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Comment from Nottoway
An apt poem assessing the sadness of our time. This poem sums up the ridiculous state of affairs of our nation's collective leadership.
I do hope your wife is better and I have truly missed your fantastic submissions. But, I respect the circumstances that kept you away.
Welcome back.
Leroy, aka "Nottoway"
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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An apt poem assessing the sadness of our time. This poem sums up the ridiculous state of affairs of our nation's collective leadership.
I do hope your wife is better and I have truly missed your fantastic submissions. But, I respect the circumstances that kept you away.
Welcome back.
Leroy, aka "Nottoway"
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thank You Leroy. It's good to be back and see you here yet too. My wife is mostly bedridden now, and I am her caretaker. It limits my getting out, and I had to sell my RV. But still I can write.
Comment from LIJ Red
Fear not, I shall not impinge on the Lisalet field. I have tried other forms with very limited rhyme sounds, so that along will send me scrambling. I admire your tenacity
in completing this poem. Fivers.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Fear not, I shall not impinge on the Lisalet field. I have tried other forms with very limited rhyme sounds, so that along will send me scrambling. I admire your tenacity
in completing this poem. Fivers.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you LiJ Red. The do take time and patience to construct. But I enjoy writing complex poems and also doing puzzles. Go figure!
Comment from patcelaw
It does seem that governments are getting more and more divided and want to have things their way or no work gets done. I am sorry your wife was in the hospital. I hope she is doing better now. Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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It does seem that governments are getting more and more divided and want to have things their way or no work gets done. I am sorry your wife was in the hospital. I hope she is doing better now. Patricia
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you Patricia. Unfortrunately she has become bedridden with pain. He spine is being probed with needles now to find the nerves causing the pain so they can block the nerve. But so far the haven't found the right nerve.
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I am so sorry for the pain she is suffering. I have lost 51.8 pounds since May 13 and my back does not hurt as badly as it did. I pray they will find the right nerves to ease her pain. Patricia
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Thank You Patricia. She had lost 148 pounds 4 years ago through stomach surgery and not weighs 136 pounds. Congrats on your weight loss. I bet you feel much better.
Comment from susand3022
Good evening, Treischel, Your poem, Stormy Government Skies, is really very good. I'm always impressed by people who can write poetry with those rotating lines in their stanzas. I haven't been able to do one yet. I feel like the success must all be in the first stanza. Yours is very good and the lines all lend themselves to other parts of the poem and so weave nicely into other places. Good job :)
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Good evening, Treischel, Your poem, Stormy Government Skies, is really very good. I'm always impressed by people who can write poetry with those rotating lines in their stanzas. I haven't been able to do one yet. I feel like the success must all be in the first stanza. Yours is very good and the lines all lend themselves to other parts of the poem and so weave nicely into other places. Good job :)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you Susand. I appreciate your review and comments. You are right about the first stanza. When I do one of these poems, I lay an outline out. Then, once the repeating lines are written, I write them into the other lines of the poem where they go, so that I won't forget. I have a rough Idea how I want the poem to flow., but often put in the margin the idea I want to convey in each stanza. The rest is writing the poem itself, more or less like any other rhyming poem
Comment from Joan E.
Welcome back and just in time for me to wish you a peaceful, new year. Thank you for sharing a wonderful example of a Lisalet, a form with which I was not familiar. I enjoyed your rhymes and repeating lines for emphasis, plus the regular syllable count. You certainly captured the depressing state of affairs in government today. I admired the parallel photograph and hope your wife's health has stabilized. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Welcome back and just in time for me to wish you a peaceful, new year. Thank you for sharing a wonderful example of a Lisalet, a form with which I was not familiar. I enjoyed your rhymes and repeating lines for emphasis, plus the regular syllable count. You certainly captured the depressing state of affairs in government today. I admired the parallel photograph and hope your wife's health has stabilized. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much Joan. Alway love to share a format. Glad you enjoyed it. My wife's health is very bad now. She is basically bedridde. I had to sell my camper because she can't go anymore. Now I am pretty much home bound taking care of her. But, I can still write, so I am content.
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I am so sorry your wife's health has declined. I salute your continuing to write and finding contentment in the outlet. Take good care of yourself- Joan
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and well written poem about the governments stormy skies. You used great descriptive words that seemed to fit quite well and very appropriate art work. I am sorry your wife has been sick. Nice job you have done! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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This is a very interesting and well written poem about the governments stormy skies. You used great descriptive words that seemed to fit quite well and very appropriate art work. I am sorry your wife has been sick. Nice job you have done! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Thank you Teri. I appreciate the review and comments, as well as your well-wishes.. Glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Pantygynt
This seems to be a second cousin to the sestina and earlier today I came upon a rhymed one of those, a very unusual beast. At four quatrains this is nowhere near as long as the the sestina's 39 lines but the changing order of lines has certain similarities. I found the example posted easier to understand than the explanation having left my brain somewhere in 2018. Happy New Year to you.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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This seems to be a second cousin to the sestina and earlier today I came upon a rhymed one of those, a very unusual beast. At four quatrains this is nowhere near as long as the the sestina's 39 lines but the changing order of lines has certain similarities. I found the example posted easier to understand than the explanation having left my brain somewhere in 2018. Happy New Year to you.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you Pantygynt. Wonderful to hear from you and receive your insightful reviews again. When I write a Sestina, I try to chose words that rhyme, so then it easily comes out rhymed. Its all in the word selection there. Of course, you then also need to have an idea of your theme when choosing the rhymes in advance.
I fopund it more akin to the Pantoum.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the political games the government is playing causing stormy skies at the cost of hardorking men and woman with taxpayer money while they go on luxury holidays.
HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU AND YOUR FAMILY
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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A very well-written poem about the political games the government is playing causing stormy skies at the cost of hardorking men and woman with taxpayer money while they go on luxury holidays.
HAPPY NEW YEAR TO YOU AND YOUR FAMILY
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra. Happy New Year to you too. Congrats on you top 10 finish. Good to see you still here and at it.
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Thank you, I will not easily give up. I hope to see more of our work this year and more new formats to try.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Tom! Welcome back and a very happy New Year to you and your family. It's lovely to see you here again. I had to smile at your first poem, so many poets on here have been either for or against your President. I'm not saying a word, only that we over the pond have big government problems too. Your poetry hasn't suffered your long absence, my friend, this is superb and perfectly written. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Tom! Welcome back and a very happy New Year to you and your family. It's lovely to see you here again. I had to smile at your first poem, so many poets on here have been either for or against your President. I'm not saying a word, only that we over the pond have big government problems too. Your poetry hasn't suffered your long absence, my friend, this is superb and perfectly written. Well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sandra. It's good to be back. Yes, the Brexit and all over there, politics are in upheaval everywhere, it seems. I haven't written in so long that I wasn't sure I'd still have it. So I really appreciate you comments.
Comment from RodG
I truly commend you for (1) describing the state of affairs in Washington, D.C. and my state Illinois and (2) for meeting the rigid requirements of a most challenging format. Very impressive! Rod
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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I truly commend you for (1) describing the state of affairs in Washington, D.C. and my state Illinois and (2) for meeting the rigid requirements of a most challenging format. Very impressive! Rod
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank You Rod. Seems to be the case everywhere. I appreciate the review and wonderful stars. Good to hear from you too.
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My pleasure. And I do hope your wife is back home and fully recovered. Rod
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Thank you for your kind thoughts. She is home, but mostly bed-ridden now.
