A Storm Blows In
A Kyrielle poem for Potlatch Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Yvonne, why your kryielle. Everything about it is perfect. The picture is awesome and so perfect for your well-chosen words. The color scheme is a great reminder of storms as is the font. Your words read smoothly with great rhymes, too. I could picture this happening as I read it. I love the weather vane in the picture. Your topic is a great one and is well-expressed with your thoughts/feelings. Thanks for sharing a wonderful kryiells. Jan
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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You did a great job, Yvonne, why your kryielle. Everything about it is perfect. The picture is awesome and so perfect for your well-chosen words. The color scheme is a great reminder of storms as is the font. Your words read smoothly with great rhymes, too. I could picture this happening as I read it. I love the weather vane in the picture. Your topic is a great one and is well-expressed with your thoughts/feelings. Thanks for sharing a wonderful kryiells. Jan
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Goodness! Thank you for this absolutely glowing review. I appreciate it!
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. There is something so raw and elemental about a raging storm. Almost no better feeling in the world sitting in a chair by the fire, while the storm screams its fury. I loved this. This is a difficult format to sound unforced throughout. Your poem reads smooth and has great pace. You made me picture times when I have sat protected watching a storm. Great time for contemplation and writing. Hugh
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Excellent. There is something so raw and elemental about a raging storm. Almost no better feeling in the world sitting in a chair by the fire, while the storm screams its fury. I loved this. This is a difficult format to sound unforced throughout. Your poem reads smooth and has great pace. You made me picture times when I have sat protected watching a storm. Great time for contemplation and writing. Hugh
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I'm happy it brought back memories. I agree there's no better place to watch a storm than from a fireside chair. Thank you for this lovely review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle poem for Potlatch club about the storm that blows everything in its path away and even roofs seem not to be safe at all. The storm wind blows the raindrops into the window.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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A very well-written Kyrielle poem for Potlatch club about the storm that blows everything in its path away and even roofs seem not to be safe at all. The storm wind blows the raindrops into the window.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I love a thunderstorm as long as it doesn't hurt anyone. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow - beautifully done! The reader can almost hear the splashing by the time the read is through...great job! Love the contrast between the indoors and the outdoors that you've created! :) ;) Thank you for sharing! :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Wow - beautifully done! The reader can almost hear the splashing by the time the read is through...great job! Love the contrast between the indoors and the outdoors that you've created! :) ;) Thank you for sharing! :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this great review. I'm glad you like it. I wrote it while it was storming here.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning,
What a moving Kyrielle filled with keen visual and emotive imagery. As dark and dreary as is the storm you describe, how I love Autumn thunderstorms here in northern Michigan. There is something exciting about being inside - close to a fire and family - when a tempest, as you describe, pays us a visit. Your words draw the reader in...just a delightful read...
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Good Morning,
What a moving Kyrielle filled with keen visual and emotive imagery. As dark and dreary as is the storm you describe, how I love Autumn thunderstorms here in northern Michigan. There is something exciting about being inside - close to a fire and family - when a tempest, as you describe, pays us a visit. Your words draw the reader in...just a delightful read...
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this lovely review. I, too, like thunderstorms. Such a cozy feeling of being inside with a good fire going. However, it's not cool enough for a fire yet, but the storm cooled things down considerably.
Comment from LIJ Red
Image, word choice, adherence to the form, this is an exceptional response to the Potlatch call for a Kyrielle. We have had a lot of evenings like that this summer.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Image, word choice, adherence to the form, this is an exceptional response to the Potlatch call for a Kyrielle. We have had a lot of evenings like that this summer.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I love 'em. Thank you for this wonderful review. It means a lot to me.
Comment from Pantygynt
This follows the kyrielle pattern perfectly and you have elected to turn your simple syllable count into the neater sounding iambic tetrameters.
You have also chosen to use your refrain line as inegral to the sense of each stanza, not always easy, rather than the easier option of using it as a stand alone refrain, easier but not so satifying. So all in all this is an excellent response to the challenge.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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This follows the kyrielle pattern perfectly and you have elected to turn your simple syllable count into the neater sounding iambic tetrameters.
You have also chosen to use your refrain line as inegral to the sense of each stanza, not always easy, rather than the easier option of using it as a stand alone refrain, easier but not so satifying. So all in all this is an excellent response to the challenge.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem is written in an appropriate for for the subject of rainfall! A cleverly written poem with great rhythmn and rhyme and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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This poem is written in an appropriate for for the subject of rainfall! A cleverly written poem with great rhythmn and rhyme and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Dolly. I'm so happy you like it. It was storming here when I wrote it. 8-)
Yvonne
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Well done. I like the repeating line you chose. And these are all great words that say STORM, the kind of noisy, lightning filled event, where you're glad you're safe inside a warm house.
crash
gales
torment
clap
tempest
wrath
torrential
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Well done. I like the repeating line you chose. And these are all great words that say STORM, the kind of noisy, lightning filled event, where you're glad you're safe inside a warm house.
crash
gales
torment
clap
tempest
wrath
torrential
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Phyllis. I was inspired by the storm we had today. It's been raining all day. I'm so happy you like this.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
>I particularly fell in love with your second verse, Damommy, as it tells me to see the metaphor in the imagery explained so very well as I could smell it and feel it and touch it and especially hear it. My cozy chair by the fire listening to the rain, I do that so often that set me right at home. With an occasional reading Fanstory poems.
> Excellent job writing this Kyrielle, Is it reads smoothly the enjambment flows so well and is due also to the excellent rhythm that so contingent and supportive to the rhyming of each line.
> Thank you for sharing this and take care and have a good one especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alx
>Third verse third line you may need a comma after "Path".
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Cheers, Damommy;
>I particularly fell in love with your second verse, Damommy, as it tells me to see the metaphor in the imagery explained so very well as I could smell it and feel it and touch it and especially hear it. My cozy chair by the fire listening to the rain, I do that so often that set me right at home. With an occasional reading Fanstory poems.
> Excellent job writing this Kyrielle, Is it reads smoothly the enjambment flows so well and is due also to the excellent rhythm that so contingent and supportive to the rhyming of each line.
> Thank you for sharing this and take care and have a good one especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alx
>Third verse third line you may need a comma after "Path".
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you for such a glowing review. I will take a look at that comma.
