The Mother Owl
a Duodecatain for Potlatch Poetry33 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
A fine poetry offering and not the easiest style, either. It all came together perfectly in your story within a poem. The mother owl doing what her instincts were calling her to do. Something that God had planned for all of us to ensure our happiness. If only we humans would learn to embrace it like the animals do.
All my best,
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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A fine poetry offering and not the easiest style, either. It all came together perfectly in your story within a poem. The mother owl doing what her instincts were calling her to do. Something that God had planned for all of us to ensure our happiness. If only we humans would learn to embrace it like the animals do.
All my best,
Sally :+)
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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I agree. We can learn a lot from animals. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love this Duodecatain about mother owl, building her nest, mothering her young till they are ready to go out on their own. I particularly enjoyed the second verse -
the aerie spun, with love bestowed
lovely read, and great rhyming throughout,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Love this Duodecatain about mother owl, building her nest, mothering her young till they are ready to go out on their own. I particularly enjoyed the second verse -
the aerie spun, with love bestowed
lovely read, and great rhyming throughout,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Pearl. I appreciate that.
Comment from LIJ Red
In these hills anyone with free range chickens hates owls and possums as predators. Now that I have no bantams or games, I feed the possum and listen to the whinnygrinnies and hooters with a smile...excellent duodecatain. The KJV in Isaiah calls Lilith a screech owl...Adam's first wife who became a night monster...I think I read too much...
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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In these hills anyone with free range chickens hates owls and possums as predators. Now that I have no bantams or games, I feed the possum and listen to the whinnygrinnies and hooters with a smile...excellent duodecatain. The KJV in Isaiah calls Lilith a screech owl...Adam's first wife who became a night monster...I think I read too much...
Comment Written 24-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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No, you don't read too much. You'd be surprised at the people who never heard of Lilith. Thank you for a delightful review.
Comment from tbacha58
A beautiful story of a bird owl mother like in the picture that prepares a home for the little ones when they are due to be born, to find their nest and live safely until they can fly. I enjoyed reading it too. Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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A beautiful story of a bird owl mother like in the picture that prepares a home for the little ones when they are due to be born, to find their nest and live safely until they can fly. I enjoyed reading it too. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 24-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2019
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from JennaG
Your duodecatain turned out beautifully! I enjoyed your choice of topic and the lovely way you described the mother owl preparing her nest. Your rhymes are fresh and creative. I especially liked "filled" and "trilled". Wonderful picture to accompany your words. This piece was truly a pleasure to read! :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Your duodecatain turned out beautifully! I enjoyed your choice of topic and the lovely way you described the mother owl preparing her nest. Your rhymes are fresh and creative. I especially liked "filled" and "trilled". Wonderful picture to accompany your words. This piece was truly a pleasure to read! :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Jenna. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about the mother owl and how she worked to secure a place for her babies and their future. You used great words and lovely imagery from the picture you chose. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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This is a very well written poem about the mother owl and how she worked to secure a place for her babies and their future. You used great words and lovely imagery from the picture you chose. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Teri.
Comment from BeasPeas
What a sweet poem this is, Yvonne. So enjoyable. We both agreed we love the birds. I didn't know that owls (and perhaps other birds, too, I don't know) pluck feathers from their breast in their nest-making. I suppose that is where we get the term "feather your nest." Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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What a sweet poem this is, Yvonne. So enjoyable. We both agreed we love the birds. I didn't know that owls (and perhaps other birds, too, I don't know) pluck feathers from their breast in their nest-making. I suppose that is where we get the term "feather your nest." Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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I think you're right. I don't know if owls do it or not. I took 'poetic license.' 8-) Thanks for reviewing.
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Oh -- it sounded like such a sweet thing for mom to do. Yes, poetic license. LOL! Good job.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
The duodecatain is an interesting form Treishel created
and you have done it quite well.
The story is superb, the rhymes interesting, and the meter solid.
Nature and instinct is a fascinating subject.
Great photograph to match your words.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hello Yvonne,
The duodecatain is an interesting form Treishel created
and you have done it quite well.
The story is superb, the rhymes interesting, and the meter solid.
Nature and instinct is a fascinating subject.
Great photograph to match your words.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you for this wonderful review! I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation.
-I like you poem about the
mother owl and her owlets.
-She builds the nest and tends
to them with loving care.
-The imagery and rhyme is effective.
-I like how you show that
nature will continue as one
day the owlets will have
families of their own.
-A very nice conclusion, too.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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-Nice image and presentation.
-I like you poem about the
mother owl and her owlets.
-She builds the nest and tends
to them with loving care.
-The imagery and rhyme is effective.
-I like how you show that
nature will continue as one
day the owlets will have
families of their own.
-A very nice conclusion, too.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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And so the cycle goes. 8-) Thank you for a great review. Much appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Treischel
I am delighted to see you try this format of the Duodecatan , ever more so was the wonderful story about the Owl mother. Well written. Excellent use of the rhyme choices. My joy increased as you showed the generational transition. Loved the picture, that I wish I had taken. Loved the alliteration such as: from feathered, setting sun, so she stopped, with owlets while (nice consonance of the w) she softly, and planned to pay.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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I am delighted to see you try this format of the Duodecatan , ever more so was the wonderful story about the Owl mother. Well written. Excellent use of the rhyme choices. My joy increased as you showed the generational transition. Loved the picture, that I wish I had taken. Loved the alliteration such as: from feathered, setting sun, so she stopped, with owlets while (nice consonance of the w) she softly, and planned to pay.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you for this most wonderful review. Coming from you makes it very special. I love trying new forms, and you've inspired me to do so.
