GULBRANDR- God's Sword
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Lucas"A child is born who will be a champion
8 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Roxanna, Well, Lucas is mad that's for sure and greedy, and that's a dangerous combination. Hamish is greedy and ambitious.
that went far beyond what he could image. = ... he could imagine or he could fathom
Well written. All the best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Hi Roxanna, Well, Lucas is mad that's for sure and greedy, and that's a dangerous combination. Hamish is greedy and ambitious.
that went far beyond what he could image. = ... he could imagine or he could fathom
Well written. All the best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much Ulla. =}
Comment from Sally Law
Rox, thank you for making this easier to read. This is excellent. The wicked are wicked together aligning themseles for the unforseeable future. You are such a descriptive writer and an excellent one at that. Very well done.
All my best,
Sally
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Rox, thank you for making this easier to read. This is excellent. The wicked are wicked together aligning themseles for the unforseeable future. You are such a descriptive writer and an excellent one at that. Very well done.
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much Sally. I'm glad it was better for reading this time. Rox
Comment from Marie Foster1
Wow! This writing is truly amazing. This is truly professional level. I would read this book! The writing is so descriptive and the words, gestures, surroundings are very believable. Good job Roxanne!!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Wow! This writing is truly amazing. This is truly professional level. I would read this book! The writing is so descriptive and the words, gestures, surroundings are very believable. Good job Roxanne!!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much Marie. I appreciate your kind comments and the six stars! Rox
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Lucas is a handsome man, also a devious one. He has no conscience and no feeling for anyone . That is evident in his story. Hamish is not that different. Maybe not as evil but he has the same desire for power and riches. Together they will make formidable foes against our hero Joshua. Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Lucas is a handsome man, also a devious one. He has no conscience and no feeling for anyone . That is evident in his story. Hamish is not that different. Maybe not as evil but he has the same desire for power and riches. Together they will make formidable foes against our hero Joshua. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much Nancy. I so appreciate your comments and the six stars! Rox
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is not good news! Hamish has a brother far greedier and crueler than himself. Hmm, not good at all. The old adage, good triumphs over evil, will surely be tested this time. Let's see what happens next! Another wonderful chapter, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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That is not good news! Hamish has a brother far greedier and crueler than himself. Hmm, not good at all. The old adage, good triumphs over evil, will surely be tested this time. Let's see what happens next! Another wonderful chapter, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. I was happy with it and I haven't been happy with some of the chapters, so I'm glad to be feeling better about it. Thanks again. Rox
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Roxanna,
What an interesting twist and you have chosen a great point in the story to introduce it.
Sibling warriors ready to overthrow all and rule the world-I like it.
There's plenty of scope to move the story forward.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Hi Roxanna,
What an interesting twist and you have chosen a great point in the story to introduce it.
Sibling warriors ready to overthrow all and rule the world-I like it.
There's plenty of scope to move the story forward.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 08-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much Shirley. You are so encouraging. Rox
Comment from WildWithWords
I came back to check out Hamish's fate following his dragon ride in the previous chapter and found a wonderfully written follow-up chapter with flawless editing this time, and a rapidly evolving and most interesting story.
This is quality writing and the story is quite enthralling. You've managed to place our hero in a delicate situation from which there is no satisfactory solution available. He can either join his megalomaniacal sociopath brother Lucas in world domination, or he can run and become a hunted traitor by the same person. Some choice.
I'm kind of hoping there will come a position within the work for a stoic and virtuous female love interest for Hamish. Someone who will help sway him away from a life of evil and back on the path towards being the novel's true hero. I'm reasonably confident you already have that area worked out for future chapters.
PS: I was the one who told you of the long space under your previous chapter and advised the single word edit as well. It was pleasing to revisit Chapter 3 and find
you had fixed that. So many people ignore the opportunity to improve their work and its presentation that it gets very frustrating after spending so much time looking for fixes on their behalf.
I came here presuming that all writers would have a "professional" attitude to their work. It shocks me how many don't. Nice to meet another who does.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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I came back to check out Hamish's fate following his dragon ride in the previous chapter and found a wonderfully written follow-up chapter with flawless editing this time, and a rapidly evolving and most interesting story.
This is quality writing and the story is quite enthralling. You've managed to place our hero in a delicate situation from which there is no satisfactory solution available. He can either join his megalomaniacal sociopath brother Lucas in world domination, or he can run and become a hunted traitor by the same person. Some choice.
I'm kind of hoping there will come a position within the work for a stoic and virtuous female love interest for Hamish. Someone who will help sway him away from a life of evil and back on the path towards being the novel's true hero. I'm reasonably confident you already have that area worked out for future chapters.
PS: I was the one who told you of the long space under your previous chapter and advised the single word edit as well. It was pleasing to revisit Chapter 3 and find
you had fixed that. So many people ignore the opportunity to improve their work and its presentation that it gets very frustrating after spending so much time looking for fixes on their behalf.
I came here presuming that all writers would have a "professional" attitude to their work. It shocks me how many don't. Nice to meet another who does.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Hi Bill, Thank you so much for the wonderful review and 6 stars. I always go back and do the fixes of spelling and others if I think it is the right way to go. I too find it strange that others don't fix their writing. I sill work on things that are long since reviewed to try and improve it. I don't want my work half done or inferior in any way.
People are funny. I had one tell me they had always received 6's for their postings. I'd given him 5 and told him it was well done. But he felt it deserved more. I couldn't believe it. I had never had anyone tell me that before. I had to laugh. =}
I'm not sure if you have read the whole story, but Hamish is not the hero. He is for the most part a bad guy in the story. Joshua is the hero. Hamish had been the clan's, the people of Wahaland's. Spiritual leader, but he is really only wanting to glorify himself. He is not well liked and is very vain. I'm sorry to have confused you and I do I haven't confused everyone.
Thank you again so much for the great review. Rox
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Actually now you mention it I do recall that Hamish was cast as the bad guy to Joshua early in the only previous chapter I had read (the one before this).
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment from royowen
What a great chapter Rox, fancy Hamish's long long lost brother appearing after all those years, Lucas was now leader of the blue horde. And has invited his ambitious brother to be his second in command, he could fulfil his ambitions with little pain, but could he trust his evil brother...I think not. Excellent story my friend, well done, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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What a great chapter Rox, fancy Hamish's long long lost brother appearing after all those years, Lucas was now leader of the blue horde. And has invited his ambitious brother to be his second in command, he could fulfil his ambitions with little pain, but could he trust his evil brother...I think not. Excellent story my friend, well done, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 07-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much Roy.
I had one reviewer tell me he hoped the hero Hamish would get back on the right path. I don't think he has read the whole story. I hope I haven't confused others that Hamish and not Joshua is the hero. ={ I explained that to him so maybe he will read a few chapter back. Thank you again Roy. I think I have gotten my groove back for the book and am excited about it again. =} Rox
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No, I knew Joshua was the hero and not Hamish
