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A Pantoum Poem

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When Pain Controls the Brain

by Treischel

When Pain Controls the Brain
(A Pantuom Poem)


When chronic pain controls the brain,
The searing days become ordeals,
While night provides relief from strains,
Just fleeting gains the body feels.

The searing days become ordeals.
There are no lasting remedies,
Just fleeting gains the body feels,
And many prayers, that pain might ease.

There are no lasting remedies,
But patience 'til it all begins,
And many prayers, that pain might ease,
With pleas to God 'bout suffering sins.

But patience 'til it all begins,
While night provides relief from strains,
With pleas to God 'bout suffering sins,
When chronic pain controls the brain.

 



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My wife suffers from chronic backpain. I've had 2 back surgeries myself, and its acting up again. It seems, for both of us, that we wake up fine, but by evening, the pain has flared up, and in her case, it becomes unbearable. The pain takes control and makes it hard to think. Sometimes you wonder what sins God is punishing you for.

This poem is a Pantoum.
The Pantoum is a form of poetry where are repeating lines throughout the poem. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next. This pattern continues for any number of stanzas, except for the final stanza, which differs in the repeating pattern. The first and third lines of the last stanza are the second and fourth of the penultimate; the first line of the poem is the last line of the final stanza, and the third line of the first stanza is the second of the final. Ideally, the meaning of lines shifts when they are repeated although the words remain exactly the same: this can be done by shifting punctuation, punning, or simply recontextualizing.
The rhyme scheme can be defined as follows:
A1,B1,A2,B2...B1,C1,B2,C2...C1,D1,C2,D2...D1,A2,D2,A1
It is typically written in iambic tetrameter.

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