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Evolution

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Comment from Ekim777
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Wisdom brims over from every paragraph; some of it is grass-roots awareness, much is academic and scientific. Is our writer bound down by the hefty heritage he has inherited, binding himself into a gilded cage or is he preoccupied with those areas where his intuition shines like the cosmos. Whatever the case, he presents himself as a most civilized man perhaps searching for his salvation. Has he succeeded in finding it? I think he is searching for a soul mate which of course is not my business.. -Ekim777

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
    Thanks for the praise. Salvation, like truth, dwells within us all...John
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day mate. This is a very well written and presented piece on evolution. There are many different schools of thought and many humans get stuck on the same treadmill and never evolve from what the parents etc. say. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2015
    Thank you much...John
Comment from Helena Frances
Exceptional
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The picture drew me in--and I'm so glad I stayed!
Your writing style is easy on the reader, although, in my excitement I was trying to speed-read, to take in
all, more quickly. Fortunately, I forced myself to slow down and tried to absorb some
of what you share. It will only be with multiple readings, that I can hope to learn more.

I'm new to FS, and so grateful to have had the opportunity to read your piece.
Much to enjoy!
Thank you

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
    Thanks for the kind words and review...John
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
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This is a very thorough and well researched dissertation on the human condition via evolution. The human mind both enobles us and restricts us, and I agree, religion and socail mores tend to block growth, while maintain order and balance.
I like your flea circus analogy and how breaking the jars is the better option!

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
    Thanks much...John
Comment from scd41
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The essay on evolution is thought-provoking. Your way of emphasis by retaining the hyphen after the prefix dis for words discomfort and disappear is interesting. The anecdote of fleas circus naraated by Zig drrives home the point.The role of ego has been explained well.



 Comment Written 22-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
    Thank you...John
Comment from chasennov
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Development "Evolution" Thank you so much for your lesson in evolution which I found most interesting and slightly disturbing. Well done.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
    This will be a chapter in "Heaven on Earth" - a How To manual for restoring Eden. Thanks...John
reply by chasennov on 22-Mar-2015
    You are welcome, John.
Comment from Aylee.Jackson
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Hi there!

This is fairly well-written overall. I liked the variation in sentence structure, and of course the topic gave me (the reader) a lot of food for thought.

However, I would add an anecdote or a concrete example in one of the first few paragraphs. It starts off a bit dry and I feel that, unless someone is used to reading philosophy, you may lose a lot of readers. (Which is unfortunate, because overall it's an interesting piece!)

I was fascinated by the contrast of logic and machine-related imagery on the one hand, and respect for "Mother Nature" on the other. That's not something you see often. I've met people who care deeply about the environment/social issues and can express things artistically (in a painting, poem etc), and people who are hyper-logical but indifferent to social issues, but not many people who can combine the two.

Good luck with all your future writing!

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
    Thanks for taking the time...John
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi Cogitator,

Plenty of food for thought in this article. 'Evolution' is a concept many don't like, and I'm not talking just of Creationists. Huxley et al failed to grasp how resistant the human ego is the change. In this age of information it often astounds me how many will simply ignore information they don't want to know or confront, and refuse to revise their world view.

You might find Tom Wright's books of interest.

Patrick

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
    I am there...John
Comment from risktaker
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I like the viewpoint expressed, the structure, and the flow. I found this to be thought-provoking,and informative. I like the comparisons between the computer and the human brain. I relate to a "change in attitude," and personal choice. I agree
"it is living that is eternal." Great write. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
    Thanks fo taking the time...John
reply by risktaker on 21-Mar-2015
    ok
Comment from thee-name
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Excellent story. Your story developed good.

Evolution is a process. It is the process of something else.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2015


reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
    Thank you...John
reply by thee-name on 22-Mar-2015
    thank you!