Ace of Hearts
A play becomes too real20 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Pam. A mystery and crime story poem what a novel idea. You keep the story going with good rhyme and flow. In the 9th stanza typo:
"Whenever pris'nors (pris'ners) played some gin"
Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Hi Pam. A mystery and crime story poem what a novel idea. You keep the story going with good rhyme and flow. In the 9th stanza typo:
"Whenever pris'nors (pris'ners) played some gin"
Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Hi Marilyn. Yes you are right. I was thinking of the second syllable having an o. Well ahem then I made it two syllables I held on to that useless fact. Funny how the mind works. Thank you for pointing that out and for the nice review
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
I liked the interesting story within this poem and how you made the experience of someone attending a fictional play turn into a real act of violence. So it was fiction within fiction of that makes sense?? It did to me anyway haha. But I greatly enjoyed it. I liked the rhyme scheme you chose and just the sense of whimsy and fun that I got from it, as well as the dark twist regarding the actor who killed his wife onstage.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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I liked the interesting story within this poem and how you made the experience of someone attending a fictional play turn into a real act of violence. So it was fiction within fiction of that makes sense?? It did to me anyway haha. But I greatly enjoyed it. I liked the rhyme scheme you chose and just the sense of whimsy and fun that I got from it, as well as the dark twist regarding the actor who killed his wife onstage.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2018
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Thank you Hayley for a wonderful review
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You?re welcome x
Comment from AprilViolet
I read this poem more than once. I love this poem! Telling a story this detailed and all in rhyme? You did a great job and I really enjoyed reading "Ace Of Hearts"
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I read this poem more than once. I love this poem! Telling a story this detailed and all in rhyme? You did a great job and I really enjoyed reading "Ace Of Hearts"
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you April for a wonderful review
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Even though this is just a fantasy, I really believe that something like this could happen. I like this beautifully written what if scenario you've presented here. I enjoyed reading this an I applaud you on a skillful and well thought out offering. Well done yet again Pam!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Even though this is just a fantasy, I really believe that something like this could happen. I like this beautifully written what if scenario you've presented here. I enjoyed reading this an I applaud you on a skillful and well thought out offering. Well done yet again Pam!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Jeffrey for your wonderful review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Clever rhymes Pam and I feel a bit disappointed it is fantasy, but you told the story well and I particularly liked:
The lady actress did her best
she bared her legs and puffed her chest
her mouth tried planting kissing marks
with lipstick ruby red and dark
He kept ignoring all her tries
and sobbed and hoped that he would die
I got so bored and went to leave
but she had something up her sleeve.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Clever rhymes Pam and I feel a bit disappointed it is fantasy, but you told the story well and I particularly liked:
The lady actress did her best
she bared her legs and puffed her chest
her mouth tried planting kissing marks
with lipstick ruby red and dark
He kept ignoring all her tries
and sobbed and hoped that he would die
I got so bored and went to leave
but she had something up her sleeve.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hi Dolly. I could not find a real play to fit the poem. That is what imagination is for. Thank you for your wonderful review
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about love, hate and jealousy can make lovers very confused when they think love is to possess someone, hate is to kill the one who makes you unhappy and jealousy is the cause of all evil.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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A very well-written poem about love, hate and jealousy can make lovers very confused when they think love is to possess someone, hate is to kill the one who makes you unhappy and jealousy is the cause of all evil.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Sandra for your wonderful review
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Ace of Hearts, tells a terrific story of where drama and life find a commonality that calls for action. This scene of murder, blending into a story line and presumably affecting the story's future telling is bizarre and entertaining.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This poem, Ace of Hearts, tells a terrific story of where drama and life find a commonality that calls for action. This scene of murder, blending into a story line and presumably affecting the story's future telling is bizarre and entertaining.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Bill for your wonderful review
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Hey I'm as I've already told you several times before you have quite a vivid and intriguing imagination and you make anyting seem possible the way you write. I enjoyed reading the story it was quite intriguing and exciting and a good story line. I've been out just moved in my place two weeks this past Saturday and had a birthday celebration for an African guy that I met who had never had a birthday celebration.. So I really really been busy getting in my place I'm in now and trying to catch up hope you've been doing well are as well as can be
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hey I'm as I've already told you several times before you have quite a vivid and intriguing imagination and you make anyting seem possible the way you write. I enjoyed reading the story it was quite intriguing and exciting and a good story line. I've been out just moved in my place two weeks this past Saturday and had a birthday celebration for an African guy that I met who had never had a birthday celebration.. So I really really been busy getting in my place I'm in now and trying to catch up hope you've been doing well are as well as can be
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Congrats on getting moved in. Thank you so very much for the extra star and for your delightful review
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My pleasure
Comment from kiwijenny
Coolest ace card picture
Ooo I hope this never happens..blurring of life with acting
Audience gets what they want...blood lust
Yikes yikes yikes
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Coolest ace card picture
Ooo I hope this never happens..blurring of life with acting
Audience gets what they want...blood lust
Yikes yikes yikes
God bless
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you kiwi for such a nice review
Comment from Robbie Yates
Fantastic use of rhythm and rhyme in this poem, Pam - and what a fascinating tale. I love the idea of a text (poem) about a text (play). Well-written, great job.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Fantastic use of rhythm and rhyme in this poem, Pam - and what a fascinating tale. I love the idea of a text (poem) about a text (play). Well-written, great job.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Robbie for a wonderful review
