The Disease
Difficult to understand unless you've been through it6 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Being a teenager can be rough for the whole family. Mood swings galore. And the things that can stem from the experimentation. This poem offers a hopeful outlook. Let us pray all teenagers have the same love and support to get through the times. Excellent work :)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Being a teenager can be rough for the whole family. Mood swings galore. And the things that can stem from the experimentation. This poem offers a hopeful outlook. Let us pray all teenagers have the same love and support to get through the times. Excellent work :)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading:)
My daughter was long past teenage years when she was able to find inner peace and fight for her sobriety -- I had to learn to be supportive--well worth the struggle:)
Comment from AudreyRose
You speak truly about this, addiction is one of the ugliest monsters out there. Its claws go deep and hook into you. You did s good job showing the effect it has on families, and the amount of work it takes to overcome. Wonderful job painting a picture of this disease and showing a cure for it as well.
The only reason I gave it a 4 is because it is just a bit unclear if the poem is about a mother or her daughter, or both even. There are 2 "shes" going through a hard time? Just a tad confusing for me, im sorry.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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You speak truly about this, addiction is one of the ugliest monsters out there. Its claws go deep and hook into you. You did s good job showing the effect it has on families, and the amount of work it takes to overcome. Wonderful job painting a picture of this disease and showing a cure for it as well.
The only reason I gave it a 4 is because it is just a bit unclear if the poem is about a mother or her daughter, or both even. There are 2 "shes" going through a hard time? Just a tad confusing for me, im sorry.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. No problem, the poem is intended to tell of a mother and her daughter and their separate challenges due to the daughter's addiction.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
An excellent poem about the 'disease' of addition whether it be alcohol, drugs or both, and the silver lining being the 'overcoming' and the 'spiritual awakening' of the 'daughter' which gave back life both to her and to her family.
An excellent contest entry! God bless you for sharing :) I understand this poem, and there will be many others that will too.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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An excellent poem about the 'disease' of addition whether it be alcohol, drugs or both, and the silver lining being the 'overcoming' and the 'spiritual awakening' of the 'daughter' which gave back life both to her and to her family.
An excellent contest entry! God bless you for sharing :) I understand this poem, and there will be many others that will too.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading, reviewing, and understanding :)
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
This is a very well-written and timely write on a very important topic. Addiction seems to be epidemic these days, and this monster cuts across all swaths of society. Many do have great success with the faith-based 12-Step program, but it isn't effective for everyone. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Hi Contest Author,
This is a very well-written and timely write on a very important topic. Addiction seems to be epidemic these days, and this monster cuts across all swaths of society. Many do have great success with the faith-based 12-Step program, but it isn't effective for everyone. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for reading. Addiction is cunning and determined.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
I especially like the last part about the choice between despair and hope. I believe this choice is available in many situations, not just when recovering from addiction. To enhance the presentation of your piece, I would recommend manipulating the background and font color, and maybe making the font a little larger. Thank you for sharing this poem.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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I especially like the last part about the choice between despair and hope. I believe this choice is available in many situations, not just when recovering from addiction. To enhance the presentation of your piece, I would recommend manipulating the background and font color, and maybe making the font a little larger. Thank you for sharing this poem.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review and suggestions--they may be beyond my capabilities
I just tried to change the color (have never strayed from the basics offered)
and am not sure what I've accomplished--don't even see where font size is offered--
I appreciate your effort:)
Comment from JudyE
Addiction of any sort pulls a family apart and you've portrayed this well in your heartfelt poem.
I'm not a poet but I think there might be a word missing in the lines:
formerly thought be ideal - thought to be ideal
and the hope for better tomorrow - for a better tomorrow
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Addiction of any sort pulls a family apart and you've portrayed this well in your heartfelt poem.
I'm not a poet but I think there might be a word missing in the lines:
formerly thought be ideal - thought to be ideal
and the hope for better tomorrow - for a better tomorrow
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2019
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Thank you for the review and for the catches-- wrote it quickly, and read what I intended, not what I wrote:)
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It's easy to do when you're in a hurry.
