Alas, Nowadays there is no winner in war only tens of thousands of losers. I guess mortal man is blind to the horror of wars, we keep sending our very best to die.
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2016
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Alas, Nowadays there is no winner in war only tens of thousands of losers. I guess mortal man is blind to the horror of wars, we keep sending our very best to die.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2016
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Sad but true all for pity claims, fears of others ruling us, not aware the other is ourselves. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from jusylee72
no one wins, and there are only spoils. When Iraq came down, no one was allowed to take his gold, at least not American soldiers, I wonder what happened to all of his extravagance. Now we fight for politics and beliefs instead of silve. Instead of things we get tragic memories that invade our dreams and lives.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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no one wins, and there are only spoils. When Iraq came down, no one was allowed to take his gold, at least not American soldiers, I wonder what happened to all of his extravagance. Now we fight for politics and beliefs instead of silve. Instead of things we get tragic memories that invade our dreams and lives.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Truth words but much too generous rate in which I thank you for. I admire your interests in this work.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. In war, there are no winners. War is so destructive and foolish. If the world would learn to get along; what a world this would be. You did a great job writing this.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Excellent. In war, there are no winners. War is so destructive and foolish. If the world would learn to get along; what a world this would be. You did a great job writing this.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Again my appreciation for heart warming comments. Without war no hell- Satan death tolls must be made: or else. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Ricky1024
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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I like this one extremely well written with great detective content and as for object of content I would state that this would driver a five stars are 5 stars for grammar and also if rejected content on a scale of 1 to 100 pieces of semen in men tree I would give this an easy 130 will enjoy this very well liked it and good luck with this a 24 hour
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Again got, touch by your feedback will share your comments, pleasing to my senses. Thanking you again for your statements about this write.
