The Piper
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "The Piper, part 25"Young Adult Fantasy
18 total reviews
Comment from May 1
Lynx is as fun as I suspected. :) I love the scene of dancing pixies, that sure would have been a sight for sore eyes. It's so nice to see them all bonding.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Lynx is as fun as I suspected. :) I love the scene of dancing pixies, that sure would have been a sight for sore eyes. It's so nice to see them all bonding.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020
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Hi May 1,
Yes, Lynx is fun. He doesn't do things halfway. He's the type to jump in water without checking for rocks. Oh, but he does have fun. Thanks again for reading and the great comments.
Debi
Comment from Spitfire
I've been too busy to keep track of this, but you're doing a great job of immersing the reader into a world of pixies. Who knows? There may be such a place on another planet.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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I've been too busy to keep track of this, but you're doing a great job of immersing the reader into a world of pixies. Who knows? There may be such a place on another planet.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hi Shari,
Thank you for your comments. From your posts I can see you are very busy. I am crossing my fingers for you and hoping for the best.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter, Debi, that gives good
characterization of Lynx. He is certainly lively.
-I think he could talk nonstop.
-I like how you mention Rupert.
-It has been a long time, and I hope he is
alright, and that Piper will be able to
have time to figure some things out.
-I feel badly for Piper because
he is in limbo-who does he trust?
-He is thrown into two worlds, one
of which he really didn't know, and
now is supposed to believe he is one of them.
-You do a good job of keeping us in
suspense about all of this.
-The music and the pixies add a bit
of levity to the whole thing.
-The ending is interesting as far
as Redd-Leif is concerned.
-My guess is that since they are close to the
world of the Fae that Piper will somehow
figure out what is true and what isn't.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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-A good chapter, Debi, that gives good
characterization of Lynx. He is certainly lively.
-I think he could talk nonstop.
-I like how you mention Rupert.
-It has been a long time, and I hope he is
alright, and that Piper will be able to
have time to figure some things out.
-I feel badly for Piper because
he is in limbo-who does he trust?
-He is thrown into two worlds, one
of which he really didn't know, and
now is supposed to believe he is one of them.
-You do a good job of keeping us in
suspense about all of this.
-The music and the pixies add a bit
of levity to the whole thing.
-The ending is interesting as far
as Redd-Leif is concerned.
-My guess is that since they are close to the
world of the Fae that Piper will somehow
figure out what is true and what isn't.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hi Pam,
You got exactly what I was going for with Lynx--the talking nonstop. Sorry for the late response. I really do appreciate you taking the time to read and give such insightful comments to help me out.
Debi
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You are very welcome, Debi. It's nice to hear that I got what you were looking for! No problem with a late reply. I am always glad you appreciate the comments. I enjoy the story.
Comment from Melonie Kirchoff
What a great fantasy chapter! I honestly love all of the names you picked. I love stories of people who grew up thinking that they were normal only to find out later that they are something completely different and have a destiny ahead. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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What a great fantasy chapter! I honestly love all of the names you picked. I love stories of people who grew up thinking that they were normal only to find out later that they are something completely different and have a destiny ahead. Keep it up!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate the support.
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is a very well written chapter that bridges the gap between the human world and the world of the elves and pixies. I like how each one has his unique personality. Thanks for sharing this fanciful story with your creativity.
You have an incredible imagination. Thatâ??s a great line about whatâ??s the best way to approach a group of pixies.
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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This is a very well written chapter that bridges the gap between the human world and the world of the elves and pixies. I like how each one has his unique personality. Thanks for sharing this fanciful story with your creativity.
You have an incredible imagination. Thatâ??s a great line about whatâ??s the best way to approach a group of pixies.
Bill
Comment Written 07-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2019
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Hi Bill,
Thank you for the encouraging comments. I am so happy you enjoyed this chapter.
Debi
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
You've created a delightful world. Piper's reactions at finding a family he never knew existed, and one so different to what he's used to, are quite believable. I'm hoping there's no "trick" as he gets more comfortable in their world. great storytelling... ...ec
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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You've created a delightful world. Piper's reactions at finding a family he never knew existed, and one so different to what he's used to, are quite believable. I'm hoping there's no "trick" as he gets more comfortable in their world. great storytelling... ...ec
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Thank you Elaine for the encouraging comments. I especially appreciate that you found Piper's reactions believable. It helps to know what works.
Debi
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You're quite welcome... ...ec
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debi, you really write this so very well. you know how to set the scene and the imagery is splendid. I also like the dialogue. I'm looking forward to what is coming next. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Hi Debi, you really write this so very well. you know how to set the scene and the imagery is splendid. I also like the dialogue. I'm looking forward to what is coming next. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2019
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Hi Ulla,
Thank you for the encouraging comments. I'm sorry for the late response. Life lately ? LOL
Comment from tim dodd
This is good writing. The pixies and the elves
when I was younger I would read anything about elves
they fascinated me. This does too a little. Like that Piper is getting
some family back I think with his grandfather gone. You might want to use that as to why he went with redd-leif in the first place.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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This is good writing. The pixies and the elves
when I was younger I would read anything about elves
they fascinated me. This does too a little. Like that Piper is getting
some family back I think with his grandfather gone. You might want to use that as to why he went with redd-leif in the first place.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate the comments and encouragement.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your writing is excellent. Well described with good scene setting and nuance of the characters. Piper asks the logical question, "If Redd-Leif really is my father then why didn't he tell me sooner?" Last paragraph concerning Redd-Leif's thoughts is very nice. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Your writing is excellent. Well described with good scene setting and nuance of the characters. Piper asks the logical question, "If Redd-Leif really is my father then why didn't he tell me sooner?" Last paragraph concerning Redd-Leif's thoughts is very nice. Marilyn
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Hi Marilyn,
I appreciate you pointing out the things you feel worked well. It is always good to hear. Know what works is as important as knowing what doesn't.
Debi
Comment from poeandhungry
Wow. This was really well done. I don't read fantasy at all, but I can clearly see the attraction to this genre in your writing. I especially liked the line..."Play something spirited, something they can really flit and zip around to." I felt these words went together beautifully and painted a great picture in my mind. I also liked that you prefaced the piece with the backstory and what had happened previously. That really helps the reader and provides a smooth and understanding transition. Thank you for sharing this and keep the prose coming. Good job!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Wow. This was really well done. I don't read fantasy at all, but I can clearly see the attraction to this genre in your writing. I especially liked the line..."Play something spirited, something they can really flit and zip around to." I felt these words went together beautifully and painted a great picture in my mind. I also liked that you prefaced the piece with the backstory and what had happened previously. That really helps the reader and provides a smooth and understanding transition. Thank you for sharing this and keep the prose coming. Good job!
Comment Written 05-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2019
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Thank you for the encouraging review. It is appreciated, especially from someone who isn't so interested in fantasy. Thank you for pointing out what worked.
