This Act Stinks!
Loop Poem9 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I don't think you have to end it with the word you started with but I always try to because I think it is the challenge of the piece. This one is smartly done and very cute
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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I don't think you have to end it with the word you started with but I always try to because I think it is the challenge of the piece. This one is smartly done and very cute
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you. Stay safe!
Steve
Comment from strandregs
Brilliant . Pure Steve brilliance
The picture of loopy scooty scooted me through the poem.
What is the poem about?
A conference where bill Gates pushes for barcoding every citizen .
Vaccinated or eliminated.
Any excuse to monitize and excorsise .
1984 is not a fantasy any more.
Enjoyed the hopping.:-))Z.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Brilliant . Pure Steve brilliance
The picture of loopy scooty scooted me through the poem.
What is the poem about?
A conference where bill Gates pushes for barcoding every citizen .
Vaccinated or eliminated.
Any excuse to monitize and excorsise .
1984 is not a fantasy any more.
Enjoyed the hopping.:-))Z.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you.
Bill Gates? A lot of nonsense spouted about him on social media. I wouldn't believe 99% of it.
Stay safe.
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some inventive rhymes here and the whole loop poem flows and works a treat and the sentiments are funny and I enjoyed the read, much fun Steve, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Some inventive rhymes here and the whole loop poem flows and works a treat and the sentiments are funny and I enjoyed the read, much fun Steve, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Dolly - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A full circle loop from beginning to end Steve and a fun little tale about Skeeter the skunk. Your loop words all worked well in this amusing read. Loved the artwork,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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A full circle loop from beginning to end Steve and a fun little tale about Skeeter the skunk. Your loop words all worked well in this amusing read. Loved the artwork,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Valda. Glad you enjoyed this silly rhyme.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
Ha! You actually made a Loop-de-Loop. Very impressive. And you told a loopy story to boot. Somebody had his Froot Loops yesterday morning!
Ol' Loopy, aka Skeeter, reeked of success . . . until he didn't. Perhaps he shouldn't have tampered with his act. Audiences are notorious for turning on a skunk who turns on them.
Steve, my hat is off to you. May your stinker come up smelling like roses!
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Ha! You actually made a Loop-de-Loop. Very impressive. And you told a loopy story to boot. Somebody had his Froot Loops yesterday morning!
Ol' Loopy, aka Skeeter, reeked of success . . . until he didn't. Perhaps he shouldn't have tampered with his act. Audiences are notorious for turning on a skunk who turns on them.
Steve, my hat is off to you. May your stinker come up smelling like roses!
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Lee. Never seen a live skunk and yet I think this is the third poem I've written about them. Can't beat that mix of cute and stinky!
Steve
Comment from susand3022
Hi Kiwisteve... I love this loop! It's so full of fun with the silly, snouty, little, skunk that lifts his tail and is deserted because of his end, in the end! :) You even remembered to loop it all the way around from the end to the beginning again! :) Well done :)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Hi Kiwisteve... I love this loop! It's so full of fun with the silly, snouty, little, skunk that lifts his tail and is deserted because of his end, in the end! :) You even remembered to loop it all the way around from the end to the beginning again! :) Well done :)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Susan. Glad you enjoyed the fun ride.
Steve
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Love it and so sorry I am out of 6:( this piece deserves 10 stars. Thank you for making me laugh, you have a winner here. I love the dynamics and how you build action with each line. I love this stanza :"uter than Skeeter the skunk.
Skunk was a Loopy invention,
Invention to spice up his act;
Act for the Clowny Convention.
Convention where Loopy got whacked"
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Love it and so sorry I am out of 6:( this piece deserves 10 stars. Thank you for making me laugh, you have a winner here. I love the dynamics and how you build action with each line. I love this stanza :"uter than Skeeter the skunk.
Skunk was a Loopy invention,
Invention to spice up his act;
Act for the Clowny Convention.
Convention where Loopy got whacked"
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Iza. I appreciate the kind words and the virtual six (or 10!)
Steve
Comment from Kelly Mcfadden
I really liked the subject of the poem. Quite a good choice. In fact quite cute. Very good poem for children especially for the younger ones. Who doesn't love a circus clown working with a skunk? Oh and creative title. However it did kinda get depressing at the end. Maybe make the end a bit more jollier but otherwise great job.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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I really liked the subject of the poem. Quite a good choice. In fact quite cute. Very good poem for children especially for the younger ones. Who doesn't love a circus clown working with a skunk? Oh and creative title. However it did kinda get depressing at the end. Maybe make the end a bit more jollier but otherwise great job.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Kelly. Glad you enjoyed the fun - ecept for the ending. I guess you would have been even more upset by my first thought, which was to have Loopy hanging from a rafter! 😎😎😎
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job with your looping from the beginning and all the way to the end and back plus you followed the abcb rhyme scheme, too while telling an amusing story. Best wishes in the contest, Steve!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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You did a great job with your looping from the beginning and all the way to the end and back plus you followed the abcb rhyme scheme, too while telling an amusing story. Best wishes in the contest, Steve!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thanks, Helen. Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
