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A Ha-Wai-E-Ku Poem

A chapter in the book Little Poems

Wild Waves

by Treischel


Wild Waves



Hawaii has surfing waves
to ride upon those
liquid peaks. Write a Haiku.

Our big lake has got them too
both with wild wet waves
Then lets just Ha-Wai-E-Ku

Turned that 5-7-5 Poem
Inside to outside.
What wonderful things to do!








Tired of all those 5-7-5, Haiku, and Senryu. Lets turn them inside out and create a wave with a peak and valley. That's just what Hawaiian Mermaid did. She created this rebellion, "because I can". She calls it a Ha-Wai-E-Ku. So here's my tribute to Ginger, Hawaiian Mermaid.

This poem's syllable count, of 7-5-7, looks like a wave to me. Three waves coming at ya! I added a touch of rhyme and alliteration, some capital letters, punctuation and even an "ing" word. Here's to breaking those rules. Write on Rebel poets!

The picture is of surfers on Lake Superior in March, from the Author's collection.
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