GULBRANDR- God's Sword
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Joshua Meets a Cousin"A child is born who will be a champion
3 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
Hey kiddo... I think you've made a good decision here. My attention span is zero and this was just right... I can't wait to see what happens when oyster finds out. Thanks so much. yours, diana
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Hey kiddo... I think you've made a good decision here. My attention span is zero and this was just right... I can't wait to see what happens when oyster finds out. Thanks so much. yours, diana
Comment Written 31-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2018
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Yes I am finding that shorter chapters are better. I was re-reading and re-doing a few trying to get inspired and in the mood to finish it. I am struggling and sometimes a re-read helps. Thanks so much. Rox
Comment from royowen
It had trouble connecting this one with the previous, unless, of course, it has been meant. I'm quite happy to review them individually. Dear Dyster misses his master, but it looks like they're United? Joshua meets a huge, friendly man who rides a gigantic dragon, I'm so glad you continue your series Rox, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : He seem(ed) young and old all at once.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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It had trouble connecting this one with the previous, unless, of course, it has been meant. I'm quite happy to review them individually. Dear Dyster misses his master, but it looks like they're United? Joshua meets a huge, friendly man who rides a gigantic dragon, I'm so glad you continue your series Rox, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : He seem(ed) young and old all at once.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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I was just splitting up this chapter as it was too long. Just going over the story again. Sorry I thought I explained that and said not to read it. ={ I wish there was a way to post without publishing it, just for the purpose of fixing chapter in books. Sorry for the confusion. Rox
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Roxanne, a good lead-in and descriptions in those first few paragraphs where you set the scene so effectively. I liked the character of Joshua and felt the fear when he encountered the giant, and what a great ending. To find out he was waiting for him is counterintuitive, and I appreciated that as a reader. It certainly piques the curiosity to see where this will go from here.
Nicely written and it is a work I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Ana.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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Hello Roxanne, a good lead-in and descriptions in those first few paragraphs where you set the scene so effectively. I liked the character of Joshua and felt the fear when he encountered the giant, and what a great ending. To find out he was waiting for him is counterintuitive, and I appreciated that as a reader. It certainly piques the curiosity to see where this will go from here.
Nicely written and it is a work I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Ana.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2018
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This is an old chapter, I was just splitting it up, as it was long. I wish there was a way to edit chapters with out having to publish them. Sorry. Thought I explained that, but thanks for the great review. =} Rox
