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Acta Non Verba by kiwisteveh

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Dear Steve,
Now that's what I call succinct, pungent writing. The punch line just explodes out of nowhere and your verbal picture is superb. I like the erudite use of the Latin also.
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Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 24-Jul-2014

All That Awaits You, My Son by Connie C

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Dear Connie,
Added to your perfect rendition of rhyme and metre, comes a heartwarming sentiment that is quite irresistible. You were right, the picture screams out for a poem to support it and that you have eloquently provided. Great writing.
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Comment Written by rhymelord on 24-Jul-2014

If There Were Only Just We Two by adewpearl

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Dear Brooke,
Cute, sweet and oh so expressive. As usual there is nothing I can criticise in your writing, which constantly reminds me of old music. This time, "If you were the only girl in the world and I was the only boy", but I guess this was before your time.
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Comment Written by rhymelord on 24-Jul-2014

She's No Cougar by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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Dear Dawn,
Well written and vivid statement of insecurity (but how did you know I look like that). All that aside, the old Harry Truman quote comes to mind "If you can't stand the heat, get out of the kitchen". LOL

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Comment Written by rhymelord on 24-Jul-2014

Snack-el-y Doo Sal by Drusilla1

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Dear Katherine,
Wonderful message in outstanding, yet simply constructed rhyme and metre. Let's hope that the message can get through to the chubby checkers. One minor point, however. I find the following couplet does not have proper syntax. I think you might revisit it.

She happily snack-led on broccoli spears,
and soon her sweet tooth and dieting fears.

Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 24-Jul-2014

Just Like Our Trees . . . by Connie C

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Dear Connie,
Absolutely faultless rhythm and lovely soft abab rhyming make this a pleasure to read. Your message and sentiment are described loud and clear. Trees really are things of beauty and I hope you do last out to see some of the new ones mature.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 22-Jul-2014

The Riverbank by Nosha17

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Dear Faye,
This is quite delightful, with perfect rhyme and smooth metre. You certainly have a touch for description of sylvan scenes. May I suggest, though, that you revise the first stanza to reflect the present tense, in keeping with the remainder of the poem. It is not vital, by any means, just neater, I guess.
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Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 22-Jul-2014

Easy Come, Easy Go by Ideasaregems-Dawn
Prologue of the book untitled (yet)

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Dear Dawn,
As a prologue and summary, this serves very well to wet the appetite. It promises a multifaceted story of a united/disparate family, with all the complications of personality clashes that can occur under pressure. I look forward to the main body of work.
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 22-Jul-2014

Dead Man's Croon by sandramitchell

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Dear Sandra,
Excellent cadence in (mostly) iambic pentameter, the choice of graphic poets, and great strong thumping rhymes, which suit the genre of this poem. Good read.
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Comment Written by rhymelord on 22-Jul-2014

An Epigram for Troubled Times by adewpearl

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Dear Brooke,
The epigram form was made for you. You have always such a pithy way of expression, with no wasted words. Add to that a sense of humour and Bingo, another gem. Love the double meaning of "arms".
Reg
Comment Written by rhymelord on 22-Jul-2014


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