Let's step forward
Together- A Quatern21 total reviews
Comment from cajunjoe
It looks like you did very well on this style that is new to you. It's a very good poem but I certainly would like to know why you kept important stuff in your head, like what steps are printed worldwide? You write "Let's step forward" , the picture shows two people walking, yet all steps are printed worldwide. Other that the deep dark mystery the poem is great.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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It looks like you did very well on this style that is new to you. It's a very good poem but I certainly would like to know why you kept important stuff in your head, like what steps are printed worldwide? You write "Let's step forward" , the picture shows two people walking, yet all steps are printed worldwide. Other that the deep dark mystery the poem is great.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you and your point is very well taken, I can see where I can improve, your review is what I (we) need encouraging and so very helpful, many thanks****kahpot
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you're welcome
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very deep and thought-provoking. The flow, the rhymes, the meter are all impeccable. You did very well on your first try. I wouldn't have known, it was your first try if, you hadn't had mentioned it, in your Author's notes. I see, by the artwork you chose, that the two people are stepping forward. The artwork made me anticipate a poem about a personal relationship. But your message goes much deeper than that. You did an excellent job of repeating the first line in the first stanza, in the second line of the second stanza and so on. Ending with the repeated line was very effective. This is a world, where the time has come, that "all steps are printed worldwide." You encourage the reader to think, and I always like that in what I read. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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This is very deep and thought-provoking. The flow, the rhymes, the meter are all impeccable. You did very well on your first try. I wouldn't have known, it was your first try if, you hadn't had mentioned it, in your Author's notes. I see, by the artwork you chose, that the two people are stepping forward. The artwork made me anticipate a poem about a personal relationship. But your message goes much deeper than that. You did an excellent job of repeating the first line in the first stanza, in the second line of the second stanza and so on. Ending with the repeated line was very effective. This is a world, where the time has come, that "all steps are printed worldwide." You encourage the reader to think, and I always like that in what I read. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Wow! this is very encouraging and I thank you very much****kahpot
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You're welcome, and I'm glad you were encouraged by my review.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Anne B Francis
All steps are printed worldwide its like leaving foot prints in the snow we go in an everlasting circle. We follow our own rules instead of following like sheep make our own mistakes but not forgetting to put them right
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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All steps are printed worldwide its like leaving foot prints in the snow we go in an everlasting circle. We follow our own rules instead of following like sheep make our own mistakes but not forgetting to put them right
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Boogienights
This is an amazing poem, I love the cadence of it, the repeating lines and I especially love the positive message you put forth.. I'm not really schooled in the technical aspect of poetry, but I know what I like!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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This is an amazing poem, I love the cadence of it, the repeating lines and I especially love the positive message you put forth.. I'm not really schooled in the technical aspect of poetry, but I know what I like!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much, I am not well schooled either though trying to learn****kahpot
Comment from mally mack
Quite the powerful message here. I think that it is often overlooked that we are all connected and should be treading cautiously because of this. All pieces of the same puzzle and that includes the planet as well. I do like your flow.
*I won't lie, every time I read worldwide, all I could think of is Step-Brothers and their Prestige WorldWide Sales pitch* My apologies if you have no clue what I'm talking about!
Great poem
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Quite the powerful message here. I think that it is often overlooked that we are all connected and should be treading cautiously because of this. All pieces of the same puzzle and that includes the planet as well. I do like your flow.
*I won't lie, every time I read worldwide, all I could think of is Step-Brothers and their Prestige WorldWide Sales pitch* My apologies if you have no clue what I'm talking about!
Great poem
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much and I will admit, no clue but I will try to follow up "step Brothers was this an English comedy"? ****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
You did a terrific job with your first quatern kahpot. WOW. I am most impressed not only with your adept cadence and rhyme but also by the depth of your subject.
Super, super poem and many thanks for sharing. You are terrific!
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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You did a terrific job with your first quatern kahpot. WOW. I am most impressed not only with your adept cadence and rhyme but also by the depth of your subject.
Super, super poem and many thanks for sharing. You are terrific!
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much, this is (was) the review I was waiting for yet worrying about as I had put your name forward and was not sure if that was correct, but I wanted to thank you for all your help****kahpot
Comment from meeshu
this is so cool! you wrote a cascade poem! nice job and a great one too. one of my favorite forms, rhyming the recurring line on the way down is a fun challenge. you get a Sixer for your sense of adventure. excellent, Kahpot............meeshu
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this is so cool! you wrote a cascade poem! nice job and a great one too. one of my favorite forms, rhyming the recurring line on the way down is a fun challenge. you get a Sixer for your sense of adventure. excellent, Kahpot............meeshu
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thank you so very much, I am enjoying my adventures****kahpot
Comment from Lady Jane
Yes, Yes, Yes! You did it. This is solid and well developed. The message/content is timely and the presentation, well... flawless. "Knowing all steps are printed worldwide" - what a profound statement. Ponder on that for a moment. Each and every progress, good or bad, is measured and 'printed' or 'sealed' worldwide. Just a profound piece of poetic genius here. Nicely done, kahpot! Keep 'em coming.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Yes, Yes, Yes! You did it. This is solid and well developed. The message/content is timely and the presentation, well... flawless. "Knowing all steps are printed worldwide" - what a profound statement. Ponder on that for a moment. Each and every progress, good or bad, is measured and 'printed' or 'sealed' worldwide. Just a profound piece of poetic genius here. Nicely done, kahpot! Keep 'em coming.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Wow! what a very encouraging review, with wonderful comments like these I will, definately keep trying, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from royowen
You've done well with this quatern Kahpot, these quirky variations on tetrametrically driven rhyming quatrains are not terribly difficult, if one is used to rhythmic, rhyming poetry, but you've done a great job, with this quatern, rhymed in abab rhyme, well done, good rhythm and consistency, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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You've done well with this quatern Kahpot, these quirky variations on tetrametrically driven rhyming quatrains are not terribly difficult, if one is used to rhythmic, rhyming poetry, but you've done a great job, with this quatern, rhymed in abab rhyme, well done, good rhythm and consistency, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
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Most welcome
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO KAHPOT: I can relate to your work here, because it brings my mind to the book of, PROVERBS; in our Holy Bible; chapter 3: and the verse 5&6. "Trust in the Lord with all your heart, and lean not on your own understanding. In all your ways acknowledge Him, and He will direct your paths. There's more in; PSALMS chapter 37: verse 23 & 24 "The steps of a good man are ordered by our Lord, and He delights in his way. Though he fall, he shall not be utterly cast down; for our Lord upholds him with His hand." You've done a good work here, KAHPOT. God bless you, my brother. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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HELLO KAHPOT: I can relate to your work here, because it brings my mind to the book of, PROVERBS; in our Holy Bible; chapter 3: and the verse 5&6. "Trust in the Lord with all your heart, and lean not on your own understanding. In all your ways acknowledge Him, and He will direct your paths. There's more in; PSALMS chapter 37: verse 23 & 24 "The steps of a good man are ordered by our Lord, and He delights in his way. Though he fall, he shall not be utterly cast down; for our Lord upholds him with His hand." You've done a good work here, KAHPOT. God bless you, my brother. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
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Thank you very much for your very encouraging review****kahpot
