General Poetry posted December 3, 2020 Chapters:  ...61 62 -63- 64... 


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One must always start with loving oneself

A chapter in the book Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

Forgive oneself

by JLR

Mistakes entrap the mind!
Also, regrets attached to past deeds.
There sit I, stalled deep in life's weeds
where hurt and remorse do breed.
Malaise keeps me in a taut bind.
My once champagne and roses, big plans, derailed.
Irate at self for all the attempts that failed,
the weight of injustice wrongly scaled.

So whence did that week, day, hour grind
my dreams, my hopes, to halt, thus I declined?

Oh yes! There were many days and all manner
of ways where I stepped so high my soul
soared fine and I had far more ups than downs,
then it all near magically turned sour.

Mistakes entrap the mind
unless one can forgive oneself,
be it himself or it could be herself!
Life sure does not flow like a flat ocean
So do prepare, hold on, be ready for all the commotion...
Mistakes do not need to entrap the mind
nor does malaise keep me in a taut bind!



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#2754
2020


Potlatch Club Challenge:
Fusion Sonnet--week of 12-2-2020
FUSION SONNET. It breaks several Traditional Sonnet rules. Most notably, it has 21 Lines rather than the typical 14. The Fusion comes from blending in 4 lines of Free Verse at lines 11 through 14. It has a strict Structure and Rhyme Scheme, but is more flexible in the area of Meter where the lines may be as here of variable length. The rhythm however, apart from the free verse section, should be iambic throughout. Here are the complex rules:
14 line Poem followed by a Half Sonnet of 7 lines acting as a Coda or Tail to add additional stability to the poem. No particular Meter is followed, "Fusing" it with the modern Free Verse style.
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First Fourteen Lines:
*Same Rhyme in 1st,5th,9th & 10th Lines.
*Same Rhyme in 2nd,3rd & 4th Lines.
*Same Rhyme in 6th,7th & 8th lines. So: A1 b b b A2 c c c,
*iRhetorical questions in 9th & 10th lines.
*Negative and pessimistic note in the first 10 lines.
*Free Verse in 11th, 12th,13 & 14th Lines. Relates back to something similar.
* * * * *
*Line 15 repeats line 1.
*Next Seven Lines:-The Half Sonnet, acting as a Coda.
*Same Rhyme in 16th and 17th lines.
*Same Rhyme in 18th and 19th lines.
*Line 20 and 21 repeats line 1 and 5. (modified slightly if you wish.)

Club entry for the "~ Fusion Sonnet ~ week of 12-2-2020" event in "Put Pen To Paper Potlatch Poetry Club".  Locate a writing club.
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