cocoon
3-6-9 Poem7 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
These are excellent 3-6-9 verses, all tied together in one overall thought. I like how you leave the interpretation open for the reader. I especially like the description of the grey-eyes aglow. You can almost feel the wisdom and love coming from them.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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These are excellent 3-6-9 verses, all tied together in one overall thought. I like how you leave the interpretation open for the reader. I especially like the description of the grey-eyes aglow. You can almost feel the wisdom and love coming from them.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thanks for the very kind words.
Steve
Comment from robyn corum
Steve,
A beautiful, encouraging, and hopeful post for this contest of small poems. I've read lots and lots and must say that yours rises above the rest. (Shhhh...) *smile*
Your syllable counts are all just right and your words are unique and totally original. The addition of end rhymes adds a bonus pleasure to the reading.
On the first read, I got a message of the love and comfort in hard times from GOD. On the second and third reads, I understood this is directed at a mortal being - one who provides the most basic (and yet hard to find!) solace.
A lovely entry - I enjoyed. Good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Steve,
A beautiful, encouraging, and hopeful post for this contest of small poems. I've read lots and lots and must say that yours rises above the rest. (Shhhh...) *smile*
Your syllable counts are all just right and your words are unique and totally original. The addition of end rhymes adds a bonus pleasure to the reading.
On the first read, I got a message of the love and comfort in hard times from GOD. On the second and third reads, I understood this is directed at a mortal being - one who provides the most basic (and yet hard to find!) solace.
A lovely entry - I enjoyed. Good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Hi, Robyn - good to see you.. I appreciate the obvious attention you paid to my poem and the understanding you took from it.
Stay safe.
Steve
Many thanks for this great review
Comment from skyer111
I like your poem on cocooning at this him Ed in everyone's lives during the Covid-19 virus that has changed our passing of time so differently to what we know and I think you got this message in your poem well done
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I like your poem on cocooning at this him Ed in everyone's lives during the Covid-19 virus that has changed our passing of time so differently to what we know and I think you got this message in your poem well done
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A well written set of poems, Steve.
-Good syllable count, rhyme,
topic and imagery.
-Good nature imagery with
"mountain stream" and
thoughts of love.
-Effective alliteration in the
third verse, and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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-A well written set of poems, Steve.
-Good syllable count, rhyme,
topic and imagery.
-Good nature imagery with
"mountain stream" and
thoughts of love.
-Effective alliteration in the
third verse, and a good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Pam, thanks for the great review.
Steve
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You are welcome, Steve.
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, Steve, you shine at these ethereal love poems--at least I assume this is a love poem. At this time, sanctuary is a much sought after place.
I particularly like the second stanza--havened is a neat verb.
Very well done, Steve. Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Ah, Steve, you shine at these ethereal love poems--at least I assume this is a love poem. At this time, sanctuary is a much sought after place.
I particularly like the second stanza--havened is a neat verb.
Very well done, Steve. Best of luck with the Committee.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thanks, Lee.
Hopefully both a love poem and a nod to the care and warmth we all need these days.
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A close and loving relationship described with great finesse here as we are in a warm cocoon within the arms of those we love and know our words before we speak, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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A close and loving relationship described with great finesse here as we are in a warm cocoon within the arms of those we love and know our words before we speak, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thanks, Dolly -
stay safe.
Steve
Comment from kahpot
Wow! these stanzas of love just blew me away, and in the 3-6-9 format what a great poem, " dark world drifts far away" beautifully put, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Wow! these stanzas of love just blew me away, and in the 3-6-9 format what a great poem, " dark world drifts far away" beautifully put, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Kahpot, many thanks for the enthusiastic review.
Yes, it's a little hard to craft 3-6-9 stanzas into something meaningful and worthwhile - I'm glad you think that I succeeded.
Steve
