Dark Moments

by Treischel

The darkest moments fly away, like
Whispered wishes on the wind.
In fevered flow, they'll flutter and go,
To places graces just can't rescind.

Dream-catchers placed on high will grab them,
As they catch upon their vines
They'll flutter and go, in fevered flow,
When the evening shadows touch their tines.

Just when the Sun at dusk is faded,
They are loosened by an angry breeze.
In fevered flow, they'll flutter and go,
To wherever the wind currents please.

So, hold onto your dreams more tightly,
But let go of all painful pasts.
They'll flutter and go, in fevered flow.
Then, seek out those cherished dreams at last.

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Just some fleeting thoughts.

This poem is a ZaniLa Rhyme.
The ZaniLa Rhyme, a form created by Laura Lamarca, consists 4 lines per stanza.
The rhyme scheme for this form is:
abcb,
and a syllable count of:
9/7/9/9 per stanza.
Line 3 of each stanza contains an internal rhyme that is repeated in each odd numbered stanza.
Even stanzas contain the same line, but swapped. So, on every other stanza the 3rd line repeats, but is reversed. I guess that's where the "Zani" comes to play. The "La" is a signature of all formats created by her.
The ZaniLa Rhyme has a minimum of 3 stanzas and no maximum poem length.

For this poem, I chose 4 stanzas. So, the rhyme scheme is as follows:

a,b,(C1,C2),b - d,e,(C2,C1),e - f,g,(C1,C2),g - h,i,(C2,C1),i,

where the capital letters indicate the repeated lines, the parenthethis indicate the inline rhymes, and the numbers identify the sequence.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on October 17, 2014.

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