A Compilation of Short stories
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Comment from DeboraDyess
Wow, Ulla! What an intriguing short story! I want yyou to write it into a longer story! I enjoyed it very much and found your descriptions lovely. But ... did the narrator's world die? You gotta finish the tale! :)
Blessings and best of luck,
Deb
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Wow, Ulla! What an intriguing short story! I want yyou to write it into a longer story! I enjoyed it very much and found your descriptions lovely. But ... did the narrator's world die? You gotta finish the tale! :)
Blessings and best of luck,
Deb
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thanks a lot, Deb. I'm so glad you liked it. Ulla:)))
Comment from Dena Brenner
Very good story, which is impressive in 100 words. The first two lines are fantastic and captured my attention. My only question is that I am not sure I understand the title in relation to the story, is the character the spy?
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Very good story, which is impressive in 100 words. The first two lines are fantastic and captured my attention. My only question is that I am not sure I understand the title in relation to the story, is the character the spy?
Comment Written 17-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Yes, A spy who is rejected by his country or so it seems. Thanks a lot for the review. The title is te guide to the story. Ulla:)))
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Oh! Sorry about that, thank you for clarifying because now it makes perfect sense
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Great!
Comment from Joan E.
The artwork reinforces your opening lines so well. I admired your appeal to our sense of sound at the conclusion. Best wishes int the Flash Fiction contest- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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The artwork reinforces your opening lines so well. I admired your appeal to our sense of sound at the conclusion. Best wishes int the Flash Fiction contest- Joan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Joan. I soapppreciate it. Ulla:)))
Comment from equestrik
I know this had to be kept to 100 words and you did well with that. I did get a bit lost though and read it a few times. I assumed, in the end that she was beaten by a man who she now would leave for a better life.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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I know this had to be kept to 100 words and you did well with that. I did get a bit lost though and read it a few times. I assumed, in the end that she was beaten by a man who she now would leave for a better life.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi equestrik, you're not the only one. The title is really the guideline to the story. Thank a lot for the review. Ulla:)))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
The 'spy' seems to me that s/he is either injured and dying OR in a dream sequence, Ulla. Either way, the character is confused as to what is real or fake--and is trying to make sense from what is heard. Your lines read well with vivid imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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The 'spy' seems to me that s/he is either injured and dying OR in a dream sequence, Ulla. Either way, the character is confused as to what is real or fake--and is trying to make sense from what is heard. Your lines read well with vivid imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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You are close, Jan. It can be read in many ways, I suppose. Thanks for a great review. Ulla:)))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
100 Words Flash Contest
The Death of a Spy
by Ulla
Hello, Ulla,
This flash fiction is very mysterious...leaves a lot of questions unanswered that would make the beginning of a long story. It's very unique. Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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100 Words Flash Contest
The Death of a Spy
by Ulla
Hello, Ulla,
This flash fiction is very mysterious...leaves a lot of questions unanswered that would make the beginning of a long story. It's very unique. Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Marival. I'm glad you liked it. I am thinking of turning it into a long story a novel, even. Ulla:)))
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Excellent ending line for this short short piece. It seems like spies get roughed up way too often. If I had not read the word 'spy' I would have thought of about half a dozen other possibilities, not the least of which would have been a bird instead of a man. Quite the intrigue here.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Excellent ending line for this short short piece. It seems like spies get roughed up way too often. If I had not read the word 'spy' I would have thought of about half a dozen other possibilities, not the least of which would have been a bird instead of a man. Quite the intrigue here.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Chrystie. I'm so glad you liked it. Ulla:)))
Comment from estory
I liked it. There was a great surreal feel to this, a great dream like mood. Your oblique abstract images of the pain and the mountain stream, that abstract sound of the chiming bell, seems to place us on the edge of life, in that moment between life and death. You seem to reach out but don't grasp anything. This piece hung in the air like an unanswered question. Nice job with this. estory
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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I liked it. There was a great surreal feel to this, a great dream like mood. Your oblique abstract images of the pain and the mountain stream, that abstract sound of the chiming bell, seems to place us on the edge of life, in that moment between life and death. You seem to reach out but don't grasp anything. This piece hung in the air like an unanswered question. Nice job with this. estory
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, estory. I'm so glad you liked it. Yes, I believe he is in that dream like state between life and death. Thanks so much again. Ulla:)))
Comment from l.raven
Hi Ulla, WOW!!!! sweet girl...this could be the great beginning of a great story here...had I died and gone to Heaven ???...how did I get where I am...how did I get started???...go with it my sweet friend...very well written...perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Hi Ulla, WOW!!!! sweet girl...this could be the great beginning of a great story here...had I died and gone to Heaven ???...how did I get where I am...how did I get started???...go with it my sweet friend...very well written...perfect picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, Linda. So many have said that to me and I think I have an idea. Thanks again. Ulla xxx
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awesome ....shoot for the stars sweet girl...and your so welcome...love you...xxoo
Comment from rama devi
WOW, Ulla, I think you have a winner here, though I wonder if some readers might find it confusing. I found it immensely creative and unique...and loved the mystery challenge for the reader! I absolutely love the opening line, but suggest one comma:
The sound of water, the sweet sound of water(,) ran in a nearby stream.
one more:
That's when I remembered,(NO COMMA, I think) what I'd wished to forget.
THIS is the most mysterious part:
The beating of a man who searched - or so they'd told me - a truth that no longer existed.
which truth no longer exists, I wonder?
I'm wondering what this new world is and why the character is its prey:
My old world had died, only to become the prey of a new one.
AWESOME metaphorical closing line:
A ring chimed in the distance, and I reached out towards the dying tone.
This sounds like a prologue to a great novel. Write it! :)
Love the closing image, the swift pacing, the intensity and the deep POV. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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WOW, Ulla, I think you have a winner here, though I wonder if some readers might find it confusing. I found it immensely creative and unique...and loved the mystery challenge for the reader! I absolutely love the opening line, but suggest one comma:
The sound of water, the sweet sound of water(,) ran in a nearby stream.
one more:
That's when I remembered,(NO COMMA, I think) what I'd wished to forget.
THIS is the most mysterious part:
The beating of a man who searched - or so they'd told me - a truth that no longer existed.
which truth no longer exists, I wonder?
I'm wondering what this new world is and why the character is its prey:
My old world had died, only to become the prey of a new one.
AWESOME metaphorical closing line:
A ring chimed in the distance, and I reached out towards the dying tone.
This sounds like a prologue to a great novel. Write it! :)
Love the closing image, the swift pacing, the intensity and the deep POV. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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WOW, Rama. this is a fantastic review. You've got it, although there are still questions and that's, of course, the intention. I have made the corrections. You, as so many others, have suggested I should write a story from this, and I think I will. I already have an idea for a new novel, even. Thank you so very much. A hug. Ulla :)))
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Yay! Thanks for your enthusiastic response, dear. I look forward to reading your next novel (and, as mentioned before, you can have a discount if you want a full edit of it)...
Big hugs,
rd
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I may need your help, when I've finished my present novel. I will let you know. Meanwhile, thank you so much. Ulla:)))
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