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"ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from
Kelly Grim
This is great I enjoyed the rhyme, including your title and the description line -- clever! Even the flow of this poem, short one and two syllable words, the hard consonant sounds, gives me the feel of repetitive mechanical labor! Well done!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
Comment from
phill doran
Hello Anon
Very good. Comprehensive and in the right form - with rhymes too, which isn't easy.
I spent a few minutes rearranging the order of the first four lines, which can be applied in a variety of sequences and ABAB rhymes too: hours of fun (well, minutes then).
I have not seen this form before, but it clearly can be creatively used and I wish you well in the contest with this piece.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
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