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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from judiverse
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This is as gruesome as your scene with the Vietcong. Maybe this was just a specially posed picture, if you could convince the komodo dragon it's just a photo op. Poor goats don't have much of a way to fight back. Excellent internal rhyme. Wish I'd waited longer after dinner to "digest" this. judi

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Maybe their just mugging for the camera. KD and the Kid.
Comment from Spitfire
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Almost a tongue twister. I like the format and the change in the last line of the second stanza. A fun read aloud poem. Is 'Baaaaa' considered a song? LOL

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Komodo dragon serves as music critic here.
Comment from Ginnygray
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This might be "goat down the throat to a lizard gizzard", but it is pretty gruesome as some nature tends to be! I tend to like the plant eaters,ð???!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    That?s what the goat said.
Comment from nomi338
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Run kid, run! Why is that goat just sitting there as if resigned to its fate. I would be running, fighting, doing everything I could to not be eaten. This is a clear difference between animals and man. Few if any peope would just sit there and calmly accept this fate. Wow!

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    The goat was probably bitten earlier, was finally immobilized by the toxins in the lizard's maul, and then stalked to this point of being eaten alive.
reply by nomi338 on 30-Aug-2018
    That sucker would never get close enough to me, that is unless it caught me sleeping. Remind me to never sleep anywhere they hang out.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks apparently the poor goat is bound for becoming a victim but if the goat could sing a note a reverse thing could happen; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thanks, ALD
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi Bill. Komodo dragons are fascinating. They usually do not always eat their prey right away. I don't know what is worse. To get bit and die from blood poising 24 hours later or be shredded to death. They bite their prey and if the prey manages to escape, the Komodo's saliva causes an infection and blood poisoning within 24 hours. They follow the victim until it weakens from the infection and then eat it. Argh. Good job as usual. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thanks, Pam, for the review and explanation.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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The food chain continues and the weak succumb to the strong, and we are emotional about it! Yes the ill-fainted goat got his poor head caught in the mouth of the dragon! 'Goat down the throat', Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
    Thanks, Dolly.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Okay, so, question here: is there a name for this kind of poetry? Maybe Schott Therapy....? ;) LOL

This is certainly a unique combination of prose and rhyme...gives the end of each stanza more of a dramatic ending....the hammer really coming down so to speak.

Thanx for the interesting write! :) ;)

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
    Thanks, Yvette, for looking at this. Bill
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh dear, that picture is giving me a headache! Poor goat!
Interesting free verse structure that ends in an internal rhyme in the last two lines of each stanza.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
    It's a rough picture to be sure. Each line, actually, has an internal rhyme. Happy day.
reply by lyenochka on 28-Aug-2018
    Darn! How could I miss that? I guess my head hurt too much. Great job with the internal rhymes!
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
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I must admit this one was tough for me to get through because of my connection to animals. Yet you conveyed a strong message and the writing is flawless so five stars!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2018
    Thanks, Shauna. Sorry if the picture was too stark.