Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Well, now you have me guessing is this fact or fiction??? Your last stanza says ..fact.. but we just do not know. Good writing in this cleverly rhymed verse. Well done.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2018

Thanks, Melissa.

Comment from Miss Sherry

Exceptional

Oh, boy - what an imagination. Would love to see Milton. Your poetry is so diverse - I love it all. This was a good read for a hectic day. And that is worth a million dollars. Hope to read more, even if it is not about ole Milton.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thank you, OP, for the great review. Bill

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh I believe absolutely every word of it, especially Dodo Dan. This is superbly metred and rhymed and yep a story too that sticks with a person.

Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee, Bill. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thanks, Gloria

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Sounds like one heck of a show. I hope the boys charged enough dough. If they did not then they gave away, a show for which many would gladly pay. A huge sum of money. For this was a show that was great and kind of funny.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thanks, nomi

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's a really weird story poem, Bill. I'm not quite sure what happened but the syphoning and the vomiting would probably make it so it wouldn't make it on America's Got Talent. Lol.

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Maybe the Gong Show?

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever and effective story with some choice words and great rhymes and flow and I wish you luck with the contest Bill, much enjoyed and I believe you! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thanks, Dolly.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

LOL! Only you could come up with this! No one should be permitted to have such a bizarre imagination--you'll scare little children, and old ladies too. How do these thoughts get into your head anyway? Maybe you should wear a hat with earmuffs, just to be on the safe side. :)

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thanks, Phyllis. I using some steroids right now; that's probably it.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 19-Dec-2018

Steroids, yuk! I take those. A few years ago I had to take such a large dose my hair began falling out. They work well to calm inflammation, but the many side effects can be worse than the disease. I hope you don't have anything too serious.

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2018

Working on a sciatic nerve.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 20-Dec-2018

Ouch! I had that problem for about twenty years, starting when I was in college. Thankfully it healed itself somehow, and I don't question it for fear it will wake up and remember to cause me incredible pain. So don't talk about it anymore, because there's always a chance it's looking over my shoulder while I read. :)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Now THERE'S a show I would most definitely pay to see, Bill.
It's not too often you see someone go into a Great White Shark in any way, shape or form, and come out again in one piece.
Ever seen the Steven Spielberg film, JAWS?
Just sayin'...
Good alliteration all throughout.

I'm Oscar Mike...
~Dean

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

I think I?ve seen this show except for the melting, siphoning, vomiting, and the shark.

reply by Dean Kuch on 19-Dec-2018

heh-heh-heh...

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Great work with the rhyme, and best of luck in the contest. Excellent alliteration with Meltin' Milton Magic Man. Rather a disgusting act, if you ask me--but you didn't. Somehow your last line "so now I'll disembark" is a bit of a let-down and doesn't contribute to the story. judi

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

I agree, but few other choices made much more sense at that point.

reply by judiverse on 19-Dec-2018

I'm thinking lark (meaning something done for fun) might be a suitable word. judi

reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Used it; sounds better. Thanks, Judi

reply by judiverse on 19-Dec-2018

Yeah! Glad it worked! judi

reply by the author on 21-Dec-2018

I don?t recall if I nominated you as a reviewer, Judi. Your suggestion totally saved that Meltin? Milton poem. Owe you one.

reply by judiverse on 21-Dec-2018

So glad it worked for you. I saw what you had done, and it was looking good. judi

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Well, that is certainly the 'Bill of Writes' that we all know and love! ;) :) Like the unique rhyme scheme and the way it works with your one-of-a-kind story -- thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! :) Yvete

 Comment Written 19-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018

Thanks, Yvette. I think I?d pay to see this. Bill