Secrets of a Leaf
an autumn love song22 total reviews
Comment from kleck140
Your poem says it well. Sure is great to enjoy the
summer and then fall. We are having Indian summer
with lots of rain. I don't find anything to change. Keep
on writing. Ellie
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Your poem says it well. Sure is great to enjoy the
summer and then fall. We are having Indian summer
with lots of rain. I don't find anything to change. Keep
on writing. Ellie
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Ellie! Caroline
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You are welcome!
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You are welcome!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Caroline
I wanted to wait until I was able to offer you that 6-star rating your poem deserves.
I see life and death in your poem, nature's way, a garden for the giving and taking. Blessings and rest.
My favorite lines,
"How it gathered orange all summer
Soaking in the sun
Relishing the rays" ... you bring that fallen leaf back to life, and us too. How we live our life, soaking in the sun, relishing the rays, but eventually fall in the end having gathered everything good that we could. Nice personification there of the leaf, the comparison to our own lives, and the fine alliteration with "s" in "soaking in the sun" and "r" in "Relishing the rays".
I also love your final line,
"But picked it up like a found penny" ... treasure, our lives are a treasure, even as we decay in the ground.
So nice!
Loved it!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Hi Caroline
I wanted to wait until I was able to offer you that 6-star rating your poem deserves.
I see life and death in your poem, nature's way, a garden for the giving and taking. Blessings and rest.
My favorite lines,
"How it gathered orange all summer
Soaking in the sun
Relishing the rays" ... you bring that fallen leaf back to life, and us too. How we live our life, soaking in the sun, relishing the rays, but eventually fall in the end having gathered everything good that we could. Nice personification there of the leaf, the comparison to our own lives, and the fine alliteration with "s" in "soaking in the sun" and "r" in "Relishing the rays".
I also love your final line,
"But picked it up like a found penny" ... treasure, our lives are a treasure, even as we decay in the ground.
So nice!
Loved it!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much Kimbob for your enthusiastic response and specific comments! It did feel like Spirit funneled it in! Caroline
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love that line, 'how it gathered orange all summer', as if the leaf had sucked the amber sun into its veins, you describe autumn perfectly, warm sentiments here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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I love that line, 'how it gathered orange all summer', as if the leaf had sucked the amber sun into its veins, you describe autumn perfectly, warm sentiments here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
thanks, dolly! You're a sweetheart to read and review so specifically. Caroline
Comment from Spitfire
I have more respect for autumn leaves on the ground after reading this. A found penny with a secret to tell. I love the sequence of the color evolving--soaking, becoming heavy, ripening. Even the death becomes a rebirth.
Great use of alliteration with the plosive p sound.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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I have more respect for autumn leaves on the ground after reading this. A found penny with a secret to tell. I love the sequence of the color evolving--soaking, becoming heavy, ripening. Even the death becomes a rebirth.
Great use of alliteration with the plosive p sound.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Spitfire. I always value your enthusiastic and supportive comments! Fall is my favorite season! Caroline
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Secrets of a Leaf", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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"Secrets of a Leaf", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. To me, this is a six, but unfortunately I only have fives left. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Duchess, thank you so much for your thoughtful, supportive review! Caroline
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Caroline,
You certainly deserved them.
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from lyenochka
Such a delightful poem full of observation of nature and drawing close to try to understand these changes in a single leaf! I can relate to picking up leaves "like a found penny!"
Question:
"Listened to the secret of its olor" (Have you switched to Spanish here? 'olor' is 'odor' in Spanish. Or perhaps you meant 'color?'
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Such a delightful poem full of observation of nature and drawing close to try to understand these changes in a single leaf! I can relate to picking up leaves "like a found penny!"
Question:
"Listened to the secret of its olor" (Have you switched to Spanish here? 'olor' is 'odor' in Spanish. Or perhaps you meant 'color?'
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Oh, dear--I was editing something else, and apparently zapped the "c". I know a little Latin, but no Spanish! Thanks for the supportive review--especially for the things that resonate. Caroline
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Zinnia,
Such a beautiful poem that is so rich in visual and emotive imagery. However, there are two instances of the same nit that need to be addressed and corrected:
it's (its) color
it's (its) flaming descent.
Hope this helps.
diane
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Hello Zinnia,
Such a beautiful poem that is so rich in visual and emotive imagery. However, there are two instances of the same nit that need to be addressed and corrected:
it's (its) color
it's (its) flaming descent.
Hope this helps.
diane
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Mrs. KT! Another reviewer noticed that, too, and I went back for the correction. Thank you for taking the time to review and comment! Caroline
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Happy to help.
I would just hate to have you beautiful poem marked down because of that mistake.
Best Wishes!
diane
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Thanks, again! c.
Comment from Craigitar
Wow, Caroline! This is a sixer all day long! You've bared the soul of an autumn leaf, or maybe given it a soul. This flowed effortlessly and captured the imagination. The last line gave value to this fallen jewel. This is a poem for autumn if ever there was one! Great writing! Craig
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Wow, Caroline! This is a sixer all day long! You've bared the soul of an autumn leaf, or maybe given it a soul. This flowed effortlessly and captured the imagination. The last line gave value to this fallen jewel. This is a poem for autumn if ever there was one! Great writing! Craig
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thanks for your enthusiastic review, Craig! I do believe that nature has a soul, but wasn't really trying to capture that when I wrote. thanks for percieving what had escaped me. I appreciate your writing, and your contribution to mine. Caroline
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
OH, I loved all of your words that related to the color orange in sharing your story/poem of the secret of the leaf. Your last two lines are so stunning. I really enjoyed--flaming descent and found penny!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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OH, I loved all of your words that related to the color orange in sharing your story/poem of the secret of the leaf. Your last two lines are so stunning. I really enjoyed--flaming descent and found penny!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Cindy--for your enthusiasm and specific comments! Caroline
Comment from Quantum Traveler
I find your depth of perception Caroline very exquisite.
You have the ability to see within the existence of a simple leaf and feel the transformation and essence of a living entity.
You write with a compassionate love and artistic feeling that paints a canvas with the essence of Mother Nature.
Your Imagery and Matting Colors are Outstanding for this Beautifully written verse.
Well Very Portrayed...Q.T...Phil.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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I find your depth of perception Caroline very exquisite.
You have the ability to see within the existence of a simple leaf and feel the transformation and essence of a living entity.
You write with a compassionate love and artistic feeling that paints a canvas with the essence of Mother Nature.
Your Imagery and Matting Colors are Outstanding for this Beautifully written verse.
Well Very Portrayed...Q.T...Phil.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Phil for the enthusiastic response, and specific comments! I appreciate your time and effort. Caroline
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It was my pleasure...Q.T...Phil.
