Sid Was Saved
a 50 word story17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a serious undertone to your words here Bill and I think I would rather not think about it, cannibalism is a nasty necessity on a deserted island! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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There is a serious undertone to your words here Bill and I think I would rather not think about it, cannibalism is a nasty necessity on a deserted island! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from nomi338
Eww. You really are a sick S.O.B. LOL. At first I didn't get it, but when I reread it, it jumped out at me. Who are you Bill Schott? Your sense of humor is sick, twisted and bizarre. That has to be why I like you so much. The strangest thing of all is that before I met you, I never met a Marine that I liked. Go figure.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Eww. You really are a sick S.O.B. LOL. At first I didn't get it, but when I reread it, it jumped out at me. Who are you Bill Schott? Your sense of humor is sick, twisted and bizarre. That has to be why I like you so much. The strangest thing of all is that before I met you, I never met a Marine that I liked. Go figure.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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You have to meet people at the right time. Twenty years ago I was an egocentric prick. Nowadays I am an ego-left-of-center teddy bear.
Comment from Mistydawn
Hmm. Your story makes a person wonder where the cooked meat came from. Not sure I'd want to eat it after she said that. Your story is well-written, very interesting Like your other it makes the reader's imagination work overtime. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Hmm. Your story makes a person wonder where the cooked meat came from. Not sure I'd want to eat it after she said that. Your story is well-written, very interesting Like your other it makes the reader's imagination work overtime. Nicely done.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Mistydawn.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Ewww! Your little horror story suits my warped sense of humor, Bill. You did a great job telling this tale in so few words. I wonder if he ultimately survives, or is on next week's menu. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Ewww! Your little horror story suits my warped sense of humor, Bill. You did a great job telling this tale in so few words. I wonder if he ultimately survives, or is on next week's menu. :) Nancy
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Hope the first guy keeps well.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
If I understood this dribble correctly it's exceptonal. If not I'm suffering from side-effects of too much lockdown. In my humble opinion I would delete crawled before (? irrelevant) change passing to passed (correct grammar with change) and use the two words saved to add not first at the end.
Just one question. Why didn't you submit it to the dribble contest?
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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If I understood this dribble correctly it's exceptonal. If not I'm suffering from side-effects of too much lockdown. In my humble opinion I would delete crawled before (? irrelevant) change passing to passed (correct grammar with change) and use the two words saved to add not first at the end.
Just one question. Why didn't you submit it to the dribble contest?
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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I was submitting on the deadline, but they said I was late.
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Damned, you must be hopping. And now you've shown it, you coudn't even submit it if I invented a contest for you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!!! LOL!! I would definitely thank God!! Where happened to the first man she saved? LOL. They say humans taste like chicken, not that I'd like to test that theory. This was great, Bill. well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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LOL!!! LOL!! I would definitely thank God!! Where happened to the first man she saved? LOL. They say humans taste like chicken, not that I'd like to test that theory. This was great, Bill. well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Sandra. It?s all in the right seasoning.
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LOL!! :))
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written and sweet 50 word flash fiction story. You used very good descriptive words with very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings Teri
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This is a very well written and sweet 50 word flash fiction story. You used very good descriptive words with very lovely imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Blessings Teri
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I am still trying to figure this one out, perhaps I should go and get something to eat and comeback to finish this review when My brain is working better.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Dear Bill, I am still trying to figure this one out, perhaps I should go and get something to eat and comeback to finish this review when My brain is working better.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Just don?t accept mystery meat from anyone named Sarah.
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Oh man I didn?t see that one coming!
Comment from judiverse
And what might have happened to him if he had been the first person she saved that day? It might have depended on how hungry the young woman was. This is so twisted. You do a great job of building up to your last line. This would have made a great contest entry, but I didn't see that you had entered it. I don't think the dashes between saved and second are necessary. judi
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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And what might have happened to him if he had been the first person she saved that day? It might have depended on how hungry the young woman was. This is so twisted. You do a great job of building up to your last line. This would have made a great contest entry, but I didn't see that you had entered it. I don't think the dashes between saved and second are necessary. judi
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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The time ran out as I was entering. They must be on bar time as I still had five minutes according to Eastern Standard Time. Would have been a contender.
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Too bad. This would have been a great entry. judi
Comment from damommy
Little does he know how truly lucky he was! I wonder if she ever told him what the meat was. If it came to surviving, I think we'd all do it. Good job telling this story in just fifty words!
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Little does he know how truly lucky he was! I wonder if she ever told him what the meat was. If it came to surviving, I think we'd all do it. Good job telling this story in just fifty words!
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you, Yvonne.
