Shadow Dance
rhyming quatrains in 8/6/8/6167 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Shadows are cool to play with.... I remember shadow puppets, but that was too long ago. Well thought out poem. Clearly written. Great poetic form. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Fantastic work.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
Shadows are cool to play with.... I remember shadow puppets, but that was too long ago. Well thought out poem. Clearly written. Great poetic form. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Fantastic work.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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sunnilicious, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I just love the perfect detail of accurately describing the morning glory that opens to the entrance of the sun. (Love morning glories!) I also love shadows and all the cool things they do and all at our simple little gestures. I'm still like him with my shadow. Hahaha. mikey
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
I just love the perfect detail of accurately describing the morning glory that opens to the entrance of the sun. (Love morning glories!) I also love shadows and all the cool things they do and all at our simple little gestures. I'm still like him with my shadow. Hahaha. mikey
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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Mikey, thank you so much :-) I'm glad to hear you haven't lost your childlike spirit :-) Brooke
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Yes shadow dancing is a fave of the kids, big and small and these are great rhyming quatrains to go with this photo of Sawyer.Love the thought, - he never tells me where he's been - lovely cheery read Brooke.
valda
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Yes shadow dancing is a fave of the kids, big and small and these are great rhyming quatrains to go with this photo of Sawyer.Love the thought, - he never tells me where he's been - lovely cheery read Brooke.
valda
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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valda, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from babylonia
Brooke,
Made me smiggle and do a happy dance. LOL Nicely done. I remember when looking at my shadow was so much fun. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a great day.
Love,
Barbara
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Brooke,
Made me smiggle and do a happy dance. LOL Nicely done. I remember when looking at my shadow was so much fun. Imagery is excellent. Hope you're having a great day.
Love,
Barbara
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Barbara, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome.
Comment from robina1978
I already spotted your poem on the front page. Nice how Sawyer can't understand yet why the sun and the shadows disappear to but he sure misses them.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
I already spotted your poem on the front page. Nice how Sawyer can't understand yet why the sun and the shadows disappear to but he sure misses them.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Ine, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from DR DIP
you know Brooke..I don't know what it is but this one really appeals to me I like the subject I like your use of your favourite ABCB rhyme.
world/ furled
regularity/ friend and me
nice proximate rhyme
but the thing that won me over and the reason I gave you a 6?..you mentioned me in one of your verses!! lol
"I miss him when the sun 'dips' down"
xxdip
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
you know Brooke..I don't know what it is but this one really appeals to me I like the subject I like your use of your favourite ABCB rhyme.
world/ furled
regularity/ friend and me
nice proximate rhyme
but the thing that won me over and the reason I gave you a 6?..you mentioned me in one of your verses!! lol
"I miss him when the sun 'dips' down"
xxdip
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks for your generous response to this poem, Dip - so glad you enjoyed. One can't go wrong with a poem that uses your name :-) Brooke
Comment from Caressa_08
Can't help to think of that old time song, "Me & My Shadow" after reading your poem. Sawyer seems to really experiencing such a very good childhood...Even learning about his own shadow friend on a sunny day...Very nice poem for children & adults, too, to contemplate.
Caressa
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Can't help to think of that old time song, "Me & My Shadow" after reading your poem. Sawyer seems to really experiencing such a very good childhood...Even learning about his own shadow friend on a sunny day...Very nice poem for children & adults, too, to contemplate.
Caressa
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Caressa - I love that song :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, once more you create the fantasy of a child's mind and bring it fresh to the adult. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme and meter. Nicely done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Brooke, once more you create the fantasy of a child's mind and bring it fresh to the adult. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme and meter. Nicely done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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GracieAnn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Like the feel of this, as his shadow friend represents so many imaginary buddies I've known when I was a kid. As always, this is very uplifting. Great write! Les
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Like the feel of this, as his shadow friend represents so many imaginary buddies I've known when I was a kid. As always, this is very uplifting. Great write! Les
Comment Written 18-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Les, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from marijmd
Your poem reminds me a bit of Peter Pan looking for his shadow - making it a living things and bringing it too life with the imagination of a child.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
Your poem reminds me a bit of Peter Pan looking for his shadow - making it a living things and bringing it too life with the imagination of a child.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2014
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Marijmd, thank you for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke