Now They Know
The truth hurts.15 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Great job LisaMay. I could see the characters happening on the stage. Reminds me of an acting part I played in high school. :) This is a great entry for the Write a Script contest.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Great job LisaMay. I could see the characters happening on the stage. Reminds me of an acting part I played in high school. :) This is a great entry for the Write a Script contest.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for your supportive review. I have only written a couple of brief scripts, so your encouraging words are much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This script, Now They Know, is a brief but thoughtful play on the feelings of two lovers separated by one of the many bumps couples go through. The stage directions and notes work well here.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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This script, Now They Know, is a brief but thoughtful play on the feelings of two lovers separated by one of the many bumps couples go through. The stage directions and notes work well here.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thanks for reviewing this script. i am a newbie at this type of writing. It took ages to write (even though it's so short) - it feels really different to writing a normal story.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is such a moving script, Lisa May. I admire the way you brought everything together, through music, dance, poetry, set design, lighting, sound and costumes, all of which combine to tell a piece of the story of young lovers who realize, too late, the part they played in destroying their relationship. This is remarkable work, as there is nothing in this script, from dialogue to description, that doesn't play a necessary role and enhance the story.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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This is such a moving script, Lisa May. I admire the way you brought everything together, through music, dance, poetry, set design, lighting, sound and costumes, all of which combine to tell a piece of the story of young lovers who realize, too late, the part they played in destroying their relationship. This is remarkable work, as there is nothing in this script, from dialogue to description, that doesn't play a necessary role and enhance the story.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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I am really pleased you like this script so much, Michele. Scriptwriting is not my natural territory - i was trying it out to see if i liked it, but it doesn't really appeal to me. because of having to stop and write all those instructions... and thinking in 3D with movement.
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I'm the same way about writing scripts but, for a novice, you handled this like a pro.
Comment from JudyE
I can imagine this being very effective on stage, and very dramatic. The black background and moving the characters on and off stage unseen would work very well.
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I can imagine this being very effective on stage, and very dramatic. The black background and moving the characters on and off stage unseen would work very well.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written script. Set up of the background for the lover's dance. The music and songs are about breaking hearts knowingly and unknowingly. It takes always a long time to heal again.
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A very well-written script. Set up of the background for the lover's dance. The music and songs are about breaking hearts knowingly and unknowingly. It takes always a long time to heal again.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2020
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Wow!! Wow! I swear I was just in this theatre watching this play and it was a very emotional and dramatic performance in all its simple ness! Brilliant!
Thank you! This was so beautifully done! xoxo
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Wow!! Wow! I swear I was just in this theatre watching this play and it was a very emotional and dramatic performance in all its simple ness! Brilliant!
Thank you! This was so beautifully done! xoxo
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
Comment from amada
Bravo, very well done. I like this story, or rather this script. i am not familiar with scripts myself. i know it takes a lot of work, but this one was about music and dancing, two things that I love.
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Bravo, very well done. I like this story, or rather this script. i am not familiar with scripts myself. i know it takes a lot of work, but this one was about music and dancing, two things that I love.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
Comment from juliaSjames
I'm flying in the dark here since I know very little of scriptwriting.
Certainly your entry seems well done. It's like a skit, dramatic, over the top, visually effective. I like the addition of music. Although, if this is meant for a young audience, the selection is somewhat dated.
I suppose you need to indicate how the young dancers are dressed. And perhaps if they are dancing separately or together.
Best wishes for the contest.
Blessings Julia
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I'm flying in the dark here since I know very little of scriptwriting.
Certainly your entry seems well done. It's like a skit, dramatic, over the top, visually effective. I like the addition of music. Although, if this is meant for a young audience, the selection is somewhat dated.
I suppose you need to indicate how the young dancers are dressed. And perhaps if they are dancing separately or together.
Best wishes for the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very well done script. All pertinent information included for the performance and executed as intended. Now they know where they stand. How Do You Mend A Broken Heart is perfect for this scene.
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A very well done script. All pertinent information included for the performance and executed as intended. Now they know where they stand. How Do You Mend A Broken Heart is perfect for this scene.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This impressed me, and I was thinking: wow, maybe 7th grade on up. It is clean enough to use in middle school, although of course it would probably mean more to high schoolers. It could be updated with the music choices, although I recognized both songs. There is a lyrical sadness in the lines. Favorite ones for the male: I did not know I knew how to lie.
I did not know I would say goodbye.
For the girl I like: I did not know I could shout at God.
I did not know I was a lightning rod.
First love often has that emphasis on what "I" want, so that seems true to life. And first love seems to often break up with hurt feelings. A script like this would have made high school assemblies more interesting. Not sure what to fix, since I lean toward comedies instead of drama.
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This impressed me, and I was thinking: wow, maybe 7th grade on up. It is clean enough to use in middle school, although of course it would probably mean more to high schoolers. It could be updated with the music choices, although I recognized both songs. There is a lyrical sadness in the lines. Favorite ones for the male: I did not know I knew how to lie.
I did not know I would say goodbye.
For the girl I like: I did not know I could shout at God.
I did not know I was a lightning rod.
First love often has that emphasis on what "I" want, so that seems true to life. And first love seems to often break up with hurt feelings. A script like this would have made high school assemblies more interesting. Not sure what to fix, since I lean toward comedies instead of drama.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2020
