Inner City Blues
Dedicated to Ms. Gypsy Blue Rose29 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet! You now have 4 votes.
I am familiar with Gypsy Blue's poetry and I think you did a great job in imitating her work.
As soon as I opened the page and saw the artwork Gypsy came to mind. I love her artwork choices. She chooses carefully.
The poem also captures to the T her style . Short yet impactful.
Her words linger in my head for some time ..
Your imitation captured that aspect too.
Ciao!
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
Ciao mystery poet! You now have 4 votes.
I am familiar with Gypsy Blue's poetry and I think you did a great job in imitating her work.
As soon as I opened the page and saw the artwork Gypsy came to mind. I love her artwork choices. She chooses carefully.
The poem also captures to the T her style . Short yet impactful.
Her words linger in my head for some time ..
Your imitation captured that aspect too.
Ciao!
Keep safe!
Comment Written 10-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2022
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Tempeste thank you for your supportive review. I am a mere imitation of the masterful Haiku poet~Ms. Gypsy. I admire her work like you do. I am happy to call her a friend. Thank you also for the vote.
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Smiles!
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Thanks again :)
Comment from royowen
Yep somethings one simply can't rid oneself of, people will move themselves physically and geographically, but you can't run away from oneself, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
Yep somethings one simply can't rid oneself of, people will move themselves physically and geographically, but you can't run away from oneself, beautifully written my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your comments and review.
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Welcome
Comment from Liz Westfall
I love the moving image you chose and the one you used on the bottom. The whole vibe of it is very gloomy and solemn. I agree that rain can only wash away the superficial imperfections.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
I love the moving image you chose and the one you used on the bottom. The whole vibe of it is very gloomy and solemn. I agree that rain can only wash away the superficial imperfections.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thank you, Liz, for reviewing my poem. Exactly, the superficial.
Comment from estory
You really come right out and say the rain can wash away the grime and dirt, but not our feelings in this post. It is a very different kind of subject matter for a haiku, it doesn't have the nature image, but that doesn't mean it isn't a valid subject matter to give a try and stretch the form a bit. Experimentation is what stretches our concepts of the form. It is a great epiphany moment after all. That sad realization. estory
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
You really come right out and say the rain can wash away the grime and dirt, but not our feelings in this post. It is a very different kind of subject matter for a haiku, it doesn't have the nature image, but that doesn't mean it isn't a valid subject matter to give a try and stretch the form a bit. Experimentation is what stretches our concepts of the form. It is a great epiphany moment after all. That sad realization. estory
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks for the review. The first line and last line are the nature nods. This poem is what one would have if a Haiku and a Senryu were cpmbined. LOL I have always been a stretcher of rules. Check out some of my other poems in my portfolio.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this descriptive, expressive piece. It conveys a powerful, inescapable message:
In areas of poverty and desperation, nothing dismisses the root problems.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this descriptive, expressive piece. It conveys a powerful, inescapable message:
In areas of poverty and desperation, nothing dismisses the root problems.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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You are exactly right; nothing dismisses the root problem. Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, it's sadly true, torrential rains won't wash away the grim, ease the pain, or cleanse frustrated loneliness. And, wow, what a picture to go with your story. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
Yes, it's sadly true, torrential rains won't wash away the grim, ease the pain, or cleanse frustrated loneliness. And, wow, what a picture to go with your story. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks, Ric, for stopping by and reading my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
All cities have a seedy side to them as the harsh realities of life exist within and some are homeless and sleep on the streets. I used to work in the big city and was never afraid, but now I never visit the city as I never feel safe, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
All cities have a seedy side to them as the harsh realities of life exist within and some are homeless and sleep on the streets. I used to work in the big city and was never afraid, but now I never visit the city as I never feel safe, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2022
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Thanks for your comments and review.
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Senryu poem- excellent picture presentation- good word count and connection between lines- good theme- points out to me- the difference between city life and living in suburbia - core of the city well described as grime- where being street wise is essential for survival- dysfunction never washed away- where opportunity is created by naivety© - and considered to be the once's to blamed for crime- shouldn't have flashed the cash- brought it on yourself- example- shouldn't have worn the red dress- mentality of the sick street- good job
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
I like your Senryu poem- excellent picture presentation- good word count and connection between lines- good theme- points out to me- the difference between city life and living in suburbia - core of the city well described as grime- where being street wise is essential for survival- dysfunction never washed away- where opportunity is created by naivety© - and considered to be the once's to blamed for crime- shouldn't have flashed the cash- brought it on yourself- example- shouldn't have worn the red dress- mentality of the sick street- good job
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you, AP, for your comments and review.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
This is written from a compassionate hand and leaves the reader with a strong message.
A verse exploring the juxtaposition between urban blithe and one's mental health.
I appreciate the theme, as it is relatable and important to bring awareness to the hell some people endure everyday.
The presentation is graphic which mirrors the sentiment left.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
This is written from a compassionate hand and leaves the reader with a strong message.
A verse exploring the juxtaposition between urban blithe and one's mental health.
I appreciate the theme, as it is relatable and important to bring awareness to the hell some people endure everyday.
The presentation is graphic which mirrors the sentiment left.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you for your heartfelt comments and review. Life is tough wherever one may reside.
Comment from Regina Elliott
A concise and compelling
write. Superb penning in
tribute to Gypsy Blue Rose.
My enthusiastic best wishes
for the competition. Many
blessings to you. ~
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
A concise and compelling
write. Superb penning in
tribute to Gypsy Blue Rose.
My enthusiastic best wishes
for the competition. Many
blessings to you. ~
Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2022
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Thank you for the review. I can only hope!