Briarly Hall
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Squire Alfred's sojourn in Milan"Historical fiction
3 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Zanya, it's a lovely continuation to your story and I'm pretty intrigued with it. I will admit that it is a long chapter, and we all have to earn phony dollars to promote. I know you probably won't like me for saying this. But that is how it is. Also you would get so many more reviews and helpful input. Sorry to be a let down. I love your story. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
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Hi Zanya, it's a lovely continuation to your story and I'm pretty intrigued with it. I will admit that it is a long chapter, and we all have to earn phony dollars to promote. I know you probably won't like me for saying this. But that is how it is. Also you would get so many more reviews and helpful input. Sorry to be a let down. I love your story. Warm regards. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jun-2019
Comment from Sophia Delgado
I love how you've developed these characters and their backgrounds. I want to know more! The story has a good flow.
There's just an extra quotation mark in this sentence:
"A drop..just a drop," Alfredo, I do my doctor's morning duty."
Other than that, no technical errors stick out. Thanks for sharing!
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I love how you've developed these characters and their backgrounds. I want to know more! The story has a good flow.
There's just an extra quotation mark in this sentence:
"A drop..just a drop," Alfredo, I do my doctor's morning duty."
Other than that, no technical errors stick out. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
Comment from Sam Frearson-Tubito
Hi there, I really enjoyed this chapter. It stood alone which is exactly how a chapter should read. Even though I haven't read any of your other chapters I managed to get a good sense of your characters and their feelings. Nicely done. You are definitely finding your writing voice!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Hi there, I really enjoyed this chapter. It stood alone which is exactly how a chapter should read. Even though I haven't read any of your other chapters I managed to get a good sense of your characters and their feelings. Nicely done. You are definitely finding your writing voice!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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A-w-w thanks for those encouraging words ! zanya
