Comment from Brigitte Elko

Excellent

Ambition is wonderful if it can reach a goal. The picture demonstrates ambition and it is great. After much thought and your explanation, this is rather good. You thought out of the box, commendable.

Respectfully,
Brigitte

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 Comment Written 13-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019

Thanks for stopping by, even if you didn't quite grasp my point.

I guess I was being a little snarky about the six-word form. I am not a fan and I believe it's impossible to judge whether such a poem is good or not. I once entered a 2-4-2 contest with one 8-syllable word stretched across the three lines!

To be really true to my thought, I should have added a seventh word to my poem and allowed myself to be disqualified...

The pic is a different story. I thought one idea contained in the poem is ambition - I can do better than six, I'll do seven. I searched images under ambition and found this one. In a perfect world there would have been six (or seven) bowls.

Steve

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I am not sure I fully understand the six word poetic form. Nor am I sure if this post is a morally uplifting sermon, or a touch of tongue in cheek. I am not sure that my conclusions matter in this particular plane of existence. Excellent post.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thank you.

Yes, my tongue seldom leaves my cheek and I have a track record of mocking some of the ridiculously short forms we are faced with. I think my best effort was in a 2-4-2 contest where my submission was one 8-syllable word stretched across the three lines.

No, that didn't win, either. Some entities don't like being mocked.

Steve

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Very funny. Love how you used the title as your seventh word. Clever.

Do the three bowls represent the podium?

I didn't enter this one. My best shot was:
Changing the channel. Couch potato Pilates.
Okay, I'm no poet.

Best of luck, Steve.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Should have entered your couch potato pilates - it has as much chance of winning as anything else.

If I could have found a pic with six or better seven bowls, I would have used that, but this one's kinda cute, don't you think.

Thanks for reviewing - a task that is somehow more arduous than the creating.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Following that leap why not 8 ...or 9 wait 7 8 9 eeeek probably his Maori tendencies ....I'd stay at six ...just saying.congratulations on your book. Wahooo way to go
You must be in 7th Heaven.....wait
God bless

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thanks, jenny.

As you can see, my tongue was in my cheek for this, as it was when I updated my profile. I think my book sold about 35 copies. I'm aiming to beat that with my next one. All those book signings would have been pretty boring anyway!

Steve

reply by kiwijenny on 13-Feb-2019

My husband has just finished his book. He?s taking 20 orders for the hard back version. He spent ten years researching it. He doesn?t care about sales he didn?t write it for that just that this man?s story needed to get out

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Well said, Steve :) With a positive attitude like that you'll do well, especially in this contest. It takes a lot of energy to keep up that outlook on life. There are days (like this one) where I feel like giving up. I read recently that working through these down times is when we make the most progress. Le sigh... I'll keep working at it.

Best wishes in the contest.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thanks, Joy

Sorry to hear you are feeling down. There is some irony when a person with your name is feeling despondent.

And no, I don't have a silver bullet, so plodding through those days and remembering that they will always give way to happier times is the only way to go.

Steve

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-I like the image and quote, Steve.
-A good title and premise for your poem.
-You have creatively used your six words,
beginning with the word "six!"
-That was a deep thought, but
you came up with a better idea
than six-you can do better, but
luckily for the contest, you
didn't do more!
-Good luck.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thanks, Pam.

I did think of putting in a seventh word, just to see if anyone was actually counting! Then I decided to just let the title do the work.

Steve

reply by Pam (respa) on 13-Feb-2019

You are welcome, Steve. Probably there wouldn't have been a lot of notice; it would have been an interesting experiment, but letting the title do the work was a good idea!

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

I like it - for a second I thought you had written a poem with seven words - it would have been disqualified, but it would have been really funny - I might have to borrow that idea sometime. Nice use of quote and photo also.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019

Thanks, Mark. I did seriously think of doing that - I am certain this won't make it onto the podium, so it really wouldn't have mattered if it had been disqualified and it would have been worth it for the laugh.

Steve

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

Your sense of humor clearly shines through your poem. Your title, "Seven" made me smile. :) With your six short words you've made a powerful little statement. I hope you do well in the contest. Your entry is clever!

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thanks, Cindy.

I was going to do something more serious for this contest, but recognized that it is really only a lottery anyway, so I might as well have some fun.

Steve

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol. Cute one, Steve. Is it ekphrastic? Or did you come up with the six words first and said you could do better but you still accomplished it perfectly with six.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thanks, Helen.

I always write first and search for pics last. In this case I searched for 'Ambition.' and this is what turned up. Cute, huh?

I did think about trying to sneak a seventh word in there somehow...

Steve

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

LOL - great poem! And a really good, humorous contest entry. Best of luck in the voting booths.

I like the image you've selected to complement your verse. It works really well to convey another layer of meaning.

Thanks for sharing your work.

Jan

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 Comment Written 10-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019

Thanks, Jan.

Glad someone appreciates my sense of humour!

Steve