Life, Love, and Other Disasters
A collection of poems on these themes109 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
Oh, dear. That had to be painful. Excellent rhymes and rhythm to make the story fun to read. You do tell a humorous story. Looks like this is a contest entry, so best of luck.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Oh, dear. That had to be painful. Excellent rhymes and rhythm to make the story fun to read. You do tell a humorous story. Looks like this is a contest entry, so best of luck.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you.
This was a revived post so the contest was over and done long ago with no joy for me.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
During time of moving in flight, trouble can come in a dreadful flight. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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During time of moving in flight, trouble can come in a dreadful flight. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Les. Charlie
Comment from GWHARGIS
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
I loved your story in a poem. I am female but have two sons and a husband. I know your pain. What made it worse was that it was self inflicted. Great rhyming and the flow was great. It didn't sem forced or awkward anywhere. Great tale and great rhythm. nicely done.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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I loved your story in a poem. I am female but have two sons and a husband. I know your pain. What made it worse was that it was self inflicted. Great rhyming and the flow was great. It didn't sem forced or awkward anywhere. Great tale and great rhythm. nicely done.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Donya Quijote
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
Hahahahaha. I am laughing out loud at this most unfortunate happening. No sympathy from will you get when it's a rule for one for have broken. And amusing slip in the shower...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hahahahaha. I am laughing out loud at this most unfortunate happening. No sympathy from will you get when it's a rule for one for have broken. And amusing slip in the shower...
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from 9999pool
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
At the end of the story we may wonder whether we should shudder and squeaked in pain or should we burst out laughing. The guys will truly understand this type of accidents and now the ladies will be glad they are born differently, smiles.
A Good story with a twist that landed him on the wrong side or should i say, part of the body, LOL.
Cheerio, Rithcie. :))
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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At the end of the story we may wonder whether we should shudder and squeaked in pain or should we burst out laughing. The guys will truly understand this type of accidents and now the ladies will be glad they are born differently, smiles.
A Good story with a twist that landed him on the wrong side or should i say, part of the body, LOL.
Cheerio, Rithcie. :))
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ritchie.
I've almost recovered enough to take showers again now.
Steve
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Good on you mate. Better use an anti-slip mat this time around. The next incident may not be good as well, big smiles. :))
Ritchie. :))
Comment from Just2Write
Rating of Chapter 37 - Sophie and Andy
Ah, yes - how often has any one of us done something dumb while trying to appear smart. Alas, poor Sophie - seemed she had a keen enough eye to know it was Andy coming, but not enough to know that the river-bed was dry. Nice ironic twist at the end - Andy was going to ask the bespectacled girl out! (We always learned: Boys don't make passes at girls who wear glasses.) Maybe she thought she needed an edge to win his affections.
Anyway - great creative writing and rhyming. A light-hearted look at stupidity.
Rose.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Ah, yes - how often has any one of us done something dumb while trying to appear smart. Alas, poor Sophie - seemed she had a keen enough eye to know it was Andy coming, but not enough to know that the river-bed was dry. Nice ironic twist at the end - Andy was going to ask the bespectacled girl out! (We always learned: Boys don't make passes at girls who wear glasses.) Maybe she thought she needed an edge to win his affections.
Anyway - great creative writing and rhyming. A light-hearted look at stupidity.
Rose.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Rose.
This reminds me of the Darwin Awards which are awarded posthumously to those who have committed acts of such vast stupidity that they have permanently removed themselves from the gene pool...
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
Though I am not a guy, I could quite visualize the pain and tears that your poor shower episode invoked. Men and women have little lessons that they learn. It's mostly women (I think) that can do the most damage to themselves. Like putting the panty liner in the wrong way around, or worse, getting the bikini wax stuck in places where the eyes would water trying to remove it. A very funny Story in a Poem, Steve. I had not seen it before, so thanks for the re-posting.
Rose.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Though I am not a guy, I could quite visualize the pain and tears that your poor shower episode invoked. Men and women have little lessons that they learn. It's mostly women (I think) that can do the most damage to themselves. Like putting the panty liner in the wrong way around, or worse, getting the bikini wax stuck in places where the eyes would water trying to remove it. A very funny Story in a Poem, Steve. I had not seen it before, so thanks for the re-posting.
Rose.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Rose - glad you enjoyed this piece of self-inflicted pain and humiliation.
Steve
Comment from mstad55
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
Excellent. Well written from start to finish. Very enjoyable even if the end results were painful, the telling of the story raises a laugh. Good job. mstad55
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Excellent. Well written from start to finish. Very enjoyable even if the end results were painful, the telling of the story raises a laugh. Good job. mstad55
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
A clever way to market your book--challenge the reader. The poem is a hoot. And to think it's based on truth. I guess there's an art to cleaning a man's equipment. Hubby says a kick in the balls is quite painful. You certainly got this point across with the hyperbole of your scream. Great flow and rhyme. Should have won the contest! A fun read.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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A clever way to market your book--challenge the reader. The poem is a hoot. And to think it's based on truth. I guess there's an art to cleaning a man's equipment. Hubby says a kick in the balls is quite painful. You certainly got this point across with the hyperbole of your scream. Great flow and rhyme. Should have won the contest! A fun read.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from nancyjam
Rating of Chapter 1 - Bathroom Incident
Hilarious, Steve! You have such a gift for
rhythm and clever rhyming while telling a
funny story.
Glad you brought it back so I could catch it.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Hilarious, Steve! You have such a gift for
rhythm and clever rhyming while telling a
funny story.
Glad you brought it back so I could catch it.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2014
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Thanks, nancy.
Steve
