Mirage
An unwanted caballo33 total reviews
Comment from Mr. Green
A sad story indeed, but a cycle of life we all journey through in our own time. Your poem displays the emotion and the caring that reminds us of the innocence of youth and the hope of humanity. A very nice poem. Mr. Green
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
A sad story indeed, but a cycle of life we all journey through in our own time. Your poem displays the emotion and the caring that reminds us of the innocence of youth and the hope of humanity. A very nice poem. Mr. Green
Comment Written 24-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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hi Mr. Green! Thank you so much! It's a real joy to have you read this. I will never ever forget that either. It's like a brand on my psyche. But so long ago. How odd what we remember. :) Thank you again!! Susan
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written a sad story you have brought to life very well triggered by your memories very well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
This is very well written a sad story you have brought to life very well triggered by your memories very well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan
Comment from ikegrif
The contrast between the heat of the land and the coolness of the car's interior was well done. Your did a good job making me feel for the horse. I could see this story as a longer piece where the action shifted between the horse and the car several times, concluding when the came together. Nice job.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
The contrast between the heat of the land and the coolness of the car's interior was well done. Your did a good job making me feel for the horse. I could see this story as a longer piece where the action shifted between the horse and the car several times, concluding when the came together. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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hi there! Thank you Ike~I'm glad you read between the lines. This is great. Some folks don't try, or bother it seems. I really appreciate your time and kind review!! Susan
Comment from Taurean Monkey
Gosh! What a tale, you tell it so well. The horse tells the first part of your tale, and then we get the young girl's perspective of the poor horse's plight. So expressive and so very, very sad. What an excellent piece of prose, Realist, you had me 'feeling'. Regards, TM
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
Gosh! What a tale, you tell it so well. The horse tells the first part of your tale, and then we get the young girl's perspective of the poor horse's plight. So expressive and so very, very sad. What an excellent piece of prose, Realist, you had me 'feeling'. Regards, TM
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Hi there! Thanks! I'm delighted you enjoyed this Miss Monk! It's always a real pleasure to hear from you. Susan
Comment from uniqueauthor
Strong imagery paints a terrible picture of dehydration in the hot sun, and the total lack of concern from the human being is no great surprise. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
Strong imagery paints a terrible picture of dehydration in the hot sun, and the total lack of concern from the human being is no great surprise. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan
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You're welcome. Peace for today
Comment from ennahanid
This is such a sad write and it brought a tear or two. You wrote it in such a way it was very visual and one can but feel the suffering of the animal. Maybe that is why it has stayed with because you sensed the suffering - at 9 your compassion would have been a lot stronger than your father's whose main ambition was to get those miles done with.
Thank you - Dinah
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
This is such a sad write and it brought a tear or two. You wrote it in such a way it was very visual and one can but feel the suffering of the animal. Maybe that is why it has stayed with because you sensed the suffering - at 9 your compassion would have been a lot stronger than your father's whose main ambition was to get those miles done with.
Thank you - Dinah
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan
Comment from sugardog
Oh so sad!!! Heartbreaking. I love the way you told this story from your eyes as a child-your memory. I felt for the little girl and the horse. Nicely done. I love your horse stories...except this was pretty darn sad. Dana
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
Oh so sad!!! Heartbreaking. I love the way you told this story from your eyes as a child-your memory. I felt for the little girl and the horse. Nicely done. I love your horse stories...except this was pretty darn sad. Dana
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Hi again Dana! Thank you so much. This happened...tho of course, i can't know the horses real thoughts. It sure was a depressing sight. My dad meant no harm, he was tired and just wanted to get home. His average speed on those long stretches was 100 mph. He did slow and we tried to see a town, but that horse was out in the absolute middle of nowhere. So awful. Anyway...had to kill a coon last night, it was in the barn swiping cat food. THAT is depressing. I don't like it. My son and brother did the deed and I cried..God help me. xoxo. Susan
Comment from Sasha
This is such a sad and tragic story and even more so because it is true. Your description of the heat is superb and something I can relate to. Got locked out of my apartment today and had to wait an hour for the locksmith to come and it is 90 degrees with 95 percent humidity. Excellent work with this one.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
This is such a sad and tragic story and even more so because it is true. Your description of the heat is superb and something I can relate to. Got locked out of my apartment today and had to wait an hour for the locksmith to come and it is 90 degrees with 95 percent humidity. Excellent work with this one.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi Sasha! OH NO!!! I cannot even remember how many times I have done this! I've locked myself out of my car/truck, MOTEL ROOM! HOUSE! You should write about it Sasha! If you will, I will? LOVE and hugs!! ps..hope you're feeling good! xoxo. S.
Comment from forestport12
Powerful, compelling. I could imagine this in my mind's eyes and felt it in the depth of my soul. You did an outstanding job creating just the right mood. "Lonely bones."
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
Powerful, compelling. I could imagine this in my mind's eyes and felt it in the depth of my soul. You did an outstanding job creating just the right mood. "Lonely bones."
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi again Stan! Thank you very much for such an encouraging review. I am always so grateful and honored too, when you approve. I really am. Susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
How sad. I am sure it left an impression on your heart. I wonder how the the horse got there. Was he wild or dumped like so many dogs and cats are?
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
How sad. I am sure it left an impression on your heart. I wonder how the the horse got there. Was he wild or dumped like so many dogs and cats are?
Comment Written 15-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi Barb...I wish I knew. It still, after 49 years, bugs me. This photo just brought it all back, this looks so like that place. The awful worry I have over things I can't help, or control is just torture. I wish I could shut down. I worry too much. But, thank you dear. I am always SO happy when you enjoy. Love, Susan