Dawn's Favorite Poems, Vol. 4
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "He Is Constant"eclectic poetry favorites from 2017 & 2018
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
I turned 68 on January 28. Your skillfully written, moving, deeply spiritual poem describes highlights of a life story I'm sure many can relate to. I can.
We can always come "home"; He'll take us back in.
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I turned 68 on January 28. Your skillfully written, moving, deeply spiritual poem describes highlights of a life story I'm sure many can relate to. I can.
We can always come "home"; He'll take us back in.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem has a super message, Dawn. Your rhymes, smooth flow and that message add to its enjoyment. I get a sense of what you are saying from the last line of the first verse. I agree with your conclusions, too. Yes, God loves us even when we sin. But we must repent and keep following Him always. The video is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan.
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Your poem has a super message, Dawn. Your rhymes, smooth flow and that message add to its enjoyment. I get a sense of what you are saying from the last line of the first verse. I agree with your conclusions, too. Yes, God loves us even when we sin. But we must repent and keep following Him always. The video is a great pairing with your well-chosen words. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from Gloria ....
Such a beautiful poem, Dawn. Your Iambic heptametre in perfect order, and your motif of faith against the backdrop of betrayal from those who should've cared stands perfectly against you true friend.
An excellent read this evening and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
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Such a beautiful poem, Dawn. Your Iambic heptametre in perfect order, and your motif of faith against the backdrop of betrayal from those who should've cared stands perfectly against you true friend.
An excellent read this evening and a pleasure to read and review. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Three down-to-earth little stanzas that remind the reader that no matter one's age, the Lord is over all his 'lost sheep,' so to speak. I like this line for its 'b' alliteration: Been bullied and betrayed by people I believed were friends,
Nice job with an almost lyrical tone here.
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Three down-to-earth little stanzas that remind the reader that no matter one's age, the Lord is over all his 'lost sheep,' so to speak. I like this line for its 'b' alliteration: Been bullied and betrayed by people I believed were friends,
Nice job with an almost lyrical tone here.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Thanks.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This excellently done piece has to have a six for many reasons. It flowed like a song with excellently done rhyming and meter. The contest is a message for us all
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This excellently done piece has to have a six for many reasons. It flowed like a song with excellently done rhyming and meter. The contest is a message for us all
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from padumachitta
Hello
Happy Birthday.
May you be well.
Thanks for your well written and thoughtful poem. Certainly a poem of your life shared to us all.
Your faith holds you and your pen.
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Hello
Happy Birthday.
May you be well.
Thanks for your well written and thoughtful poem. Certainly a poem of your life shared to us all.
Your faith holds you and your pen.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from Sasha
I found a this beautifully written, deeply moving, and inspirational poem about living life while following our faith. This is deeply moving and I found nothing that needed correcting or changing.
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I found a this beautifully written, deeply moving, and inspirational poem about living life while following our faith. This is deeply moving and I found nothing that needed correcting or changing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is a beautiful, inspirational poem about facing changes and challenges throughout the years, while holding fast onto the hand of Our Savior! You have been through a lot, and you still are going through a lot.
Just two small possible errors:
each grey-ing hair.
Is the hyphenation intentional?
trouble the air. (Is it "trouble in the air"?)
Thank you for sharing this deeply personal poem about trusting God. I love the title, "He Is Constant." You've included a very fitting image and great video.
My favorite line:
"each time that I know His will, it's heaven's door I find."
I think I know who this is, but I won't say it, in case I'm wrong... in any case, thank you for sharing your heart.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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This is a beautiful, inspirational poem about facing changes and challenges throughout the years, while holding fast onto the hand of Our Savior! You have been through a lot, and you still are going through a lot.
Just two small possible errors:
each grey-ing hair.
Is the hyphenation intentional?
trouble the air. (Is it "trouble in the air"?)
Thank you for sharing this deeply personal poem about trusting God. I love the title, "He Is Constant." You've included a very fitting image and great video.
My favorite line:
"each time that I know His will, it's heaven's door I find."
I think I know who this is, but I won't say it, in case I'm wrong... in any case, thank you for sharing your heart.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2020
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Ooooh, thank you! But this is not a contest entry, so I don't understand "I think I know who this is..."??
As for your corrections-- YAY! I always appreciate an honest review, although I caught the missing"in" typo (just hadn't added it yet), and the hyphen IS intentional (because Spell-check insisted. LOL)
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You're very welcome. I am sorry for any confusion. I was reviewing with "blinders on" so I couldn't see your name, and I didn't know if you were talking about literally being blind or not - and I know another writer (close to your age and mine, 62) who is also blind, so I thought you might be her. I'm sorry!
As for spellcheck, I personally don't trust it -- I would take the word of an online dictionary over spellcheck. It often stops on some ordinary words that are spelled correctly. I see it more as a "spell suggestion" program, lol, but take that in whatever way you wish!
Your poem is beautiful -- I enjoyed it.
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:)) Not to worry -- I wasn't upset. LOL. As for Spellcheck, I don't use it. I was kidding.
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Thanks, Haha, I am relieved on various levels :-)))
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a lovely and realistic poem about coping, believing and living out your faith. Well done on this superbly written poem, Dawn!!
Melissa
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This is a lovely and realistic poem about coping, believing and living out your faith. Well done on this superbly written poem, Dawn!!
Melissa
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, the One true friend that is always with us through the thick and thin, love the artwork as that journey made believers out of so many, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Excellent, the One true friend that is always with us through the thick and thin, love the artwork as that journey made believers out of so many, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2020
