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Wonders of Nature by Nosha17

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Dear Faye,
This is your best yet, I believe. Its flow and rhyme and choice of words build a perfect picture of the sylvan glen. I can feel myself sighing with contentment.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 02-Sep-2014

I Need a New Desk by Warren Rodgers

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Dear Rodger,
A worthy winner. Excellent iambic tetrameter and great strong couplet rhymes. As to the content, it goes to the core of every man with a busy mind. No time for cosmetic nonsense. At least that is what I tell "She who must be obeyed". Ouch!!!
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 02-Sep-2014

The Insane Writer by Domino 2

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Dear Roy,
Join the club. A cluttered desk is the sign of a busy mind. Don't know who said that but I cling to it, particularly when faced with "She who must be obeyed". Well written, good rhyme and metre.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 02-Sep-2014

To See You Again by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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Dear Dawn,
A sonnet of which to be proud. May I make one small suggestion in relation to the time line. I think that the line:

when first upon your face my eyes alight.

implies you have not yet met.

Maybe better as:

when NEXT upon your face my eyes alight.

Hope this helps.

Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 31-Aug-2014

Absolute Contrition by visionary1234

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Dear Sharyn,
The metre is fine and the rhymes are divine.
With both of these skills in your favour
I think it's a crime that you're toeing the line
Of obsessive compulsive behaviour.

Your withered old friendly sage (and part time psychologist),
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 31-Aug-2014

My Family by adewpearl

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Dear Brooke,
Well, he certainly could not have a more doting Nanna and good luck to him, but you are right. There are too many not so lucky.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 31-Aug-2014

Moving Home by sandramitchell

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Dear Sandra,
There is no place like home, but, you are right. Moving is a traumatic experience, particularly between countries. Hasta la vista, Espania. Hola, Ingleterra!
Regards,
Reg

Comment Written by rhymelord on 31-Aug-2014

Sunshine and I by adewpearl

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Dear Brooke,
As usual a charming work, but it is not often (in fact never) that I have had cause to question your metre.
The lines seem to follow a metre of a strong syllable followed by three anapaests, except in the following lines, which I found somewhat off putting.

moon plays by night and sun during day.
Sun tossed his rays and I caught each one --

moon plays by night and THE sun during day.
Sun tossed his rays and I caught EVERY one --

Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 31-Aug-2014

Corfe and its castle by Nosha17

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Dear Faye,
From sylvan glades to wonderful historic monuments and the call of derring do attached to them, you capture not only the picture but the soul of the scene. Great writing.
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 29-Aug-2014

Cruising Without Connection by Connie C

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My dear Connie,
Beautifully presented in solid rhyme and immaculate metre, this one takes me back to those glorious days when one went on holiday to get away from everything. Truly a catharsis to clear away tensions and relax. I will confess neither my wife or I can understand you youngsters' seeming addiction to the I world. (Relax, just a grumpy old man speaking)
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 29-Aug-2014


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