Clouds at Eventide
a sonnet for cloud lovers29 total reviews
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Rod. I like the metaphor of comparing personal yearnings to travel to the wandering of the clouds. It's an interesting comparison. Imitating the movement of the clouds and their ability to go anywhere at any time is an interesting proposition. I enjoyed the poem and the imagination. Good luck in the contest. Robert
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hello Rod. I like the metaphor of comparing personal yearnings to travel to the wandering of the clouds. It's an interesting comparison. Imitating the movement of the clouds and their ability to go anywhere at any time is an interesting proposition. I enjoyed the poem and the imagination. Good luck in the contest. Robert
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Robert. I am so pleased you like my metaphor and enjoyed my sonnet. Many thanks for sharing. Rod
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You're welcome
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Clouds at Eventide", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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"Clouds at Eventide", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I've run out of them. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi Duchess. I am delighted you enjoyed my sonnet about clouds. Many thanks for your very kind praise. Rod
Hi Rod. I certainly enjoyed your sonnet.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess :)
Comment from catch22
Hello Poet, I enjoyed your sonnet about cloud watching and wanderlust. I thought you handled the meter fairly well and the end rhymes were good. I generally avoid contractions of word like e'er and whene'er because it sounds archaic and unnatural, but I do realize it's an acceptable way to express one's self in poetry (just not my preference). I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hello Poet, I enjoyed your sonnet about cloud watching and wanderlust. I thought you handled the meter fairly well and the end rhymes were good. I generally avoid contractions of word like e'er and whene'er because it sounds archaic and unnatural, but I do realize it's an acceptable way to express one's self in poetry (just not my preference). I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I truly appreciate your kind praise of my sonnet about cloud watching and wanderlust. Because I write traditional verse with rhyme and meter, I often use those contractions, though as you say, they seem a bit out of fashion. Rod
Comment from lauralumummu
I love the clouds. I remember lying in a farmer's field just staring up and dreaming, as a child. I never knew about the uniforms. A great entry for the contest. Merry Christmas Laura.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I love the clouds. I remember lying in a farmer's field just staring up and dreaming, as a child. I never knew about the uniforms. A great entry for the contest. Merry Christmas Laura.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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This sonnet was a pleasure to write because I, too, love clouds. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from royowen
I think dark blue is what all country's navies wear anyway. But this is a beautifully composed nephophile contest entry. Rod. Beautifully even with a very sage message to it, the human yearning fo freedom, and in these clouds, are never less victims of the whims of the wind. A beautifully composed sonnet my friend, smooth, articulate and well rhymed in ababcdcdefefgg. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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I think dark blue is what all country's navies wear anyway. But this is a beautifully composed nephophile contest entry. Rod. Beautifully even with a very sage message to it, the human yearning fo freedom, and in these clouds, are never less victims of the whims of the wind. A beautifully composed sonnet my friend, smooth, articulate and well rhymed in ababcdcdefefgg. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2019
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Hi,Roy. I am so pleased you enjoyed my sonnet. Many thanks for your high praise. Rod
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Most welcome
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, interesting, and creative. I enjoyed
the read of this poem. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork
is great and enriches the theme and words of this poem.
Merry Christmas!.......Maria
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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The author's words are engaging, interesting, and creative. I enjoyed
the read of this poem. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork
is great and enriches the theme and words of this poem.
Merry Christmas!.......Maria
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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I am so pleased you enjoyed the words and flow of my sonnet, Maria. Many thanks for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
presentation, Jeffrey.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written sonnet with
vivid imagery that paints a
very good word picture:
"parade across the skies like sailors proud.
White-capped and dressed in Blues they smartly glide"
-I like the volta and how
you begin it, and show how
different the clouds are than you.
-An excellent couplet, too.
-This is an excellent entry;
good luck in the contest.
-Have a Merry Christmas
and a Happy New Year!
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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-Very nice image and
presentation, Jeffrey.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-A well written sonnet with
vivid imagery that paints a
very good word picture:
"parade across the skies like sailors proud.
White-capped and dressed in Blues they smartly glide"
-I like the volta and how
you begin it, and show how
different the clouds are than you.
-An excellent couplet, too.
-This is an excellent entry;
good luck in the contest.
-Have a Merry Christmas
and a Happy New Year!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much, Pam, for your stellar review of my sonnet. I am so pleased you like my sailor imagery and closing couplet. Rod
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You are very welcome, Rod.
Comment from Gloria ....
And what a vibrant metaphor is this, the clouds as sailors. The colours a perfect match as is the setting and emotional longing drawn from not only observation, but also memories.
Pristine metre and rhyme and a sonnet worthy of a cloud.
Great luck to you in the voting booth, Rod. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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And what a vibrant metaphor is this, the clouds as sailors. The colours a perfect match as is the setting and emotional longing drawn from not only observation, but also memories.
Pristine metre and rhyme and a sonnet worthy of a cloud.
Great luck to you in the voting booth, Rod. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2019
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Hi Gloria. I am delighted you enjoyed my sonnet and the sailor metaphor. Thank you so much for your high praise. Rod
Comment from robyn corum
Rod,
Well, I think it's a little evil, actually. Creating such a fine poem like this in a contest with the rest of us - so many being common writers who can't conjure such amazing things from our pens. --sigh--
It will not be fun to watch you rack up all the votes. Alas and alack. But I suppose we will get credit for having tried??? hahaha
This was beautiful, my friend! Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Rod,
Well, I think it's a little evil, actually. Creating such a fine poem like this in a contest with the rest of us - so many being common writers who can't conjure such amazing things from our pens. --sigh--
It will not be fun to watch you rack up all the votes. Alas and alack. But I suppose we will get credit for having tried??? hahaha
This was beautiful, my friend! Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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Robyn, I truly appreciate receiving such a flattering review from a fellow competitor. Such an endorsement means so much to me. Thank you. Rod
Comment from Sally Law
A lovely poem in praise of clouds, and fine entry for the contest. They are more beautiful by the sea I think, and change formations quickly. I love to view them from my favorite seaside spot.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :)
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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A lovely poem in praise of clouds, and fine entry for the contest. They are more beautiful by the sea I think, and change formations quickly. I love to view them from my favorite seaside spot.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :)
Comment Written 23-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2019
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my sonnet, Sally. I like viewing clouds anywhere. Rod
