The Birth of Colors and Rainbows
A brief fairy tale.19 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, I chose this work because it had the least number of reviews on your front page, and I am so glad I did! How very wonderful it is -- lovely, evocative descriptions of a most imaginative premise. I loved it!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
Well, I chose this work because it had the least number of reviews on your front page, and I am so glad I did! How very wonderful it is -- lovely, evocative descriptions of a most imaginative premise. I loved it!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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You know, thank you so much for reading this little fantasy of mine...
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello amada I had pleasant time while reading or brief fairy tale. Your title 'The Birth of Colors and Rainbows'
drew me in to see and read the wonders that God and Mother Natures gave us like you said in your prose
The people on earth looked above and smiled at each other.
( for the wonder of God' gifts for us to see.)
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
Hello amada I had pleasant time while reading or brief fairy tale. Your title 'The Birth of Colors and Rainbows'
drew me in to see and read the wonders that God and Mother Natures gave us like you said in your prose
The people on earth looked above and smiled at each other.
( for the wonder of God' gifts for us to see.)
Gert
Comment Written 26-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thank you Gert for reading my work.
Comment from Mary Furlong
I absolutely love this essay on color. Tweak it a little for vocabulary and you would have a children's picture book. Thanks for telling me about this piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
I absolutely love this essay on color. Tweak it a little for vocabulary and you would have a children's picture book. Thanks for telling me about this piece.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2020
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Thank you Mary.
Comment from Poetic Friend
I always love originality in a literary work, and this piece certainly have originality.
I love your perspective on your God's creation. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it,
Thank you, Amada, dear.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
I always love originality in a literary work, and this piece certainly have originality.
I love your perspective on your God's creation. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it,
Thank you, Amada, dear.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Poetic Friend. I so appreciate your meaninguful support to my work. .
Comment from AJ McCall
This a very fun, imaginary poem of how God created our world. I love the ending line, people smiling as they looked up...
The rainbow also represents the covenant of God and Noah when he told him, he'd never flood the earth again.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
This a very fun, imaginary poem of how God created our world. I love the ending line, people smiling as they looked up...
The rainbow also represents the covenant of God and Noah when he told him, he'd never flood the earth again.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work on the rainbow and for your gracious comments.
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You're most welcome!
Comment from Mastery
Hello my friend. What a wonderful story this truly is. I enjoyed it immensely. So much imagination on your part.
Like: "their uniqueness into each other, which would give birth to masterpieces to last through the ages. To name a few: the sublime Starry Night, the mystic smile of a Mona Lisa, and
the tragic Last Supper."
Great writing but were you aware your paragraphing is not happening at all? You might check with Tom on that.
Bless you. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
Hello my friend. What a wonderful story this truly is. I enjoyed it immensely. So much imagination on your part.
Like: "their uniqueness into each other, which would give birth to masterpieces to last through the ages. To name a few: the sublime Starry Night, the mystic smile of a Mona Lisa, and
the tragic Last Supper."
Great writing but were you aware your paragraphing is not happening at all? You might check with Tom on that.
Bless you. : ) Bob
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you Bob for your gracious review to my work here. I will consult with Tom; but it could be my fault, you know I havve eyesight issues.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really lovely, Amada. Your creative gift with words, created more with the way of colours. I could just see God looking down and thinking how bland everything look. Then He drops in on Nature, and after having a glass or two of something, they created all those lovely colours between them. I loved this story, well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
That was really lovely, Amada. Your creative gift with words, created more with the way of colours. I could just see God looking down and thinking how bland everything look. Then He drops in on Nature, and after having a glass or two of something, they created all those lovely colours between them. I loved this story, well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Ho Sandra, i absolutely enjoyed your review to my fantasy work in here...I especially liked God and nature having a cup of two of something...of couerse, a little nectar could help, anytime...
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A fairy tale indeed.
this is lovely, wistful and playful. Tonally spot on, it has an almost ethereal quality to it. I think with a little tweaking, it would also make a fine free verse poem.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
Hi there,
A fairy tale indeed.
this is lovely, wistful and playful. Tonally spot on, it has an almost ethereal quality to it. I think with a little tweaking, it would also make a fine free verse poem.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you dear poet for supporting my work. Your comments are an enlightment to my writing process.
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely and poetic description of how God created colors that would inspire artists for millennia to come. It's fascinating how light and our eyes work together to see color as different animals see things differently from us.
There were some formatting issues where a sentence got divided up by a blank line like:
"spark
of its own; "
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
A lovely and poetic description of how God created colors that would inspire artists for millennia to come. It's fascinating how light and our eyes work together to see color as different animals see things differently from us.
There were some formatting issues where a sentence got divided up by a blank line like:
"spark
of its own; "
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your comments to my work. I orrected the formating issues, to the best of my handling of this computer.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Ah, and the story of tints and hues and such began. I like this alternative story of how the rainbow was created (and why).
He dug a handfuls (remove "a")
flakes , and they became (remove comma?)
Do you need the comma?: a shy rose petal was soaring by, and he blew
he took a log of robust coal and tinted in mighty black (it or it in?)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
Ah, and the story of tints and hues and such began. I like this alternative story of how the rainbow was created (and why).
He dug a handfuls (remove "a")
flakes , and they became (remove comma?)
Do you need the comma?: a shy rose petal was soaring by, and he blew
he took a log of robust coal and tinted in mighty black (it or it in?)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work with so much care. I like it. I did the corrections you suggested. Thanks.