Prize of a Lifetime
Keep them close in those younger years...25 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This seventy-five-word flash fiction story, Prize of a Lifetime, takes us to the other side with Hannah being swept away by a dreamboat seaman with a charming pup. Those swabbies have the magic touch.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This seventy-five-word flash fiction story, Prize of a Lifetime, takes us to the other side with Hannah being swept away by a dreamboat seaman with a charming pup. Those swabbies have the magic touch.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Fun review, Bill -- I do appreciate your taking the time to do so. :) ;) I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Be sure to have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Rickie1
Roger
But what about Hanna? What happens to her? Classic pervert scenario getting a child attention with a puppy dog? Is that your message or am I off base?
Rickie
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Roger
But what about Hanna? What happens to her? Classic pervert scenario getting a child attention with a puppy dog? Is that your message or am I off base?
Rickie
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I purposefully left that open for the reader...this was a ?fantasy write? with a message...the fact that the little girl was gone was the point. I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work. :) :) Thank you for stopping by and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! Yvette
Comment from jenintorre
I loved your crackerjack story. This was a real blast from the past for me. I grew up in Canada in the 50's and of course loved crackerjack but I'd forgotten all about it. Great little story and a good entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I loved your crackerjack story. This was a real blast from the past for me. I grew up in Canada in the 50's and of course loved crackerjack but I'd forgotten all about it. Great little story and a good entry for the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I still love them! You know, Jen, I picked up a box on a lark about a year or so ago...the prize was some little cheap tattoo...and just ONE at that!! :) :) But, yeah, I put it on anyway knowing it would wash off....hey, I'm old, but I'm not dead!! :) :) Crazy, too, sometimes, but it keeps me young on the inside!! ;) :) Sadly, though, I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Tragic mini-story that too often occurs in the real world. I wonder if Claire blamed herself. She should. Sounds like there was little love between mother and child, which is as sad as the ending.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Tragic mini-story that too often occurs in the real world. I wonder if Claire blamed herself. She should. Sounds like there was little love between mother and child, which is as sad as the ending.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the read and review, Phyllis ? always appreciated! :) :) :) This was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. :) But, you know, the really sad thing is that I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Again, thanx for stopping by and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
I enjoyed this short Cracker Jack piece. Who doesn't love and remember it? I would dig all the way down for the prize sometimes dumping it all over myself in the process! A bittersweet, short story. Her mom missed out on the jewel she was even at a young age. I am glad she got her adventures!
All my best,
Sal
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I enjoyed this short Cracker Jack piece. Who doesn't love and remember it? I would dig all the way down for the prize sometimes dumping it all over myself in the process! A bittersweet, short story. Her mom missed out on the jewel she was even at a young age. I am glad she got her adventures!
All my best,
Sal
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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LOL! You know I picked up a box on a lark about a year or so ago...the prize was some little cheap tattoo...and just ONE at that!! :) :) But, yeah, I put it on anyway knowing it would wash off....hey, I'm old, but I'm not dead!! :) :) Crazy, too, sometimes, but it keeps me young on the inside!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed this, Sally!! This was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
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You?re welcome, Yvette! You have a great week and weeks end, as well.
Sal :+)
Comment from Dean Kuch
I used to practically live on Cracker Jacks when I was a kid and it had absolutely nothing to do with the prize inside, Yvette.
I just loved the darned things and still do today.
Cracker Jacks are one of those snacks as timeless as Hostess Twinkies.
Why even the packaging looks much the same as it did in the 1960s.
Good job with this, Yvette.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I used to practically live on Cracker Jacks when I was a kid and it had absolutely nothing to do with the prize inside, Yvette.
I just loved the darned things and still do today.
Cracker Jacks are one of those snacks as timeless as Hostess Twinkies.
Why even the packaging looks much the same as it did in the 1960s.
Good job with this, Yvette.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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LOL! You know I picked up a box on a lark about a year or so ago...the prize was some little cheap tattoo...and just ONE at that!! :) :) But, yeah, I put it on anyway knowing it would wash off....hey, I'm old, but I'm not dead!! :) :) Crazy, too, sometimes, but it keeps me young on the inside!! ;) :) And Twinkies? They were okay, but Sno-Balls ruled in the 'junk food pastry' world!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed this, Dean, and it is good to hear from you!! This was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would (cuz you deserve them after your extended hospital stint!)!! :) :) Yvette
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You're more than welcome. :}
Comment from Mrs. KT
Woah, Friend!
Another winner for certain! My husband's mother always gave each of her nine children Cracker Jacks when one of the siblings had a birthday. That way, no one felt left out! (Just an aside as to the memory your well-crafted flash fiction brought to my mind)
Even given the parameters of this prompt, you have managed to create suspense, characterization, and the feeling to always be aware of what is waiting inside a box of Cracker Jacks! Loved it!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Woah, Friend!
Another winner for certain! My husband's mother always gave each of her nine children Cracker Jacks when one of the siblings had a birthday. That way, no one felt left out! (Just an aside as to the memory your well-crafted flash fiction brought to my mind)
Even given the parameters of this prompt, you have managed to create suspense, characterization, and the feeling to always be aware of what is waiting inside a box of Cracker Jacks! Loved it!
diane
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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LOL! You know I picked up a box on a lark about a year or so ago...the prize was some little cheap tattoo...and just ONE at that!! :) :) But, yeah, I put it on anyway knowing it would wash off....hey, I'm old, but I'm not dead!! :) :) Crazy, too, sometimes, but it keeps me young on the inside!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed this, Diane, and thank you for encouragement!! This was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
OK this is good Yvette. A little mystery to be solved. Hanna become Princess Hannah, on opening the Cracker Jack box, but then it get most enticing for her adventure ticket price... was petting his dog? New trust a sailor. This is a good entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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OK this is good Yvette. A little mystery to be solved. Hanna become Princess Hannah, on opening the Cracker Jack box, but then it get most enticing for her adventure ticket price... was petting his dog? New trust a sailor. This is a good entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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So glad you enjoyed this, poetwatch ? it was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Adri7enne
Actually happens, it seems. Good little reminder to appreciate the people who are precious in our lives. No one is given any guarantees. Good little story, told in so few words. I remember Cracker Jacks. The prize was the best part of them. As a child, the prize was of top importance. Well done, Yolande. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Actually happens, it seems. Good little reminder to appreciate the people who are precious in our lives. No one is given any guarantees. Good little story, told in so few words. I remember Cracker Jacks. The prize was the best part of them. As a child, the prize was of top importance. Well done, Yolande. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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They were fun, weren't they? I still pickup a box once in a while -- and, yeah, I still toss the peanuts and only eat the popcorn! :) ;) LOL! You know, I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Again, thanx for stopping by and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from William Ross
Nice, I still enjoy cracker jacks once in a while, I wish I' would of kept and collected all the prizes through the years. Good luck on the contest and have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Nice, I still enjoy cracker jacks once in a while, I wish I' would of kept and collected all the prizes through the years. Good luck on the contest and have a wonderful day
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2018
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Yeah, you know I picked up a box on a lark about a year or so ago...the prize was some little cheap tattoo...and just ONE at that!! :) :) But,yeah, I put it on anyway knowing it would wash off....hey, I'm old, but I'm not dead!! :) :) Crazy, too, sometimes, but it keeps me young on the inside!! ;) :) So glad you enjoyed this, William!! This was my ?fantasy write? with a message, but the 75 word limit made it a challenge. :) :) I have known many students and parents who use the cinema as a 'babysitter' on days when the school system has a holiday but the parent has to work....sigh. :) :) Thank you for your fun review and have a wonderful week of finding hidden prizes where you never thought you would!! :) :) Yvette
