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Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "Scene at an Amusement Park"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from Ricky1024
I recently learned a lot of the riders yet it feels had passed but she had been sick a long time.
she reviewed one of my pieces when I first start and I realize her tremendous abilities and her ranking here.
I like the way you slur on words for the one character.
I'm sure Thomas Bowling is going tolike his perception in your piece!
LOL!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1924
Is that the Great Adventure in Jackson, New Jersey cuz they have those rides they are also.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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I recently learned a lot of the riders yet it feels had passed but she had been sick a long time.
she reviewed one of my pieces when I first start and I realize her tremendous abilities and her ranking here.
I like the way you slur on words for the one character.
I'm sure Thomas Bowling is going tolike his perception in your piece!
LOL!
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1924
Is that the Great Adventure in Jackson, New Jersey cuz they have those rides they are also.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2020
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Phyllis was from Illinois so I used the Six Flags there.
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Oh, okay.
Ricky
Comment from Spitfire
I'm thinking you are having way too much fun writing these ignoramuses. Phyllis should give you a six for promoting her books.
Favorite misspelling: Illernoi.
Favorite misunderstanding:
Phyllis: The Power, Pons. Mind reading.
Ned: Guess he don't mind it, Phylillis
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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I'm thinking you are having way too much fun writing these ignoramuses. Phyllis should give you a six for promoting her books.
Favorite misspelling: Illernoi.
Favorite misunderstanding:
Phyllis: The Power, Pons. Mind reading.
Ned: Guess he don't mind it, Phylillis
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Shari. If you'd like to be in a Pons and Ned scene I'd be happy to introduce you.
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Maybe if I can get something more on Amazon. Thanks for the offer.
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It?s not about books. That?s just how Phyllis?s worked out. Of course, she asked me to write her in, I didn?t ask her.
Comment from lyenochka
Well great job on promoting Phyllis's novels, Bill. But I'm not so sure about the antics that Thomas Bowling put on. But you guys know how to banter. Fun read. Thanks for the light-hearted stuff.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Well great job on promoting Phyllis's novels, Bill. But I'm not so sure about the antics that Thomas Bowling put on. But you guys know how to banter. Fun read. Thanks for the light-hearted stuff.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Phyllis was delighted, but T-Bowl said payback awaits.
Comment from Rob Caudle
fun little bit her I am sure Phyills will appreciate all the promotion. Tom maybe not lol I have nto attempted scripts but you seem to a good job with them
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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fun little bit her I am sure Phyills will appreciate all the promotion. Tom maybe not lol I have nto attempted scripts but you seem to a good job with them
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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She asked to be in a Pons and Ned script. She says she loved it.
Comment from TheStoryMan
This scene was so funny! Obviously Ned has memory problems. This was well written and very amusing. There were no spelling or grammar errors or any typos.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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This scene was so funny! Obviously Ned has memory problems. This was well written and very amusing. There were no spelling or grammar errors or any typos.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, TSM.
Comment from nomi338
It is becoming quite clear that Ned is pretty hard core stupid. You can fix many things in today's world, but stupid is still one of the most difficult to remedy. Poor Ned, but at least he has Pons who puts up with him and keeps him out of trouble.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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It is becoming quite clear that Ned is pretty hard core stupid. You can fix many things in today's world, but stupid is still one of the most difficult to remedy. Poor Ned, but at least he has Pons who puts up with him and keeps him out of trouble.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I?m thinking excusing Pons for a few scenes and putting some other character in.
Comment from judiverse
This was fun, especially introducing Phyllis and Bowling in the mix. Have you read all of her novels? Funny about Ned illustrating what a camera is. No wonder Phyllis is trying to get away. Pons is his usual suave self and well up on Phyllis's novels. Sounds like Ned and Bowling understand each other! Interesting sketch. judi
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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This was fun, especially introducing Phyllis and Bowling in the mix. Have you read all of her novels? Funny about Ned illustrating what a camera is. No wonder Phyllis is trying to get away. Pons is his usual suave self and well up on Phyllis's novels. Sounds like Ned and Bowling understand each other! Interesting sketch. judi
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Judi. Phyllis asks to be in a scene. T.Bowl didn?t.
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He's just being modest. He really loves it. judi
Comment from Teresa Alford
Once again, this is clever and funny. I do like to start the day with a good laugh. Phyllis has some great works on here. TA ";-)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Once again, this is clever and funny. I do like to start the day with a good laugh. Phyllis has some great works on here. TA ";-)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, TA. Yes, Phyllis is supremely talented.
Comment from Earl Corp
What's the backward batman? Interesting concept meeting real people from here on Fanstory, is this going to become a trend? Phylliss seems to have a lot of patience with Ned.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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What's the backward batman? Interesting concept meeting real people from here on Fanstory, is this going to become a trend? Phylliss seems to have a lot of patience with Ned.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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A chapter in Baker?s Dozen has a Fanstory member, Giraffmang, that I wrote in. Afterward, Phyllis asked to be written into a Pons and Ned scene.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- interesting portrayal here, Sir Bill -- certainly was an interesting read to start my morning off! ;) LOL! :) Phyllis, Thomas meet Ned, Pons - talk about an 'odd brew'! :) ;) LOL! :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Wow -- interesting portrayal here, Sir Bill -- certainly was an interesting read to start my morning off! ;) LOL! :) Phyllis, Thomas meet Ned, Pons - talk about an 'odd brew'! :) ;) LOL! :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Yvette.
