A Storm Blows In
A Kyrielle poem for Potlatch Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I love a good rainstorm. I built a house for a customer who asked for a gazebo with a metal roof so he could sit under it during a storm and listen to the rain. Your poem reminded me of it.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I love a good rainstorm. I built a house for a customer who asked for a gazebo with a metal roof so he could sit under it during a storm and listen to the rain. Your poem reminded me of it.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I wish I had a metal roof. I'm having a patio roof put on that's metal. The one I had before, it was deafening sitting under it when it rained. I'm hoping to have that again. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from meeshu
I like the feel of this work, safe and cozy inside while a serious storm rants outside. I imagine the lights are out, too. I like that you will experiment with different forms. you have done very well here, Damommy.................meeshu
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I like the feel of this work, safe and cozy inside while a serious storm rants outside. I imagine the lights are out, too. I like that you will experiment with different forms. you have done very well here, Damommy.................meeshu
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Meeshu. I appreciate this wonderful review. You should join us in Potlatch Poetry. That's where we get all these forms.
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased you were inspired by the Club's prompt, and I enjoyed your rhymes, rhythm and repeats in this Kyrielle. You use of personification adds to the intensity of the storm. Nevertheless, I am still looking forward to enjoying autumn! -Joan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I am pleased you were inspired by the Club's prompt, and I enjoyed your rhymes, rhythm and repeats in this Kyrielle. You use of personification adds to the intensity of the storm. Nevertheless, I am still looking forward to enjoying autumn! -Joan
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I think this storm may have pushed it closer here. I hope so. I'm ready for autumn and winter. Thanks for reviewing. I appreciate your great comments.
Comment from Mastery
Excellent writing, Yvonne. You definitely set a mood with text like this: And your use of strong verbs are at play all the way through.
" The tempest rages out its wrath.
Torrential downpours from the hills
are carving patterns in the path
as raindrops splash my windowsills."
Brilliant. Bless you, Bob
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Excellent writing, Yvonne. You definitely set a mood with text like this: And your use of strong verbs are at play all the way through.
" The tempest rages out its wrath.
Torrential downpours from the hills
are carving patterns in the path
as raindrops splash my windowsills."
Brilliant. Bless you, Bob
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much, Bob. It means a lot that you like it.
Comment from WildWithWords
A very pretty little piece, DaMommy. The imagery is very strong and paints an easy picture to see, while the photo is just right for its purpose even down to the weather vane. Nice work.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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A very pretty little piece, DaMommy. The imagery is very strong and paints an easy picture to see, while the photo is just right for its purpose even down to the weather vane. Nice work.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Bill. I hoped someone would see it like I did. Appreciate it.
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh wow, Yvonne. This is such a lovely Kyrielle poem. I like the theme and the wonderful rhyme and flow. So easy to go from one line to the next. Image is perfect for your poem. Marilyn
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Oh wow, Yvonne. This is such a lovely Kyrielle poem. I like the theme and the wonderful rhyme and flow. So easy to go from one line to the next. Image is perfect for your poem. Marilyn
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Marilyn I appreciate that.
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely kyrielle, Yvonne! I think it was you who introduced me to this form and I love how you used it to describe this heavy rainstorm! The repeated line gives us the sense of the continual splashing on the windowsills.
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Lovely kyrielle, Yvonne! I think it was you who introduced me to this form and I love how you used it to describe this heavy rainstorm! The repeated line gives us the sense of the continual splashing on the windowsills.
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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I'm so glad you like it. You must write one. I know you could do a great job. Thank you for such lovely comments.
