Briarly Hall
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Sir Alfred's pain"Historical fiction
2 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I wondered about the name of Briarly Hall in Italy, sounds more like a British name. I think there should be a little more conflict in trying to find his son. Like they've looked so many places and they are at a loss now. It would add suspense. This seems a bit calm for a desperate search.
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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I wondered about the name of Briarly Hall in Italy, sounds more like a British name. I think there should be a little more conflict in trying to find his son. Like they've looked so many places and they are at a loss now. It would add suspense. This seems a bit calm for a desperate search.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 26-May-2019
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Thanks for reading and the commentary - much appreciated zanya
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a well written piece. The dialogue flows well. I like how it is appropriate for the time. You take your time with the story and that is very rewarding to the reader. A very enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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This is a well written piece. The dialogue flows well. I like how it is appropriate for the time. You take your time with the story and that is very rewarding to the reader. A very enjoyable read.
Comment Written 14-May-2019
reply by the author on 16-May-2019
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What an interesting and encouraging comment 'take your time with the story'-so much writing today- in my opinion! - is so rushed -no time for the characters to ruminate !!!
