zanzibar afternoon
a story3 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao unknown writer!
I enjoyed immesely your story...your description of the underworld and its colourful and busy occupants was delightful as was the the second part ...the unlikely friendship between the old fisherman and sweet Jesse.
Two people very different with a common passion the sea..spending time sharing their stories ..and I loved the bittersweet ending ..the pendant found just in time before the old fisherman died...
I'm addicted to sad endings so I actaully loved the ending. and I love stories about simple events of everyday life.
The narrative from beginning to end was charming.
I will be disappointed if you dont win this contest .Keeping my fingers and toes [biggrin] crossed.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2018
Ciao unknown writer!
I enjoyed immesely your story...your description of the underworld and its colourful and busy occupants was delightful as was the the second part ...the unlikely friendship between the old fisherman and sweet Jesse.
Two people very different with a common passion the sea..spending time sharing their stories ..and I loved the bittersweet ending ..the pendant found just in time before the old fisherman died...
I'm addicted to sad endings so I actaully loved the ending. and I love stories about simple events of everyday life.
The narrative from beginning to end was charming.
I will be disappointed if you dont win this contest .Keeping my fingers and toes [biggrin] crossed.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2018
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Thanks for the encouraging review and sparkly stars. It is partly true. Cheers, j
Comment from cajunjoe
This is very interesting writing. Love how you describe the coral reef and how the fish are reacting with it. Very well done, it's hard to believe it is fiction. Sad the friend had to die. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
This is very interesting writing. Love how you describe the coral reef and how the fish are reacting with it. Very well done, it's hard to believe it is fiction. Sad the friend had to die. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the review. Some parts of it are true. Cheers, j
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you're welcome
Comment from Kelly Hanna
I teared up! Wonderful story! You took me away to that beautiful place will y'all of that exotic description. The relationship between the old man and Jesse is sweet. Wonderful job!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
I teared up! Wonderful story! You took me away to that beautiful place will y'all of that exotic description. The relationship between the old man and Jesse is sweet. Wonderful job!
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the review. Some of it is true, cheers, j