Snow Globe
5-7-5 horror contest34 total reviews
Comment from Rmocruz
You have presented a cleverly dark scenario in five-seven-five format.
A very appropriate artwork selection delivers your intended message
perfectly.
A worthy and enjoyable contest entry.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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You have presented a cleverly dark scenario in five-seven-five format.
A very appropriate artwork selection delivers your intended message
perfectly.
A worthy and enjoyable contest entry.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thanks, I appreciate the kind words!
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You're welcome, my pleasure.
Comment from mancub
your poem is sad and spiritual, you have a strong word choice and it tells the story well, I hope they find the little, missing and passing children is always a heart breaking thing, The art you chose is beautiful and compliments your words and story you share well, it is a hallenge in itself to give meaning or substance in very few words, but you have done well, Thank you for sharing,Mancub
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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your poem is sad and spiritual, you have a strong word choice and it tells the story well, I hope they find the little, missing and passing children is always a heart breaking thing, The art you chose is beautiful and compliments your words and story you share well, it is a hallenge in itself to give meaning or substance in very few words, but you have done well, Thank you for sharing,Mancub
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Mancub, appreciate it!
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your welcome
Comment from Mark D. R.
Macabre but delicious verse accompanied by your famous snow globe animation. I recall also asking the Eight Ball questions (-;
your last line is great conclusion for your 575 horror entry
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Macabre but delicious verse accompanied by your famous snow globe animation. I recall also asking the Eight Ball questions (-;
your last line is great conclusion for your 575 horror entry
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Mark!
Comment from James W. Reynolds
What an effectively chilling and evocative image - which I mean to convey as a compliment. As if the "tiny red footprints" isn't disconcerting enough, the concept of being forsaken then follows. Nice work.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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What an effectively chilling and evocative image - which I mean to convey as a compliment. As if the "tiny red footprints" isn't disconcerting enough, the concept of being forsaken then follows. Nice work.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you, James!
Comment from LG Wolfe
Hello contest author,
This is so creepy and good. You've got a full story in those few words. The black and white image is the perfect background for those startlingly vivid first three words.
Love it!
LG
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Hello contest author,
This is so creepy and good. You've got a full story in those few words. The black and white image is the perfect background for those startlingly vivid first three words.
Love it!
LG
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks, LG!
Comment from estory
This was spooky. I liked the image of the child's footprints in the snowglobe that she lost...and then they are covered up by the snow when you shake it, and she is lost forever. A mysterious, spooky image. And one that speaks of the emotions in many of these lost children stories that you hear today. estory
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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This was spooky. I liked the image of the child's footprints in the snowglobe that she lost...and then they are covered up by the snow when you shake it, and she is lost forever. A mysterious, spooky image. And one that speaks of the emotions in many of these lost children stories that you hear today. estory
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks, estory!
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
This is really frightening and weird. I usually think of a snow globe so much differently, sweet and gentle. "Tiny red footprints in missing girl's snow globe" is chilling. And then the "shaken, forsaken" --back to the idea of a snow globe in a totally new way. How did you ever come up with this?
It reminds me of a "Twilight Zone" episode I saw as a child about a dollhouse.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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This is really frightening and weird. I usually think of a snow globe so much differently, sweet and gentle. "Tiny red footprints in missing girl's snow globe" is chilling. And then the "shaken, forsaken" --back to the idea of a snow globe in a totally new way. How did you ever come up with this?
It reminds me of a "Twilight Zone" episode I saw as a child about a dollhouse.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the kind review and generous rating, Joanna! I wonder if the Twilight Zone you are referring to is the one with Robert Duvall, where he gets absorbed into a bizarre dollhouse world as a preferred alternative to his own. Thanks again!
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That sounds like the episode I remember.
Comment from Tina Crute
This is extremely sad! I hope that little girl is okay. I love your word choice of forsaken. It's not a word I've heard much except in church, and it's very strong and effective. The little red foot prints... You paint a sad picture in my head. That just goes to show this is good writing!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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This is extremely sad! I hope that little girl is okay. I love your word choice of forsaken. It's not a word I've heard much except in church, and it's very strong and effective. The little red foot prints... You paint a sad picture in my head. That just goes to show this is good writing!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review, Tina. Sad but fictional!
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Thank goodness its
not true:) You are most
welcome!
Comment from Janet Foor
Wow! this is a horror 5/7/5 poem for the contest. You have tugged at the heartstrings with this one.
Very well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Wow! this is a horror 5/7/5 poem for the contest. You have tugged at the heartstrings with this one.
Very well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thanks for the kind review, Janet! Please vote if you haven't already- not necessarily for me, of course- as I find that the turnout is generally sparse in many contests.
Comment from LIJ Red
So the kid was abducted by the genie and taken into the snowglobe and died of frostbite...yep, that is indeed horrible. Excellent five seven five for the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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So the kid was abducted by the genie and taken into the snowglobe and died of frostbite...yep, that is indeed horrible. Excellent five seven five for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Nice take on it, Red. Thanks for the read and review!
